1st story every - Feedback on Principal Acts Anyone?

[Author2]

Hi there. I was hoping someone - anyone? has read my story Principal Acts - ch 1 & 2. This was my first story ever and I'm looking for feedback on it. Positive or constructive, whichever you'd like to offer. I look forward to hearing from you all!

 

[Guest]

I enjoyed it. The premise was believable, mostly. (In stories where a young thing is coerced I wonder why she doesn't blackmail the blackmailer. He has a lot more to lose after he fucks her young ass than she does.)

I liked the video part.

My only criticism is that your story stops being a story at a certain point and becomes "porn". Your characters stop being people with inner voices and flaws and stuff and become actors in a porn scenario.

 

[Rodrigo]

I thought the principal was great. I enjoyed the first story more than the second, and the first sex scene between the principal and the girl was very hot. I'd like to see anothe chapter to this series.

 

[Guest]

thought this story was amazing, one of the best i've ever read on here, need more chapters please!!!

 

[Sabrina]

Yes, I liked it. Any more parts planned? I think you put a "to be continued" on it , so go on.

 

[Guest]

I enjoyed you story a lot. Good job, first story or not. I'm really into blackmail and revenge stories. Take a look under story ideas / non-consent/ bruno. Based on Principal Acts, looks like something you could handle very well.

 

[#1derfulGuy]

AUTHOR....I've gotten no replies to my request of story feedbacks to my stories. But I have read your stories and I am here to say that your stories were a great turn-on. It was well thought out. As I read the story, I imagined how it would be for a principal to seduce a sexy, young cheerleader like that. WOW....what a lucky bastard he would be.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Author2, I will be sure to check out you 2 chapter epic. I love to give feedback, because I think after all the hard work a writer does, it's well deserved. Will get back to you ASAP. I have writings in here as well, if you like the Romance section. #1derful Guy...I did respond to your stories as well, check em out! I loved your writing, you are very gifted. Keep up the amazing work! Katerina Val-Kyrie

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Whew! I am back, what an amazing read. I read both chapter's without stopping. You are a super writer, very gifted if that was your first. Your word choices, the flow, it was all done very well. I did find myself feeling sorry for Jessica though, and hating the principal in the first chapter. I could actually feel her fear and shame. The story line is interesting to say the least, and does keep you rivited to the screen. Even though, I enjoyed the story immensely, I did not feel hmmmm... turned on so much. I guess I am just not into the rough stuff. But hey, it is fun to read. You are an awesome writer, very gifted, please continue to write more. I am looking forward to seeing more of your work!

I have to point something out here. I do not know alot of authors in here as of yet. I came across your posting, wanting feedback on your stories. Ok thats cool, not a problem. I saw your name in the corner Author2 ok, so off I go looking for you. No where could I find you, in the Author Index. So I used Laurel's valuable search engine, and typed in the story title. Ok, I was there, found your stories. To my surprise, you went by AnonPrin. Now out of curiosity, I went back to Author Index and you are not even listed in there. Hmmmm...I am thinking here, that your name should most definately be listed in the Author Index, but it is not. I did find the first part of your story under the top 20's, way to go by the way! Says something doesn't it. Wow, and for a first story yet, amazing! Even though one of the chapters is in the top 20's list, I still cannot understand why you are not listed in the index. I thought all writers were listed there. Am I wrong in thinking that? So what I am saying here, is I have had to use the search engine numerous times now because of this confusion, with authors names. I feel if one wants feedback on his stories, they should use the actual penname, so we do not have such difficulty finding them. Alot of readers may know who you are, and that AnonPrin is your penname, but I most certainly didn't. Although this time, knowing your penname wouldn't have helped, as you were not in the index anyway. So Laurel, if you happen to read this, know that for me, your search engine has been a great asset to this site.

Again, keep up the great work AnonPrin, you are doing super. All the best in your future endeavors. If you like a nice get away into the romance world, please feel free to check out my work also. Would love to hear from you. Submitted a new one this past weekend, hope to see it up soon! Dezerae Remembers(Sequel To The Cabin) The first part can be found under Romance...The Cabin, also The Fantasy can be found there as well. These are also my first stories, as I am a new writer myself. Hope to hear from you soon. Katerina Val-Kyrie

 

[Laurel]

>>I
still cannot understand why you are not listed in the index. I thought all writers were
listed there.<<

No, only authors who've submitted 3 or more stories, usually, are added to the author index. I just added AnonPrin to the Author Index so those who follow this thread can find his stories more easily. However, that's not normally how it works, as he's submitted two stories, not three... Hope this helps!

 

[Sabrina]

Yes, I read the story and I agree with Katerina. Vg,

Did no one notice I'm finally a member? No one cares, sob. Does anyone know why it is actually 31 posts that you need to become a member instead of a nice round no like 30? Katerina only needs one more post to be a member.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hey Sabrina, congratulations are in order. Good for you. I did not even realize your status changed from posting comments in here. Interesting tidbit. I guess now I am formerly a member as well. Hmmmm Congratulations Kat..Pats herself on the back! Hehe I have decided to get active in here, as its a great site, and I would really like to get to know people. Staying quiet, gets you know where, so beware everyone, I am officially going to be a bug, but only a good bug! Laurel, That is interesting, as I have been in the index for awhile now, with only two stories behind me. Now why is that? Glad I am there though. I do actually have 3 now, with my erotic poem added. Whew! and soon to be 4 with my new submission coming soon! I am glad to be a member of this great site. Keep up the good work everyone! Katerina Val-Kyrie

 

[Laurel]

>> Laurel, That is interesting, as I have
been in the index for awhile now, with only two stories behind me. Now why is that? <<

Well, if it would make you feel better I can remove you.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Laurel, don't you even dare! I have 3 now, I am legal, before I must have been illegal. LOL* By the way, I still want to know how you put a smiley on here? Please..... =)