BDSM Writing Challenge

[RJMasters]

A failing? Hey! Cut me some slack here, Mr. Masters - that's the first piece of fiction I've written since high school!

Seriously, though... when I sat down to write, I was trying to imagine - as honestly and realistically as possible - what it would feel like to submit this way for the first time.

This was honest imagination - not fantasy - if you know what I mean.

As far as insecurities go... hmmm... how can I explain this?

I did not know about BDSM until I was 44. Literally - I had not even heard of dominance and submission. For 30 years, I had fantasies of being "forced" to do things sexually (no pain involved; always lots of pleasure; but I was never even remotely in control).

For 30 years, I thought I was a perverted freak for having sick fantasies of rape.

Then one day - totally by accident - I stumbled upon a website discussing BDSM. Not a porn site, but one that discussed dominance & submission in a respectful way. I read ever word of that website. Then I started looking for more.

Have you read many of the Lit BDSM stories? I have. There are many, many tales of Doms in their 40s & 50s. But the girls are always young and beautiful. Sure, you might say - this is fantasy! But that's exactly the point. Fantasy depicts what is ultimately desired, does it not?

I have no idea as to the age of those who post here. But most of the avatars indicate that female posters either are - or are imagining themselves to be - young and beautiful. Why do you think that is?

Keep in mind that I do not actually know anyone who is active in this lifestyle. It is as if I am outside, looking through a window into a room I have never entered. And what I see is a room full of powerful men of all ages... and lovely young women.

The age insecurity that surfaced when I responded to your writing challenge surprised me. I am a very attractive 45-year-old woman, who is not shy about telling people her age and usually never gives it a second thought. But after drafting that paragragh, I had to spend a fortune at Victoria's Secret to feel sexy again! Sheesh!!!

As an excercise in self-introspection, it ended up being quite an expensive episode for me!

Thanks for the feedback, RJ. I hope this helps you understand "what to make of it."

Alice

Actually Alice I did enjoy it very much...my parting comment...(and yet...how real indeed) I was paying honor to you in that you did reveal a "realness" that many keep hidden. I saw it there, the insecurity...even the lie...not just to him but to herself as well. You captured it so well. In the face of the romantic ideal, how can simple submission stack up against the eye candy....to which I say....it stacks up well indeed.

Heartfelt submission is what makes a person beautiful to me. The tears of the heart and the shutter of the soul because my presence is near. That kind of beauty beats eyecandy anyday of the week.

"And so in the days of old this is how the woman of that time made themselves beautiful in that they did not give into fear but called their man Master."

 

[alice_underneath]

Actually Alice I did enjoy it very much...my parting comment...(and yet...how real indeed) I was paying honor to you in that you did reveal a "realness" that many keep hidden. I saw it there, the insecurity...even the lie...not just to him but to herself as well. You captured it so well. In the face of the romantic ideal, how can simple submission stack up against the eye candy....to which I say....it stacks up well indeed.

Heartfelt submission is what makes a person beautiful to me. The tears of the heart and the shutter of the soul because my presence is near. That kind of beauty beats eyecandy anyday of the week.

"And so in the days of old this is how the woman of that time made themselves beautiful in that they did not give into fear but called their man Master."

That was very kind, RJ.

Thanks again,
Alice

 

[RJMasters]

Helpful

Endeavoring earnestly

Responsible and reckless

Soft eyes and smiles

Being who she is

Understanding who I am

Making a difference for both of us

Intelligent

Self-confident

Soothing the beast within

Inviting and warm

Obeys from the heart

Never taken for granted

 

[Kajira Callista]

Helpful

Endeavoring earnestly

Responsible and reckless

Soft eyes and smiles

Being who she is

Understanding who I am

Making a difference for both of us

Intelligent

Self-confident

Soothing the beast within

Inviting and warm

Obeys from the heart

Never taken for granted

very nice

 

[alice_underneath]

Helpful

Endeavoring earnestly

Responsible and reckless

Soft eyes and smiles

Being who she is

Understanding who I am

Making a difference for both of us

Intelligent

Self-confident

Soothing the beast within

Inviting and warm

Obeys from the heart

Never taken for granted

Notwithstanding the fact that you transposed two letters...

.... this is lovely.

I'm sure that whomever you are describing will be profoundly moved.

Alice

 

[FurryFury]

God you people are killing me. This thread is just full of talent and such delicious stuff I won't be adding to it except to say, thank you.

Also Alice I know exactly how it feels what you describe minus the having a Master part. I'm over it now but 44 was tough!

Lovely thread all and keep it coming!

*kisses and hugs*

Fury

 

[@}-}rebecca----]

Notwithstanding the fact that you transposed two letters...

.... this is lovely.

I'm sure that whomever you are describing will be profoundly moved.

Alice

~ amen ~

 

[alice_underneath]

The challenge:

To write a paragraph or poem where each sentence starts with a letter from the acronym:

H E R S U B M I S S I O N

That is 13 sentences or lines.

Same instructions, but with the acronym:

H I S D O M I N A N C E

Any volunteers?

P.S. to Fury: Thank you very much.

 

[@}-}rebecca----]

His hands submissive abide inherent will

Instruments of love and pathos

Sadist so prominent in his desire to feed

Do I care, should I care. I will Sir

On seven days on seven shores I will Sir

Made of cold steel resolute . I think not Sir

Intense man, who are you , the brooding Shepard of my soul

No terror breathing. In this expression, he has his demons leashed

Armistice diffusing my chaos , effortless and generous he stands

No Scholar ever knew me better, No Virtuoso saw in me a finer art

Compliance a myth in his shadow , who would struggle ?

Emancipate. Should we care for words Sir? Then I listened.....

Same instructions, but with the acronym:

H I S D O M I N A N C E

Any volunteers?

P.S. to Fury: Thank you very much.

 

[sexslut]

Her submission

Quote:
Originally Posted by RJMasters
The challenge:

To write a paragraph or poem where each sentence starts with a letter from the acronym:

H E R S U B M I S S I O N

That is 13 sentences or lines.


Here's my try, I hope you enjoy
Her Submission
**************
Her pain is the gift she gives to me

Every mark a satiny badge.

Roaring out she screams in love

Suspended from our fourpost bed.

Unable to fathom a reason for this.

Because there isn't a ryhme.

Masterfully denyed, each time she sighs

Insistantly she yearns.

She grips higher ineffectually.

She slumps and cries, aroused.

I am full of passionant intensity, then

Onwards we go to the clouds....

NOW! She says it's my turn!!! I cringe.

 

[alice_underneath]

Here's my try, I hope you enjoy
Her Submission
**************
Her pain is the gift she gives to me

Every mark a satiny badge.

Roaring out she screams in love

Suspended from our fourpost bed.

Unable to fathom a reason for this.

Because there isn't a ryhme.

Masterfully denyed, each time she sighs

Insistantly she yearns.

She grips higher ineffectually.

She slumps and cries, aroused.

I am full of passionant intensity, then

Onwards we go to the clouds....

NOW! She says it's my turn!!! I cringe.

Lots of energy in that one! Great twist at the end. Nice job.

Alice

 

[alice_underneath]

His hands submissive to his owned will

Instruments of love and pathos

Sadist so prominent in his desire to feed

Do I care, should I care. I will Sir

On seven days on seven shores I will Sir

Made of cool cold steel . I think not Sir

Intense man, who are you , the brooding Shepard of my soul

No terror breathing. In this expression, he has his demons leashed

Armistice diffusing my chaos , effortless and generous he stands

No Scholar ever knew me better, No virtuoso saw in me a finer art

Compliance a myth in his shadow , who would struggle ?

Emancipate. Should we care for words Sir? Then I listened.....

Rebecca,

Your avatar is my favorite here at Lit. So beautiful, and such a perfect match for this poem.

You make me believe that you know this man - that you are describing an actual human being, rather than a Super Dom plucked from fantasy.

And your response to him is exquisite. Thank you for sharing it.

Alice

 

[sexslut]

His Dominance

Quote:
Originally Posted by alice_underneath
Same instructions, but with the acronym:

H I S D O M I N A N C E
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Thanks for the encouragement and the inspiration.
Here's another, I hope you like it.
His dominance
********************
He uses her love for him

Incredibly she still does.

Sensual assault assured

Despite the damage caused.

Omnipotent in his domain

MR. loves his little slut .

Incredibly she still does, too,

No pain is too much .

Analysis would be painful, though( analysis is the mindfuck)

No denying his wild hairs. And

Considering their complicity , there's

Ecstasy if she dares.

 

[Joe Schmoe]

His Dominance

Hands upon her body
Inviting by his touch
Supportive when she falters
Demanding never too much

Obligated to duty
Master is his right
Instinctive to her nature
Never holds too tight

Always stays consistant
No doubt in him has she
Commanding just by presence
Empassioned for her is he

 

[alice_underneath]

His dominance
********************
He uses her love for him

Incredibly she still does.

Sensual assault assured

Despite the damage caused.

Omnipotent in his domain

MR. loves his little slut .

Incredibly she still does, too,

No pain is too much .

Analysis would be painful, though( analysis is the mindfuck)

No denying his wild hairs. And

Considering their complicity , there's

Ecstasy if she dares.

Thanks for that peek into the world of sado-masochism. It's a world I have never entered, so it is hard for me to wrap my mind around concepts such as: "No pain is too much."

But again - your last line is my favorite. "Considering their complicity, there's Ecstasy if she dares." Perhaps that explains everything!

Alice

 

[alice_underneath]

Hands upon her body
Inviting by his touch
Supportive when she falters
Demanding never too much

Obligated to duty
Master is his right
Instictive to her nature
Never holds too tight

Always stays consistant
No doubt in him is she
Commanding just by presence
Empassioned for her is he

A few weeks ago on this thread, Kajira Callista responded to one of your poems simply be writing: *fans self*.

I laughed out loud when I read her response, because it summed up what I was thinking so perfectly. You have a very sensual way of writing. I can't really put my finger on it, or explain why. You just do!

"Commanding just by presence". I actually know a few men like this. I have no idea as to their sexual preferences (unfortunately! ), but I know exactly what you mean. This guy doesn't have to yell, "DO IT NOW!" People respect him simply because of the way he is standing there. Like charisma, this attribute is impossible to explain - but undeniable in some people.

I have a question about your poem. You are describing the ideal, are you not? That is - even the guy with the commanding presence makes mistakes. He is a "Master" because he strives for the perfection implied by those "never" and "always" lines - not because he has achieved the unachievable. Is that right?

My favorite line was: "Obligated to duty/Master is his right." The distinction between the concepts of "obligation" and "right" is quite interesting, and succinctly made.

I enjoyed the poem very much. Thanks for writing it.
Alice

 

[Red Sonja]

All right! I'll give it a go... but be kind, most of my writing these days is technical.

His Dominance
_________________________
His look, his touch demand obedience. It's his
Integrity and strength that allow her the deep
Surrender for her secret and sole
Desire is to serve, and love
One man, this one who is worthy.

Many had wanted her and begged
Igniting the flames of desire for the man who could see
Not just the superficial.

Against the odds, she thought, that she would find
Not just another wanna-be lover but a
Commander, this man who is complete within himself
Entire.

 

[sexslut]

Alice's-Her Submission

Quote:Not sure what to make of that Alice, interesting though, a struggle, a failing to be honest, fears and insecurities...and yet...how real indeed. (RJMasters)
*****************************************************
Very real. I could feel the incredible angst in this one. I think it's my favorite
*****************************************************

Quote:
Originally Posted by alice_underneath
Her lips are slightly parted, and her breath comes quickly. Every muscle in her slender body quivers as she stands for inspection before him. Rosy peaks above smooth white skin. Soft auburn hair, and eyes that gaze at him in adoration. Unable to control her body, she trembles with anticipation and desire. But then the demon within her wakes to growl and bite at her soul. Memories of her own body haunt her. Images of youthful beauty assault her consciousness.... actresses and models.... avatars and calendar girls.... the star of every erotic story she has ever read. She is forty five years old, and her demon shrieks and flails inside her head. She struggles to keep the turmoil off her face. "Is anything wrong?" he asks, lifting her chin with his fingers. Overcome by the gentle power of his touch, she hesitates before answering. "No, Sir," she whispers, hoping he will not catch the lie.

 

[@}-}rebecca----]

Thank you for the compliments Alice your very generous and I (looks around at other posts here) am in fine company. I enjoy this thread and the

challenges, it encourages me to write which I rarely do.

Rebecca,

Your avatar is my favorite here at Lit. So beautiful, and such a perfect match for this poem.

You make me believe that you know this man - that you are describing an actual human being, rather than a Super Dom plucked from fantasy.

And your response to him is exquisite. Thank you for sharing it.

Alice

 

[alice_underneath]

Very real. I could feel the incredible angst in this one. I think it's my favorite.

Wow! That means a lot to me.

Thank you very much.

Alice

 

[Joe Schmoe]

A few weeks ago on this thread, Kajira Callista responded to one of your poems simply be writing: *fans self*.

I laughed out loud when I read her response, because it summed up what I was thinking so perfectly. You have a very sensual way of writing. I can't really put my finger on it, or explain why. You just do!

"Commanding just by presence". I actually know a few men like this. I have no idea as to their sexual preferences (unfortunately! ), but I know exactly what you mean. This guy doesn't have to yell, "DO IT NOW!" People respect him simply because of the way he is standing there. Like charisma, this attribute is impossible to explain - but undeniable in some people.

I have a question about your poem. You are describing the ideal, are you not? That is - even the guy with the commanding presence makes mistakes. He is a "Master" because he strives for the perfection implied by those "never" and "always" lines - not because he has achieved the unachievable. Is that right?

My favorite line was: "Obligated to duty/Master is his right." The distinction between the concepts of "obligation" and "right" is quite interesting, and succinctly made.

I enjoyed the poem very much. Thanks for writing it.
Alice

My intent (hopefully) was not to portray the uberdom but one that understands himself and the road he is on never ends. Striving for perfection while knowing it will never be obtained. Understanding that a tight grip can crush or allow something to be squeezed from their hand. That projection is by quiet confidence, not by words spewed from the mouth. That everyone has limitations as well as strengths and weaknesses and is able to see them, including in himself.

I hope that answered your question(s).

Thank you. I am always thrilled when someone comes to like my scribblings.

 

[alice_underneath]

All right! I'll give it a go... but be kind, most of my writing these days is technical.

His Dominance
_________________________
His look, his touch demand obedience. It's his
Integrity and strength that allow her the deep
Surrender for her secret and sole
Desire is to serve, and love
One man, this one who is worthy.

Many had wanted her and begged
Igniting the flames of desire for the man who could see
Not just the superficial.

Against the odds, she thought, that she would find
Not just another wanna-be lover but a
Commander, this man who is complete within himself
Entire.

Perhaps I'm distracted by the... ummm... subject matter, but this not seem "technical" to me!

I love the phrase: "not just another wanna-be lover".

I hope "she" finds (or has found) her "Commander".

Thanks, I enjoyed this piece very much.

Alice

 

[alice_underneath]

My intent (hopefully) was not to portray the uberdom but one that understands himself and the road he is on never ends. Striving for perfection while knowing it will never be obtained. Understanding that a tight grip can crush or allow something to be squeezed from their hand. That projection is by quiet confidence, not by words spewed from the mouth. That everyone has limitations as well as strengths and weaknesses and is able to see them, including in himself.

I hope that answered your question(s).

Thank you. I am always thrilled when someone comes to like my scribblings.

Yes, it does answer my question.

"Striving for perfection while knowing it will never be obtained." That's exactly what I thought you meant. Thanks for the confirmation.

As for those "scribblings".... hmmm. This makes me wonder. Is excessive modesty one of His attributes, too?

 

[Joe Schmoe]

Yes, it does answer my question.

"Striving for perfection while knowing it will never be obtained." That's exactly what I thought you meant. Thanks for the confirmation.

As for those "scribblings".... hmmm. This makes me wonder. Is excessive modesty one of His attributes, too?

You are kind alice.

 

[Red Sonja]

Perhaps I'm distracted by the... ummm... subject matter, but this not seem "technical" to me!

I love the phrase: "not just another wanna-be lover".

I hope "she" finds (or has found) her "Commander".

Thanks, I enjoyed this piece very much.

Alice

Thank you for your kind words. I really empathize with your piece too... that feeling, the way you describe the lying... I can honestly tell you that it captured the way I have felt on numerous occasions. Very powerful!