Can This Become a Poem

[Angeline]

There's a thread on the author's hangout board asking what you think is the sexiest word. Well, what an appealing thing to consider! And I, both loving to see how sexy I can write without using explicit or graphic terms (not a value judgment about them, just a word game I like to play) and being a total nerd, went to the online thesaurus and came up with the following.

suggestive
delicate
delectible
whet
carnal
bestir
hedonist
lush
kindle
sybaritic
plush
velvety
wanton
moan
urgent
fevered
thrust
tumesence
liquid
response
trembling
gripping
rippling
passion
spent
scrumptous


So I looked at this list and started moving words around. Sequencing. It started to turn into a poem, I think, but it's not there yet. I like the idea of one word per line and no articles, prepositions, pronouns, punctuation. Can that work? What does this list need if it can become a poem?


Thanks in advance for your comments and advice.

 

[OT]

perhaps a "story" progression, something like this:

suggestively
delicately
delectable

whetting
hedonistic
carnal
desire

kindle
wanton
moaning

urgent
fevered
thrusting

gripping
rippling
passion

trembling
liquid
response

spent


O.T.
peek at my prose

 

[Senna Jawa]

Originally posted by Angeline So I looked at this list and started moving words around. Sequencing. It started to turn into a poem, I think, but it's not there yet. I like the idea of one word per line and no articles, prepositions, pronouns, punctuation. Can that work? What does this list need if it can become a poem?[/B]

People played all kind of games with very short lines, even with fractions of words per line or perhaps two halves from different words. Such poems are not common but they happen from time to time, from an author to another.

In your list you have mostly adjectives and otherwise nouns, several adjective per noun. You may collect/cluster adjectives around nouns. Adjectives may both precede and follow their noun. Then you may try to get a composition by raising the heat of the poem, starting gently, etc., possibly lowering it at the end. If you feel very ambitious you may even try a non-linear composition which would attempt several aspects & phases of love/sex.

For whatever reasons (stresses, melody, mood) you may repeat certain words or even certain combinations. A refrain is a possibility too.

Also, you don't have to be a fanatical purist. You may alternate regular stanzas and vertical sequences of single-word lines.

It should be fun. I am looking forward to see the result of your herculian effort

Regards,

 

[Angeline]

Amorous Thesaurus

OT and Senna, thank you both. Your suggestions are similar and very helpful. I'm off to play with the words and will post a draft for further advice soon.

 

[Senna Jawa]

Re: Amorous Thesaurus

Didn't I already answer Angelina's response? Did some posts vanish recently?

OT and Senna, thank you both.

You are most welcome, Angelina.

Your suggestions are similar

Certainly not!

I'm off to play with the words and will post a draft for further advice soon.

Good luck,

 

[Angeline]

It wasn't the posts that disappeared

it was me. Damn my job and all the other boring daily details that get in the way of poetry. Oh, and it seems I had this jazz poem percolating that had to come out first.

But I'll be back with the thesaurus poem soon.

 

[Unmasked Poet]

Hmmm

Should be interesting. Without seeing the poem I would guess the process of trying to create a poem with those words will be a valuable exercise.

U.P.