Annonymous

[Boxlicker101]

God. I don't know if my writing just isn't that controversial or I've been lucky as hell or have a very low profile or what, but I've never had a truly mean comment... <thinks>
Wait. I take that back. I got



In reply I say - it's a stroke story, do you *really* read it for realistic dialogue?

I certainly know what you mean. I have written stroke stories and have had people complain about lack of character development.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Comment from "Luring You"

No Cigar! Kung Fu or a 45 will deal with that!!!
01/22/07 by Anonymous
What a stupid story, Red. Really, the guy should of just knocked that bitch flat out with a left hook, then fucked her face and her ass before drowning her in the toilet and flashing her away. Obviously what you and the previous commentator need is a wimp, like the jerk who posted the first comment.

To last commentator, if you try this stupid shit with the wrong man, by which I mean, not some submissive, feminised wimp like you obviously wish for, you will be legally and physically dead my dear.

Red, you are a good writer, but lemme tell you something for nothing; I for one advocate real men, not some submissive softy shit. Any real man should know how to throw a tight combination of punches and murder any sick, silly, wanna be dominat bitch in her place.

What a misguided bitch your character is, saying the dumby knew his place in society, which was not to question.

One question Red, have you ever been properly fucked by a real man? Or a re you a wimpd masqeurading as a woman?

Anon. . .I really don't like you this morning. You're allowed your opinion, but you know what annoys me is your last two comments. *sigh* I guess I should say thanks for saying I'm a good writer, but that compliment is overshadowed by the visciousness of the remaining words you spew at the end.

I guess I should be glad I don't know you. Because if you think handling a woman in that manner is the way to go then I have to question who the sick individual is in this commentary.

And that is two questions Anon and had you left your email I would have answered both. Yes and No.

 

[Vermilion]

I wonder what the difference is between legal and physical death. Perhaps you ought to reply with a PC and suggest that people rarely get incensed about something unless it has affected them personally (eg- homophobe usually have some gay feelings) and then ask him how he feels when his wifes screws around.

<is feeling *mean* today>
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[RedHairedandFriendly]

Anon, just boggles my mind at times.

Sometimes I sit back and wonder if anon. isn't someone I chat with here and there, sometimes they talk to you like they know you from Lit through the threads. . . which is a possible.

I wish they wouldn't call me Red when they don't know me, but Hey Author or Hey Writer, but when they address me as if they know me it irks me more. lol. . .

Maybe I need to write under the name... WritingForAnon.

You are entitled to feel mean. . .I have those days too.

 

[SweetWitch]

Comment from "Luring You"



Anon. . .I really don't like you this morning. You're allowed your opinion, but you know what annoys me is your last two comments. *sigh* I guess I should say thanks for saying I'm a good writer, but that compliment is overshadowed by the visciousness of the remaining words you spew at the end.

I guess I should be glad I don't know you. Because if you think handling a woman in that manner is the way to go then I have to question who the sick individual is in this commentary.

And that is two questions Anon and had you left your email I would have answered both. Yes and No.

This person thinks a real man beats on women? Excuse me for pointing out the obvious, but this one is truly fucked up. Any comment that advocates such violence should be deleted immediately.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

This person thinks a real man beats on women? Excuse me for pointing out the obvious, but this one is truly fucked up. Any comment that advocates such violence should be deleted immediately.

I will delete it. I just haven't brought myself to go back and read it again, guess I will now. I usually delete the asinine ones. I guess I was just a bit perturbed at the moment.

 

[starrkers]

I haven't read that story (yet), but my guess would be the idiot actually got off on it and the subject matter scared him - questioned his masculinity in some way.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

It's a first person BDSM. I was surprised by the hostility, but his comment was the only one I have gotten that has been negative on that story. I guess I hit a cord.

 

[Vermilion]

I haven't read that story (yet), but my guess would be the idiot actually got off on it and the subject matter scared him - questioned his masculinity in some way.

That was my guess too
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[Foxee Browne]

Dear Anon

Why did she put on leopard print stilettos and make-up? Because she wanted to feel sexy silly!

 

[SweetWitch]

on Heartless

Amazingly beautiful!
01/25/07 By: Anonymous in Show Me State
One of the best stories I have read in a long time!!! Very poignant and moving, with a depth of emotions and realism that make you laugh and cry right along with the charactors, feeling as though you are living the events right along with them! Thank you for sharing your talent and writing this incredible story!

Thank you.

 

[SweetWitch]

bah
01/26/07 By: Anonymous in NY
standard plot, too stupid to live annoying characters. I'm bored. But you have enough fans that will say it's wonderful and you won't care. You have something, polish it, work it, you can come up with a better plot and better characters. The way this story has started, and the way you have created these characters are beneath you.

How nice to see you again. How is everything--family, job, life? Hope all is well. I was beginning to worry about you when I hadn't received any of your insults. Take care.

SW.

 

[cantdog]

This person thinks a real man beats on women? Excuse me for pointing out the obvious, but this one is truly fucked up. Any comment that advocates such violence should be deleted immediately.

He didn't bother to beat on them, he just killed them outright. So he's lying.

 

[pop_54]

Ha... just had another one... "Story was Ok but too British for the mass market, I had a job understanding a lot of the dialogue... You should become more mid Atlantic with your language if you want to be appreciated world wide"

Dear Annon... I am fucking British, and the story is set in England

 

[SweetWitch]

He didn't bother to beat on them, he just killed them outright. So he's lying.

I stand corrected. What worries me is this creep is actually walking around and most likely breeding. I weep for the future.

 

[rachlou]

Dear Diary...
01/27/07 By: Anonymous in Summerisle
If my boyfriend's mother believed that yoghust story, she must be as dumb as me

Dear Diary Ch.02...
01/27/07 By: Anonymous in Summerisle
My pussy got squashed. Oh, and my cat got run over as well.

Had a sense of humour by-pass recently?

Love Rach xx

 

[TE999]

I'm not sure how to take this one.

Anon. writes: 'Not the best story ever but very good and well worth reading'.

If I could write the best story ever I'd stop writing, because nothing else could compare to it.

Thanks Anon. (I guess).

TE999.

 

[oggbashan]

Anonymous is helpful.

This is a PC on my Valentine's Day entry 'Sister Valentine'.

Edit Story carefully, first
01/27/07 By: Anonymous
Carelessness like the following distracts. If the second sentence of the first paragraph was the last of these two paragraphs, the "flow" would've been achieved seamlessly. Shifting tenses back and forth within a paragraph --- with stayed within a very small time frame (in actual time) --- was also a bad idea. There's nothing "clever" about; it just added to the distruction. Otherwise, it's a good story.
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Even when I arrived at her flat, all she could do was hug me and wet my shoulder with her tears. I drove back to my flat. It is small but private. Claire shares with three friends. Intimate conversation is only possible in a bedroom and even then has to be in whispers. The partition walls are very thin. Claire works shifts. This was an early week so her flatmates wouldn't be home yet but would be soon.

I rang the doorbell. Claire opened the door. I entered as she hurled herself into my arms. I hugged her as she cried on my shoulder. I pushed the flat door shut behind us. I stroked her blonde hair gently. I had always liked Claire's hair. Now her hairstyle was much shorter but her hair was still smooth and silky.

Anonymous is right, except for the title of the comment.

The problem arose from over-editing. I cut the story drastically and in the cutting and pasting I left in a paragraph I intended to omit.

I will edit and re-post.

Thank you, anonymous. If only all anonymous PCs were as helpful and detailed...

Grateful Og

 

[Vermilion]

I just found

"Tiresome!
08/18/06 By: Anonymous in USA
Silly story. Does anyone believe this? I know this is fantasy; but why must the dialogue be so wooden."

on a non-consent story http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=269959

Only one problem mate... There was no fucking dialogue in that story.
Bloody pillock.
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[damppanties]

Hard to beleive that you could be so young and write so well on a topic with
which most of us in middle age have trouble,

Haven't a clue what you do for a living, but you may want to consider Law School
as about 90 perct of the job is being able to write a coherent paragraph.

Um, yes. Law school = writing paragraphs.



But more seriously, thank you for the compliment.

 

[rachlou]

....? Forever Mine
02/01/07 By: Anonymous in usa
I don't really understand how it's supposed to be erotic, it's about an abused women who murders her rapists!

Yes you have a valid point - but what other category could I have put it in? Its hardly anything BUT horror. I maybe should have put a disclaimer at the beginning about 'NO SEX other than ICKY SEX'

But thanks, your 1-bomb will make sure I don't forget next time.

Love Rach

 

[slyc_willie]

Had a sense of humour by-pass recently?

Love Rach xx

How, exactly, do you 'squash a pussy?'

 

[partyfairy]

Love this thread!!

Anon....if you dn't like readinf non-consent stories don't read them!!! Then you wont get your fat ass so in a knot over it will you!

Also saying that a character in a story should get divorced? Interesting seeing as they are all works of fiction, one of thm actually exsist in the real world.

Am somewhat pleased I can generate such 'realistic' passion from someone with something that is a compleate work of fiction.

Thanks
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[rachlou]

How, exactly, do you 'squash a pussy?'

sit on it?

 

[Vermilion]

sit on it?

*snerk*
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