StrangeLife
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Infidelity stories is a stable of the Loving Wives category - whether it be of the heartbreak/dealing-with-loss type or the btb type. A common trait of this type of story is of course the presence of a third party - the external force intruding into the relationship and driving a wedge between the protagonists for the purpose of sex, love, a relationship or whatever.
In other words, the badguy / badgirl.
It is common knowledge that the quality of a James Bond movie rests primarily on the badguy, and I believe this to be the case for any story that is built around a conflict involving an external instigator. Erotic infidelity stories included. After having read quite a few of these stories I have noticed that many writers are making a mistake that prevents them from fully exploiting the option for creating tension in the story....
They make the badguy too bad.
No, I haven't been drinking. Let me explain...
Lets say you are a husband whose wife is having an affair. What kind of lover is the toughest and most destructive opponent you can encounter? Is it a slimy serial seducer or a macho man who gets off on putting you down while having sex with your wife? Or maybe a black mailing boss? Nope.
The most dangerous foe by far is a goodguy.
Since we have debated superheroes lately, lets use Superman Returns as an example (and I am going to spoil it to shit because if you haven't watched it yet, you deserve that!). The man of steel finds that Lois has stepped out with another man - played by Roy Marsden - who is a nice guy. He is no wimp, he is responsible, they have a child together (he thinks), his looks are on par with Superman's and he is not even being an ass towards Clark Kent. Hell, the guys name is "White"... Richard white... Dick White... (No! I'm not saying it! That'd be too easy.
)
Superman might be the strongest creature in the universe, but he has no chance against that guy. Had Lois teamed up with Lex Luthor it would have been a breeze for him, but against Dick White's goodguy-powers even the mighty Kryptonian stands powerless. Of course he does have a chance during the movie to take out the sucker, but he is Superman. He could also go to the court and demand a DNA test on the boy, but again he is Superman. So he doesn't fight dirty, despite the fact that Lois is effectively being a serious bitch as far as the kid is concerned.
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-hS0IUcGIMRY/UYz4Pc_jNXI/AAAAAAAAFNg/1skTmfa8q_E/s1600/Superman-Returns-superman-returns-24776222-720-304.jpg
A second superhero-example is The Dark Night. The new dynamic district attorney Harvey Dent - played by Aaron "The Chin" Eckhart - is putting the moves on Batman's love interest, Rachel Dawes, and is succeeding in his efforts. Again Batman is powerless because Harvey Dent is a goodguy - idealistic, smart, good-looking, wealthy and genuinely cares for Rachel and is prepared to make a serious commitment to her involving kids and family. To make matters worse Batman likes the guy a lot and that feeling is mutual... at least at first. If Rachel had hooked up with the Joker it would have been a breeze for the caped crusader, but against the massive ethos of Harvey Dent he is powerless. Because the brutal truth is that Harvey is a superior choice for Rachel compared to Batman, and she knows it. So Batman is irrevocably friend-zoned.
http://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120816101935/dcmovies/images/e/ef/Rachel_Dawes_and_Harvey_Dent.jpg
The impulse for penning this rant came after reading Magicians latest story Lunch Date.
And if you are reading this Magician, please don't take this as me criticizing your story. You are a fine writer and I especially respect the way you aren't afraid of concluding your tales with a reconciliation, in acceptance of the fact that people are flawed and that everybody can have a weak moment and fall to temptation. It makes your characters feel a lot more real than many of the btb writers. I am simply using it to illustrate a common point. And I am not spoiling your story either, since your extensive foreword leaves no doubt about where the plot goes.
But the story does feature an unlikeable and thus weak antagonist. An antagonist who is no match for the husband once the plot is revealed to him. There is basically no serious challenge for the protagonist and the only losing scenario for him would have been to do nothing... and even that would likely have been a win in the end. So there was no real danger or tension. His marriage was never in any serious peril. The badguy was like an ant crossing his path, that he could step on anyway he wanted and at any time he chose.
But what if the badguy had not been a sleaze ball?
What if he had been genuinely in love with the protagonists wife? A handsome man with a good career, a winning personality, a set of values and interests that matched wifey's and a superior option in any way compared to hubby? A Dick White or a Harvey Dent? Somebody that the protagonist might even have liked, if they didn't happen to be rivals? A guy who felt bad about falling for a married woman, but powerless to hide his feelings?
Now that would have been a serious challenge for the protagonist where the outcome would have been anything but given. There would have been more tension, a clear sense of peril and the pay-off by a positive conclusion would be equally larger.
So what am I saying with all this? Well, the gist of it all is, that if you write infidelity stories don't make your badguys "too bad". It might increase the ethos and justification of the protagonist, but it also drains the story of danger and tension, because a badguy in this type of story is in reality weaker the badder you make him. And as said previously, the quality of the badguy decides the quality of the story.
* rant off * Ahhh, now I feel better...
In other words, the badguy / badgirl.
It is common knowledge that the quality of a James Bond movie rests primarily on the badguy, and I believe this to be the case for any story that is built around a conflict involving an external instigator. Erotic infidelity stories included. After having read quite a few of these stories I have noticed that many writers are making a mistake that prevents them from fully exploiting the option for creating tension in the story....
They make the badguy too bad.
No, I haven't been drinking. Let me explain...
Lets say you are a husband whose wife is having an affair. What kind of lover is the toughest and most destructive opponent you can encounter? Is it a slimy serial seducer or a macho man who gets off on putting you down while having sex with your wife? Or maybe a black mailing boss? Nope.
The most dangerous foe by far is a goodguy.
Since we have debated superheroes lately, lets use Superman Returns as an example (and I am going to spoil it to shit because if you haven't watched it yet, you deserve that!). The man of steel finds that Lois has stepped out with another man - played by Roy Marsden - who is a nice guy. He is no wimp, he is responsible, they have a child together (he thinks), his looks are on par with Superman's and he is not even being an ass towards Clark Kent. Hell, the guys name is "White"... Richard white... Dick White... (No! I'm not saying it! That'd be too easy.
Superman might be the strongest creature in the universe, but he has no chance against that guy. Had Lois teamed up with Lex Luthor it would have been a breeze for him, but against Dick White's goodguy-powers even the mighty Kryptonian stands powerless. Of course he does have a chance during the movie to take out the sucker, but he is Superman. He could also go to the court and demand a DNA test on the boy, but again he is Superman. So he doesn't fight dirty, despite the fact that Lois is effectively being a serious bitch as far as the kid is concerned.
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-hS0IUcGIMRY/UYz4Pc_jNXI/AAAAAAAAFNg/1skTmfa8q_E/s1600/Superman-Returns-superman-returns-24776222-720-304.jpg
A second superhero-example is The Dark Night. The new dynamic district attorney Harvey Dent - played by Aaron "The Chin" Eckhart - is putting the moves on Batman's love interest, Rachel Dawes, and is succeeding in his efforts. Again Batman is powerless because Harvey Dent is a goodguy - idealistic, smart, good-looking, wealthy and genuinely cares for Rachel and is prepared to make a serious commitment to her involving kids and family. To make matters worse Batman likes the guy a lot and that feeling is mutual... at least at first. If Rachel had hooked up with the Joker it would have been a breeze for the caped crusader, but against the massive ethos of Harvey Dent he is powerless. Because the brutal truth is that Harvey is a superior choice for Rachel compared to Batman, and she knows it. So Batman is irrevocably friend-zoned.
http://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120816101935/dcmovies/images/e/ef/Rachel_Dawes_and_Harvey_Dent.jpg
The impulse for penning this rant came after reading Magicians latest story Lunch Date.
And if you are reading this Magician, please don't take this as me criticizing your story. You are a fine writer and I especially respect the way you aren't afraid of concluding your tales with a reconciliation, in acceptance of the fact that people are flawed and that everybody can have a weak moment and fall to temptation. It makes your characters feel a lot more real than many of the btb writers. I am simply using it to illustrate a common point. And I am not spoiling your story either, since your extensive foreword leaves no doubt about where the plot goes.
But the story does feature an unlikeable and thus weak antagonist. An antagonist who is no match for the husband once the plot is revealed to him. There is basically no serious challenge for the protagonist and the only losing scenario for him would have been to do nothing... and even that would likely have been a win in the end. So there was no real danger or tension. His marriage was never in any serious peril. The badguy was like an ant crossing his path, that he could step on anyway he wanted and at any time he chose.
But what if the badguy had not been a sleaze ball?
What if he had been genuinely in love with the protagonists wife? A handsome man with a good career, a winning personality, a set of values and interests that matched wifey's and a superior option in any way compared to hubby? A Dick White or a Harvey Dent? Somebody that the protagonist might even have liked, if they didn't happen to be rivals? A guy who felt bad about falling for a married woman, but powerless to hide his feelings?
Now that would have been a serious challenge for the protagonist where the outcome would have been anything but given. There would have been more tension, a clear sense of peril and the pay-off by a positive conclusion would be equally larger.
So what am I saying with all this? Well, the gist of it all is, that if you write infidelity stories don't make your badguys "too bad". It might increase the ethos and justification of the protagonist, but it also drains the story of danger and tension, because a badguy in this type of story is in reality weaker the badder you make him. And as said previously, the quality of the badguy decides the quality of the story.
* rant off * Ahhh, now I feel better...
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