If you like blowjobs, this is your story.

[mikey2much]

HI guys,

Well I have tried to pay my dues with a non-erotica story and I am ashamed to say that nobody is reading it. It seems that my fans will only follow me so far.

So in an effort to get back my readers I have written a nice little stroke piece.

Light up a fat one and enjoy it.

The link is in my sig, the story is called 'Glory Hole Blues'.

mikey

 

[AsylumSeeker]

You had me at "blowjob". I find no link, and I'm no fan, but just interested to read another version of a BJ as I've been writing of one and wondered how mine compared.

Apparently they're not in the same "ball" park. Geez, did I actually write that? Sorry ya'll!

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

The link in you sig doesn't work, Mikey. Here's the story http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=306265

I'm not sure where to start. There are some good points and others you could have done better in this story.

The overall discriptions were lifelike, but you characters seem flat. And I'm not sure why you even mention Sloan in the beginning. She really has nothing to do with the story. You went on about Sammy's relationship with her for five paragraphs then she got lost until she's mentioned once near the end. I think a passing mention would have done just as much, since the story is about a sex/book shop anyway, and not about his relationship with his wife.

Your story really starts in paragraph nine when he goes to the bookstore. Fron that point on, the story is quite good.

Wendy seems rather confusing to me. She enters the story late, really doesn't do too much to move the story, then disappears at the end. There is no relationship that develops with her at all. Her slave is much more important to the story and you've left him completely faceless.

Generally, the story was pretty good. Not my cup of tea, but good

 

[mikey2much]

Yeah, too much talk not enough action

I think you are right about that. I am going to have to start sending you my stories before I post them. I think that you called the shot on the non erotica story also. I should have told it a different way all together.

I am working on a story now that I am trying to get 'right'. When I think it is ready I will send you a copy and let you see what you think. Would you mind or would you have the time?

thank you for your help Jenny.
mikey

 

[mikey2much]

The link

Hi Jenny,
I checked the links on my sig and they all seem to work for me. However another person has told me that they were not working.
Any ideals what I should do?
mikey

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Hi Jenny,
I checked the links on my sig and they all seem to work for me. However another person has told me that they were not working.
Any ideals what I should do?
mikey

Not sure. They are working this afternoon. Maybe Lit screwing around. Who knows.