Austin8
Literotica Guru
- Joined
- Mar 15, 2009
- Posts
- 12,779
Are we commenting on these now? I should respond to this and I'd like to comment on Hidden Archives since I didn't get to that one before.
Hey SnS I think responses to critiques are waiting till after the challenge has ended. but comments on the entries are ok.
 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		

 One technical issue is that the lighting on the drawing seems to be a lot brighter than the lighting on the background, maybe darkening the drawing or lightening the background would make it look like it fit together a bit better, although it's not jarring the way it is.  A Pygmalion and Galatea story is always cute, but I'm not sure this captures that emotion as strongly as it could - can't really see the inventor's face from this angle, and the gynoid is missing enough pieces to be a little creepy, although she has a nice facial expression.  That little detail with the dripping is interesting, I like that.
   One technical issue is that the lighting on the drawing seems to be a lot brighter than the lighting on the background, maybe darkening the drawing or lightening the background would make it look like it fit together a bit better, although it's not jarring the way it is.  A Pygmalion and Galatea story is always cute, but I'm not sure this captures that emotion as strongly as it could - can't really see the inventor's face from this angle, and the gynoid is missing enough pieces to be a little creepy, although she has a nice facial expression.  That little detail with the dripping is interesting, I like that.
		 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		 
 
		