Annonymous

[Skip1934a]

On Bitter Harvest:



Dear Anonymous,

You are a complete idiot. Have a nice day.

Aurora

I'm absolutely certain that this reader is a world class critic of top ten stories in any genre. He knows so much about B movies. Makes me think he's never watched anything else.

 

[rachlou]

10/11/06 Choices
No, not getting knocked up by a married man, though that's foolish enough. If she had regrets over that, though, just wait till the baby is born. Think it's difficult raising a baby? Maybe the author should continue the story and write about how much more difficult it is to raise a child with birth defects or mental retardation due to fetal alcohol syndrome. Now *that's* guilt, knowing she did that to her baby just to have a good time for an afternoon.

I find it hard to feel sympathetic to such stupidity, though I do feel sorry for the children who have to suffer for their parents' sins.

Dear Anon,

Yes getting knocked up by a married man isn't the greatest of life choices. The whole point of the story was that she didn't know he was married! Yes she could have got rid of the baby, but then no doubt you'd have been spouting even more crap at me about that. Its nice that you appear to be such a sympathetic soul and quite obviously a bloke. I really hope you don't have a daughter who ooops, gets pregnant at 14 or some such disaster. No doubt you would be the sort of nice bloke who chucked her out for her 'mistake'.

I'm sorry you strayed from the LW section - i hope you find your way back there real soon and go post some inane comments on more deserving work.

Have a nice day

 

[SweetWitch]

On Bitter Harvest:



Dear Anonymous,

You are a complete idiot. Have a nice day.

Aurora

Aurora,

Don't you even give that bastard the satisfaction of allowing him/her to upset you. The person behind that comment is an unhappy little person with either a tiny little willy or married to someone with that affliction.

 

[Aurora Black]

Aurora,

Don't you even give that bastard the satisfaction of allowing him/her to upset you. The person behind that comment is an unhappy little person with either a tiny little willy or married to someone with that affliction.

I wasn't upset. I found it funny.

 

[SweetWitch]

Dear Anon,

Yes getting knocked up by a married man isn't the greatest of life choices. The whole point of the story was that she didn't know he was married! Yes she could have got rid of the baby, but then no doubt you'd have been spouting even more crap at me about that. Its nice that you appear to be such a sympathetic soul and quite obviously a bloke. I really hope you don't have a daughter who ooops, gets pregnant at 14 or some such disaster. No doubt you would be the sort of nice bloke who chucked her out for her 'mistake'.

I'm sorry you strayed from the LW section - i hope you find your way back there real soon and go post some inane comments on more deserving work.

Have a nice day

Some people just cannot deal with the harsh reality of life.

 

[SweetWitch]

I wasn't upset. I found it funny.

Glad to hear it.

 

[rachlou]

Some people just cannot deal with the harsh reality of life.

Yup tossers

 

[Boxlicker101]

Box Licker the old rapist and Kobe's mentor
10/10/06 By: Anonymous
Shit. Must be sad to be over 60 and dream of coercing young girls into sex. You should have made money and and shit, Like Hugh Heffner, then you would be able to fuck those hot young hotties without forcing them.

Literotica is teeming with rape psychos. At least you are not doing it for real. Imagine over 60, with gray hair, and a gang of young convicts line up to bust one in your ass. Yeah, after the judge gives you sixteen years. I bet Kobe wished his shit had turned out like this though. He was probably reading literotica stories from old, wizened guys and thinking, yeah, that's the way, they always love it in those stories. So many youngsters are in jail for trying to get a blow when the answer is fuck no.

Well done Mr Boxlicker, for misleading America's guilible youth into believing that once you rape a woman, she will love it. Hope you blew a big one whilst writing your rape story.

Man, I thought over sixties people are more mature. I gues I will be just as lecherous as you, so I hope to make loads of cash and pay me a team of young hotties, instead of raping them at the work place. Yes, Mr Boxlicker, this is rape, old boy!!!

Look, Numbnuts, the category is Non-Consent/Reluctance. What else would you expect here?

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Box Licker the old rapist and Kobe's mentor
10/10/06 By: Anonymous
Shit. Must be sad to be over 60 and dream of coercing young girls into sex. You should have made money and and shit, Like Hugh Heffner, then you would be able to fuck those hot young hotties without forcing them.

Literotica is teeming with rape psychos. At least you are not doing it for real. Imagine over 60, with gray hair, and a gang of young convicts line up to bust one in your ass. Yeah, after the judge gives you sixteen years. I bet Kobe wished his shit had turned out like this though. He was probably reading literotica stories from old, wizened guys and thinking, yeah, that's the way, they always love it in those stories. So many youngsters are in jail for trying to get a blow when the answer is fuck no.

Well done Mr Boxlicker, for misleading America's guilible youth into believing that once you rape a woman, she will love it. Hope you blew a big one whilst writing your rape story.

Man, I thought over sixties people are more mature. I gues I will be just as lecherous as you, so I hope to make loads of cash and pay me a team of young hotties, instead of raping them at the work place. Yes, Mr Boxlicker, this is rape, old boy!!!

Look, Numbnuts, the category is Non-Consent/Reluctance. What else would you expect here?

LMAO, good answer, Box. Yeah, I read that damn troll's comments and I can understand your reaction to them. Clearly, some people can't handle the existence of fiction which is about certain subjects.

 

[Boxlicker101]

I'm not certain whether or not this is the same person, although I think it probably is. He is apparently a lunatic. It is nice, though, to think that I would be so influential with prominent athletes like Mike Tyson and Kobe Bryant. I didn't think they had ever heard of me.

Box Licker gets sicker!!!!
10/12/06 By: Anonymous
Hey old Box, not bad enough that you mislead the youth of America and put Tyson in jail, and nearly ruined Kobe's career, by misleading them into believthat no means yes!!!! Now you wanna return with dog collars, strap on dildoes and the like.

My, gee, damn shit!!! Boxlicky, that's not the way old boy. I reckon with adults like Boxy leading the nation, there will be rapists and street pissers around evry corner, doing what ol box taught them, namely to piss on the street and rape women. Take heed boxy, stop that. Ask her nicely and only if she says yes may you licka da box.

 

[Darkniciad]

on Harvest of Blood

Generic Fanfic
10/12/06 By: Anonymous
This is just generic fantasy fan ficiton.

The story is adolescent and the writing is, well, just plain silly in many places, and uninspired in most others. I felt like I walked in on a freshman masturbating in his dorm room after he hosted an all night pizza-infested role-playing game session.

There is a saving grace and a ray of hope. The characters had pulses of heart and humanity. I would like to see this story (and this author) grow up.

D, if these characters and this story were set in a non-fantasy setting, with no magic, but dealing with deeper and more metaphoric themes of love, death, innocence, servitude, freedom and revenge, you might be forced to rise to the ocassion as an author.

Translation: I don't like fantasy.

Question: Why did you read past this then? It's the very first line.

This story is Erotic Horror, set in a fantasy world of magic.

I write fantasy, because that's what I like.

I have no intention of "growing up" because I'm writing exactly what I want to write, how I want to write it, for people who enjoy fantasy. You are obviously not one of them. Therefore:

Bite me

 

[SweetWitch]

On The Spell of Appalachia

Unimpressive
10/13/06 By: Anonymous
Poorly written and sappy romance.

Self-indulgent.

I had a snappy response for this but decided it wasn't worth the effort.

So instead I will just say--fuck off.

 

[SweetWitch]

On The Spell of Appalachia

Too
10/13/06 By: Anonymous
sappy.

And, yet, you read it all the way through, dipshit.

 

[Goldie Munro]

Dear Anonymous - it doesn't have a proper ending because it is 'Part One'

 

[Guest]

 

[NastyPierre]

anonymous in usa

anonymous,
thank you for your feedback on my story LEAK. Unfortunately, the next couple chapters were rejected because of content; i have completed 40 chapters... i feel that's fair enough, every web-site must adhere to an inherent integrety, which i appreciate. Most of my writing would most likely be rejected. i will continue placing chapters of stories, in hopes of a few making it to all of you.
thank you
NP

 

[FallingToFly]

Eh.
10/16/06 By: Anonymous in US
The language was not as I expected. The use of horribly colloquial words like <i>dick</i> and <i>pussy</i> are just...distracting for a story that strives for a serious tone. Prick I can accept, I suppose.

Not to mention, most of the language was cliched. Phrases I've seen too many times before, without any creative slant to drive the plot. "Fuck me." It just stands out like a command to a guy who is playacting as her "master" in the bedroom. I get that he's weak, because the guy outside keeps babbling about the fact. It doesn't fit, and it, too, is cliched.

Never use the word nubile again. You're above that in creativity.

"...and then sucking some more until I'm hard again, burying my bone in her hot cunt, her ass, her mouth."

Some more? You could have found a better way to describe that. Bone, hot cunt, her ass, ...once again - you can find better descriptions for these. I've seen your writing. And <i>especially</i> when ending the piece, I don't want to see throw away language.

Aside from that, it was a modest read. I don't get the ravings, but I'd read it a few more times for fun.

You're back, you're back!!

*bounces*

Okay, seriously, I LOVE this particular type of Anonymous. He didn't give me shit about how he hates me, or the writing. He didn't tell me he loved it, with no reason why attached. He gave me HONESTY!!! I love you, love you, love you. When I rewrite this (Yes, I posted the rough draft, lol... please don't tell me you think anything I post on Lit is the finished version? Bah!) I will copy paste this or print it out for my notes.

I love this kind of feedback. It's harsh, but not cruel. It's not negative, it's constructive. Anonymous in the US, whoever you are, feel free to leave a name next time. I LOVE your coments, and really would like to thank you personally.

THANK YOU!!!

 

[SEVERUSMAX]

Thank You Anon

I Liked The Reality Pushed by Your Storyline
10/16/06 by Anonymous in USA
This was a sample of what can almost happen and how life often works. They came accross as real people.

You painted well. Thanks - it was entertaining.

This just proves that Anon has multiple personality disorder, and one of his personalities is nice. This one is, anyway. I liked also that he did for me what he did for Falling, though in a shorter version. He gave a REASON why he liked it. Very nice.

 

[Selena_Kitt]

Alright, Selena...
10/17/06 By: Anonymous in usa
I'm getting sick and tired of you passing off all these real life events as fiction!

Clearly, your characters are actually real people and you are following them around all day with a note pad, or tape recorder, or video camera.

Who would have thought that there was usch an amazing, fantastic, horrific, erotic and alive world all around us that we can't see without your stories?

Your stories take my breath away.

Well... thank you, Anonymous!
But I have to admit, I sure hope there isn't a Belch or an Elizabeth Foster anywhere near each other in the world... I'd be happy to have them be my twisted and sick mind's completely fictional creation...!

 

[smy3th]

You're back, you're back!!

*bounces*

Okay, seriously, I LOVE this particular type of Anonymous. He didn't give me shit about how he hates me, or the writing. He didn't tell me he loved it, with no reason why attached. He gave me HONESTY!!! I love you, love you, love you. When I rewrite this (Yes, I posted the rough draft, lol... please don't tell me you think anything I post on Lit is the finished version? Bah!) I will copy paste this or print it out for my notes.

I love this kind of feedback. It's harsh, but not cruel. It's not negative, it's constructive. Anonymous in the US, whoever you are, feel free to leave a name next time. I LOVE your coments, and really would like to thank you personally.

THANK YOU!!!

Well, yeah, at least this Anon gave reasons, but they are all bullshit.

 

[Darkniciad]

The ultimate anonymous, somebody has went through and voted a 4 or 5 on everything I've written over the last several days. The final series of votes on the whole Blackhawk series came in tonight.

Glad you liked them, and thanks for taking the time to vote

 

[672]

Well, yeah, at least this Anon gave reasons, but they are all bullshit.

All of my reasons were not bullshit..

Stop sucking up, and grow a pair. Even she admits the story needs work.

Durh.

 

[FallingToFly]

All of my reasons were not bullshit..

Stop sucking up, and grow a pair. Even she admits the story needs work.

Durh.

Yes, the story does need work. *pokes* I'm glad to see you back again... I thought we had lost you to Oasiz.

 

[Skip1934a]

Anonymous sent me this - a praise from Anonymous?

This story is well written and has a strong human touch. It shows a warmth expressed by Skip toward Sandy. The story might be continued if "Skip" so wished. Perhaps having Sandy become a very relgious person (she's already a loving person); perhaps even becoming a nun. As a nun, she could helping other souls in need of guidance.

Nicely done
RAG

Thank you, RAG, whoever you are. It's refreshing to get a positive comment from 'Anonymous'. Your '5' vote brought my story almost back up to zero.
And I may continue the story sometime in the future, but as of now, I'm busy with a romance.

 

[smy3th]

All of my reasons were not bullshit..

Stop sucking up, and grow a pair. Even she admits the story needs work.

Durh.

OK, only most of them were bullshit then. None of them made any real sense to me. Seems like you have pronounced preferences in what words you like and don't like. Sounded to me like opinionated crapola, grossly overstated in intensity, and almost entirely negative and non-constructive.

So why post your comments anonymously, and now come along and claim them? Why not just put your name on your comments in the first place? If you haven't "the pair" (as you put it) to stand behind them when you post them, why should anyone else give them any credence?

And as to even she admitting the story needs work, well duh: Almost any author will almost always admit that anything they have written "needs work." We are always hoping someone will tell us otherwise, but then we wouldn't believe it anyway. The only authors who think their stuff is perfect are the delusional anonymous writers of poison pen critiques.