A feedback from an avarage Jerk-off!

[Guest]

This story was good enough for a porn-jerk-off like me, but this could've been an excellent story if it had been written from a female POV, don't you think?

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=78487

 

[toffeegyrl]

hm....

Weeeellll...

I don't see how it could have been written from a female POV, because as I was reading it , i got a real sense of "Guy-ness" from the narrator - - his entire premise is that he can have anything from a woman, use a woman any way he wishes, for a price. Unless the woman was a sub, I don't see how the speakers could be reversed...

just my .02.

intresting story, although i did feel more than a little dirty after reading it...

 

[English Lady]

Hey, thats funny, i actually read this story last night, I quite enjoyed it. I think more than having it written from the womans point of view it might have been better with a "narrator" so you could have the thoughts and feelings of both characters. I think it would be enhanced by some input from the woman's point of view,how she reacts to the cash, why she is willing to do these things for the money etc etc. My personal opinion is thati t was a great basis for a story, but alot more could have been done with it

 

[Guest]

ahahah

wanker

 

[Guest]

This one goes in here. I read the 1/4 of the first page. it was good.