Nylon Magic (Feedback Appreciated)

[Nylonian]

Hope this finds you well. This is a story that I've been trying to write for ages but couldn't really piece it together. I think I've finally worked out all the kinks and put together a somewhat believable plot. It's a nylon fetish story with elements of BDSM, control via magic and features an unsuspecting "victim". No haters so I guess I am doing the right thing so far. Thanks in advance for reading and for leaving a comment (it'd help a lot). Any feedback is immensely appreciated as I am working on my 5th story at the moment (but that one will be very different from this one in theme and plot). Enjoy: https://www.literotica.com/s/the-spell-2

 

[OnlyHappyEndings]

It was well-written, easy to read. Could have benefited from a couple rounds of rewriting. Same could be said for some of my stories. The type of fantasy here wasn't my cup of tea but close enough that I kept reading. And it wasn't too long so thank you for that. For a nylon fetish story I expected more description of her legs and feet, etc. I would have put her in shoes instead of boots, shoes that dangled from her toe while she lured her prey.

As for her prey, I don't want to give any spoilers but I'm glad you didn't end it the way I thought you were going. I found the male character kind of 'meh'. I would have gone with someone sexier, maybe a big self-centered jerk who we wouldn't mind getting tortured. Or perhaps a young virgin, out for drinks on his twenty-first birthday so we can feel worried for him falling into this woman's clutches.

Given that you did go with that male character, a continuation of the story might reveal that he is secretly special, that he gave her more than she was expecting. You kind of hint at that with the part where "...he started to feel fuller and fuller inside her; that didn't seem possible to her." Maybe his output is more potent. She seeks him out, woos him, rewards him while she feeds off him. Part three? Her rivals discover the source of her new-found power.