Dominate me?

[heelzup]

Hi all- Please check out the true story of my first B/D experience and let me know what you think.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=74025
I love being dominated by both men and woman. Wanna play?
Let me hear from you!
On My Knees,
Angel

 

[jon.hayworth]

Heelzup, checked out your story and thought it was pretty good, as a fellow writer I rated it because it was: (a) literate and spellchecked; (b) well formatted with short punchy paragraphs - all too often first time writers produce eye-numbing long paragraphs (maybe influenced by the blessed Maquis' style).

I would suggest that there is scope for a sequel, the same event written from Angel's pov.

jon

 

[MissTaken]

Have you posted the story in the Story FEedback sextion?

Adn personals have their place too.

I will fetch a link.

Welcome to the forum, feel free to hang out and discuss bdsm issues and take a peek at the stickies at the top of the page.

Best wishes,

MissT