So you're being paid to handle another guy's tools?
Five inches at a time, for a dollar ninety-nine?
I never wanted to be
So let’s review our helpful advice.
So let’s review our helpful advice.
You need to add a nun in a crotchless wet suit, change the setting to some kind of creepy house, add a serial killer and Bruce Springsteen singing “BORN IN THE USA” over and over again, with a sexy hitchhiker and to make the sex more interesting add a broken bed, a pit and a whip.
Yep. I’d say that pretty much sums up our problem solving skills.
Good job, team. Good F’KIN job!
literally AND figuratively. Go Team!
Forgive me if I don't read all sixty entries on here; I have other things to do (like writing, for one!) I admit, I have several things I just abandoned and never posted. I even finished three chapters of a series and I think two of another one. They just weren't working, in my opinion, so I didn't delete them, I just left them.
I will read more later. I've got to do some other things first. And please don't say "off the rails" because that may encourage me to post more train wreck photos. I've got to rein in stuff like that.
Wanda, please stop posting GIFs like this! My fingers are itching to post a video of a real train crash in Spain. But I promised to stop hijacking threads (although I guess I just did), plus I have to have lunch now.
I’m not @onehitwanda - or am I? - but…To onehitwanda:
Who is that? I've never seen the show. Also, I usually don't post GIFs, but rather entire scenes. A bad habit I have to stop.
You're my imperess of the perverse.
Is it on cable or is it through a streaming service? Because I can't afford either one. (Probably helps me on Lit because I have to make up my own stuff.) But yeah, I'm that poor.
I suggest getting an outside opinion. An unbiased beta reader might be able to identify what you feel is lacking… alternately, they might also be able to tell you it’s all in your head and what you have written is wonderful!
I find with many authors, it seems we are our own worst critics, so what may seem “flat” to you may not be the case.
You'd probably enjoy my four-part series on taxi driving. I'm planning a fifth chapter finally. It's amazing what you can get away with on Lit. Anyway, the job wasn't exactly boring, although it could be at times. Mostly it was way too eventful, except the wrong kind of events.
It think after a while an author does get at least an educated guess of what is working and what is not. I usually don't seek opinions until after it's published. Usually, the opinions come in unsolicited, if only through the voting. djmac may see it differently, but don't want to have a beta reader online. I certainly don't know anybody in person who would even attempt it.I suggest getting an outside opinion. An unbiased beta reader might be able to identify what you feel is lacking… alternately, they might also be able to tell you it’s all in your head and what you have written is wonderful!
I find with many authors, it seems we are our own worst critics, so what may seem “flat” to you may not be the case.
There a lot of Springsteen songs that are better than that, depending on what mood dj is trying to convey. (I can't stop myself, I swear!) If it's ice-cold despair - and some people here want that in their stories, - I'd go with "Point Blank."So let’s review our helpful advice.
You need to add a nun in a crotchless wet suit, change the setting to some kind of creepy house, add a serial killer and Bruce Springsteen singing “BORN IN THE USA” over and over again, with a sexy hitchhiker and to make the sex more interesting add a broken bed, a pit and a whip.
Yep. I’d say that pretty much sums up our problem solving skills.
Good job, team. Good F’KIN job!
