Anyone Care to Help with Some Feedback?

[LGL]

I am looking for thoughtful, insigthful, honest, and critical feedback. The story is posted at another site but unfortunaly my story doesn't conform to lit guidlines. the feedback I receive from the other site is usually positive but limited to "hot dude" or "when is the next chapter coming" or "loved it" or "hated it"

Most if not all of of the technical gafs have been edited thanks the very talented bridgeburner.

Anyone interested please PM me and let me know if you want a link to the sory or maybe an email with an attatchment.

 

[Guest]

I am looking for thoughtful, insigthful, honest, and critical feedbacks. The story is posted at another site but unfortunaly my story doesn't conform to lit guidlines. the feedbacks I've received from the other site had been usually positive but limited to "hot dude", "when is the next chapter coming", "loved it" or "hated it".

Most, if not all, of of the technical gafs have been edited thanks to the very talented bridgeburner.

Anyone interested, please, PM me and let me know if you want a link to the sory or maybe an email with an attatchment.

Pretty good read.

I enjoyed it.