bi-polar poetry

[Maria2394]

HI everyone, attempt at a new form here one night, couldnt sleep, played around with some words...this is what I got

take 2 words, they MUST be opposites. verses can be any length, but must be an odd number of lines. Syllables must first be ascending, then when you reach your "long" line in the middle, they must then descend... also, they look better if centered, but thats not necessary

ie line 1-1 syllable\
line2=3 syllables
line 3=5 syllables
line 4 =3 syllables
line 5= 1 syllable

my example follows

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light/dark

*****************
Light
Consumption
Of fuel, Air, Feeling
Radiates
You

*****************

Dark
Withholding
Only Your Presence
My musings
Crave


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have fun, poets!!

 

[annaswirls]

I will re-read this after I have taken my meds lol

sounds do-able



if we are bi-polar already can we just write a normal poem?

 

[Maria2394]

I will re-read this after I have taken my meds lol

sounds do-able



if we are bi-polar already can we just write a normal poem?

yeah sure, why not buuuttt, i only called it that cause it has two poles, up and down, extremes, and a sort of transitory scale to get to both places..now, if youre a rapid cycler, I expect more than one poem from you Lady!!!

hehe

 

[annaswirls]

okay I cheated had a hard time finding a 1 syllable word I wanted to start with.

just say it really fast and it will sound like one lol

these are kind of like modified double diamontes IF I could figure out a way to center them.....




order
takes all my
time and energy
entropy
wins

we
all return
to where it began
anyway-
chaos




~

 

[annaswirls]

~


truth
comfort in
an explanation
until the
why

makes
what was true
a well intended,
uninformed
lie



~

 

[Maria2394]

~


truth
comfort in
an explanation
until the
why

makes
what was true
a well intended,
uninformed
lie



~

YAAAAYYYYY!!!! ( to borrow a quote from Dear sweet Boo!!!

those are great Anna... like I said though, I was just playing around one night...but the length and number of syllables can be differing from one poem to the next, there can be even ones, I was just in an odd mood I suppose..but hey, they are great!!

I knew you'd do one or 2

 

[Icingsugar]

I'm confuzzticated. Was the opposits supposed to be in the beginning of each set on in beginning and end?

Anyway, here's one with the former. More lines was ok, right? I could never say anything sensible in that small format, if I have to watch out for alot of other rules too...

(Added a little rhyming scheme, 'coz I'm a geek. )




This
is a call
for another round
of whatever gets me high
high enough to bleed this blueblood vein
and expose my careless lie
kill this lost-and-found
know-it-all
bliss

That
was my rope
worn through vanity
while I stood a man shaped hole
riding howling high on pills and pain
and the hollow hopeless goal
this insanity
tied my hope
at


/Ice

 

[annaswirls]

I'm confuzzticated. Was the opposits supposed to be in the beginning of each set on in beginning and end?

Anyway, here's one with the former. More lines was ok, right? I could never say anything sensible in that small format, if I have to watch out for alot of other rules too...

(Added a little rhyming scheme, 'coz I'm a geek. )




This
is a call
for another round
of whatever gets me high
high enough to bleed this blueblood vein
and expose my careless lie
kill this lost-and-found
know-it-all
bliss

That
was my rope
worn through vanity
while I stood a man shaped hole
riding howling high on pills and pain
and the hollow hopeless goal
this insanity
tied my hope
at


/Ice

You are not confuzzicated
I am dyslexic
and have always had a hard time
folllowing directions


future posters, PLEASE look at Ice for example not me!~
I will lead you astray!!!!!!!!

Well done Ice Ice baby!
man shaped hole, I love it



Thanks Maria, you knew I couldn't pass this one by, it was too much fun.

AS


~

 

[Icingsugar]

Well done Ice Ice baby!
man shaped hole, I love it

Thx, but credit where credit's due. I stole that blatantly from Neil Gaiman.

 

[*Catbabe*]

Death,
Fate strings snipped,
Solitary step,
Leaving grief,
Gone.

Birth,
Untainted,
Vessel of promise,
Eager steps,
Life.




Thanks Maria.

 

[Guest]

Yin lies still
cool in the eyes
feminine by nature
slow to rise in the daybreak
replying with wetness
when heat is dry
longing yet

Yang shines
leaps from slumber
warm to the heart's core
holding all things in reverence
allowing for our mistakes
answering arid lies
with kisses

 

[Guest]

Dang - read the instructions, Tess!


Yin
the winter
waiting to awake
slow to see
light

Yang
Sings sweetly
Perched in bright sunlight
We long for
spring

 

[Linbido]

UP
takes you down
because when you rise
you're preparing the descent
from being too high
for the grand
scheme

DOWN
brings you up
like up takes you down
always anti momentum
a status quo rule
to sedate
you

 

[jthserra]

The opposite of Blue?

Blue/Gray

Blue
granite stones
line the distant hills
of Shiloh's
dead

Gray
wood crosses
shadows Gettysburg
the silence
lives

 

[champagne1982]

Wet
And ready
Every time you smile
Ready for
You

Dry
Your eyes now
Little boy blue tears
Aren't needed
Here

 

[Linbido]

With Ice's rhyme thing added.

Noise
to obscure
microverse in me,
universe on the outside,
spreads a timeline tree.
So raise your
voice.

Sing,
to notions,
choose a destiny.
Board a ferry, catch the tide
through eternity,
on ocean's
wing.

 

[Guest]

Re: The opposite of Blue?

Blue/Gray

Blue
granite stones
line the distant hills
of Shiloh's
dead

Gray
wood crosses
shadows Gettysburg
the silence
lives

Strictly speaking the opposite of blue is orange on the colour wheel......


Blue
underpaint.
rush-seat bedroom chair
that's why it
glows

bright
orange paint
over cyan blue
Vincent had
eyes

 

[The_Fool]

Thx, but credit where credit's due. I stole that blatantly from Neil Gaiman.

One of my favorite authors.

 

[perks]

awake
in the dark
without sleep or
quiet dreams of you
sleeping by me
when you come
to bed

asleep
in my bed
without me or
quiet dreams, because
you woke her up
and now I'm
awake

 

[denis hale]

That is

pretty damn good

duck girl!

 

[Angeline]

then
remember
red brick house, playground
dogwood tree
time

now
all grown up
faces in my teacup
still remain
live

 

[Linbido]

words
come easy
hover in the world
above his
kiss

screams
inhale me
whispered, but too sharp
to ever
miss

 

[Angeline]

him
always the closed mind
and always angry for naught
with always some dumb axe to grind
who knew what simple word
catapulted him to unwind
absurd

you
an open smiling face
kind even at sorrow's toll
behaving with such natural grace
your heart full of soul
rocks my good space
roll

 

[eagleyez]

him
always the closed mind
and always angry for naught
with always some dumb axe to grind
who knew what simple word
catapulted him to unwind
absurd

you
an open smiling face
kind even at sorrow's toll
behaving with such natural grace
your heart full of soul
rocks my good space
roll

A minor
C
G
F#minor

sway with me

 

[perks]

shout
along
with music
base beating
rhythm gyrating
thick hips around
and around
dripping
sweat

quiet
your pulse
suck water
from a bottle
feel it spill down
your sweaty cleavage
slowing your dance
your rhythm
and my
gaze