Just started writing and published a couple of stories. This is my most viewed so far, am grateful for any feedback good or bad: https://literotica.com/s/chemistry-lesson-1
Feedback request: Chemistry Lesson
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nice90sguy
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I enjoyed it -- imagining myself as the chem prof. At one point you say "they" instead of "he" -- not sure if that was intentional.
Read your other stories too. Your stories work from a male perspective, even though the POV is clearly female, which is cool.
Read your other stories too. Your stories work from a male perspective, even though the POV is clearly female, which is cool.
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I've read all three of your stories. In general, I like the style and pace of your works. If these very short stories are what you enjoy writing, then keep doing what you're doing. However, I do believe you have the inner emotion and imagination to expand and flesh out the stories. As you no doubt noticed on the comments for Roman Women, the general opinion seems to be that they wanted more.
Just to give some perspective; One Literotica screen page is about 3750 words — or about 20KB of plain text (on my computer).
So, hopefully the feedback you've already been given from the readers — and I'll offer my suggestion to consider writing a 3 or 4 page story to see if that works for you — I think you have the skill to grow in your story-craft. Keep writing !!!
Just to give some perspective; One Literotica screen page is about 3750 words — or about 20KB of plain text (on my computer).
So, hopefully the feedback you've already been given from the readers — and I'll offer my suggestion to consider writing a 3 or 4 page story to see if that works for you — I think you have the skill to grow in your story-craft. Keep writing !!!
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