Empty (a poem)

[Silverluna]

Empty hearts pouring out empty dreams
Lying words that have no creulty
You're eyes are vacant, cold, and lifeless.

The spring in your step, the spark, is gone.
The only thing you have left is you're memories,
And even they are not safe from the bleakness.

Death might be a release for some,
But for you it wouldn't matter,
You died years ago.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

I'm not a poet...nor do i pretend to be one...this just was in my head so i wrote it...

 

[kotori]

I'm not a poet...nor do i pretend to be one...this just was in my head so i wrote it...

We all have the potential to be poets, when we let the stuff in our head leak out through our heart.

 

[BustyTheClown]

Empty hearts pouring out empty dreams
Lying words that have no creulty
You're eyes are vacant, cold, and lifeless.

The spring in your step, the spark, is gone.
The only thing you have left is you're memories,
And even they are not safe from the bleakness.

Death might be a release for some,
But for you it wouldn't matter,
You died years ago.
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*

I'm not a poet...nor do i pretend to be one...this just was in my head so i wrote it...

Sad poem, but potent -- especially the last line. I've always appreciated poetry/prose whose last line is a kicker. Thanks for sharing.

 

[Tx girl]

Hey for the record i liked it

 

[Silverluna]

Re: Re: Empty (a poem)

Sad poem, but potent -- especially the last line. I've always appreciated poetry/prose whose last line is a kicker. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks...yeah its pretty fucking depressing...

 

[T.H. Oughts]

I liked it Silverluna... keep writing

 

[Silverluna]

woah...someone likes this? *mock gasp of astonishment*

Thanks T.H. ^_^

 

[T.H. Oughts]

A friend told me a couple of years ago:

"Poetry is like an abstract painting.
It is meant to stimulate the mind, get it thinking.
It shouldn't tell you the obvious.
It's something to savour and think about."

And that is what you acomplished Silverluna.

 

[Silverluna]

A friend told me a couple of years ago:

"Poetry is like an abstract painting.
It is meant to stimulate the mind, get it thinking.
It shouldn't tell you the obvious.
It's something to savour and think about."

And that is what you acomplished Silverluna.

Gosh...*all forms of articulation leave her* That's umm..super sweet! If only my old bat of an english teacher saw it that way

 

[T.H. Oughts]

If only my old bat of an english teacher saw it that way

Sometimes I think they were the worst of the lot.. they over diagnosed everything to much....