Chicklet vs yayati

[Guest]

At first, they argued on line.

























But soon they both realised they are strongly atracted to each other.

























yayati goes to America on business and they arrange to meet.




























They have wonderful innocent date.

























Chicklet's boyfriend found out and ass rape yayati.

The end.

 

[EarnestImp]

Nice, but lacks character development and dialogue, and the scene transitions are a bit weak.

I was hoping for a more BDSM angle. Do you think you could work in a strap-on covered in industrial abrasive? Into the story, I mean.

 

[EarnestImp]

Duplicate post deleted. %$#!-ing network delays.

 

[penguindance]

 

[Quasimodem]

Nice try CV, but it is too implausible. I mean the part about what KM's boyfriend does.

There is an old saying that just about covers the situation, and nicely points out the weakness of your scenario.

Do you remember that old put down: "I wouldn't fuck Yayati with your cock!"

The rest is sufficiently sick and twisted, so I love it.

 

[Chicklet]

Nice try CV, but it is too implausible. I mean the part about what KM's boyfriend does.

he says *chicklet's* boyfriend, not KM's

 

[Quasimodem]

SORRY!!!

But when I see the word "yayati" my eyes tend to glaze over.

 

[Chicklet]

SORRY!!!

forgiven = )

now, let's let this thread die, shall we?

 

[Puppi]

now, let's let this thread die, shall we?

Why?

<Ducking!!>

 

[Chicklet]

<swings and misses>

DAMNIT, you ducked too soon!

okay, seriously now...

 

[Puppi]

okay, seriously now...

Yes'm.

<Ducking again.>






(Sawwy, I couldn't resist!)

 

[Laurel]

Moved from Story Ideas to the Gen Board because it's not a story idea.