Feedback Appreciated - esp from you ladies!

[Guest]

Ok...first thing that hits me right off the bat, babe, is that you need to decide what tense that story is in and be very careful to stick with it. The only time the tense in a story should change is if you've got a flash back sequence and I wouldn't recomend that at this juncture.
Second thing...understand that this is a personal thing for me...i really dont want to read a "I do to you" story that's been writen by a stranger. It's writen as if it should be intamate and personal but I don't know the person and they're talking about my body parts in the wrong way. It's just creepy...but that is just me and one person not liking that kind of an angle on a story should not, in any way, disuade you from going for it.
Third thing...most of the problems that I saw would be cleared up with the help of a really good editor, which you could redily find in the editor's forum.

Good luck, babe.

He isn't interested.

Took his mousepad and hit the road.

 

[Tom Collins]

Interesting.

You tossed out some bait, didn't get the response you expected (Lit womenfolk to swoon at your feet because of your amazing erotica) so now you decide to take your keyboard and go home, first stopping to insult the lot of us on your way out.

Yes, there was some playing at your expense, but there were also well wishes, a few 'welcomes' to Literotica, some honest critique and miscellaneous helpful suggestions.

And yet you feel the need to spit on all of that. Good luck finding a more helpful forum (many of us post stories on several different sites - we know).

Don't let the door hit you on your ass as you leave.

I agree with you...I wish I'd taken the time to read the whole thread before replying...
Strikes me as a rather typical masculine responce..."I'm a bad lover?! Well, that's because you're a fridgid bitch!!" *snort*

 

[Guest]

I agree with you...I wish I'd taken the time to read the whole thread before replying...
Strikes me as a rather typical masculine responce..."I'm a bad lover?! Well, that's because you're a fridgid bitch!!" *snort*