Cyberslut wants Attention!!!!!!!!

[naughtycakes]

Hi all... just posted a new story - my second - and I think it's really fucking hot (if I do say so me'self). It's about a sexy public defender that gets caught in a prison riot, saved by one of the inmates, only to get turned into his little prison slut.

I'm working on the next segment of the story and would love some help/feedback. If you like this kinda thing (bdsm/non-consent/reluctance/spanking, etc.), please give it a read and lemme know what you think.

I love feedback, comments & votes, so don't be shy! My first story's a little different, it's about a naughty party girl finally getting what she wants - a spanking from her boss (it's a little tamer if you're not into prison riots.) Thanks much in advance to anybody who gives a fuck. Muaaaaah!

Here's the link to Lydia Becomes His Prison Slut: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=345403

 

[naughtycakes]

Boy... not even one fucking post... what does a girl have to do around here, jeesh! Do I have to post nekkid pics here... cause I will... READ MY STORY DAMMIT!!!!!

 

[Guest]

Pretty non-specific request.

*grin*

however - scanned your prison story.

I'm going to read it later. When I'm alone.

Pretty hot stuff!

 

[mjl2010]

The cost of getting feedback....

Boy... not even one fucking post... what does a girl have to do around here, jeesh! Do I have to post nekkid pics here... cause I will... READ MY STORY DAMMIT!!!!!

Feedback is free.
Nice feedback where we say your story is hot costs you one naked picture of yourself.
Better feedback where we actually vote costs two naked pictures.
Constructive feedback costs three naked pictures.
If you want a five vote, you'll need pictures of yourself having sex.

All that said....

I like the story. Definitely pushes it a little doesn't it. You did a great job with description of her surroundings and how she ended up in that situation.

I liked near the end where he failed to get everything he wanted and it was his fault for having her tied up like that. pretty good.

I voted. Now. Time to pay up with naked pics.

MJL

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Hi all... just posted a new story - my second - and I think it's really fucking hot (if I do say so me'self). It's about a sexy public defender that gets caught in a prison riot, saved by one of the inmates, only to get turned into his little prison slut.

I'm working on the next segment of the story and would love some help/feedback. If you like this kinda thing (bdsm/non-consent/reluctance/spanking, etc.), please give it a read and lemme know what you think.

I love feedback, comments & votes, so don't be shy! My first story's a little different, it's about a naughty party girl finally getting what she wants - a spanking from her boss (it's a little tamer if you're not into prison riots.) Thanks much in advance to anybody who gives a fuck. Muaaaaah!

Here's the link to Lydia Becomes His Prison Slut: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=345403

I was actually drawn to your post by this: 'only to get turned into his little prison slut'. Being an avid writer and also an editor, it's not often when I get a chance to simply 'cruise' the forums. My time is limited, so I must invest it wisely. But you have intrigued me. If you need an editor in the future, PM me. As for now, I'll check out what you have written.

 

[naughtycakes]

I voted. Now. Time to pay up with naked pics.

MJL

Okay.... Fair is Fair.... No nekkid pics (yet), but, eh... these are close 'nuff! (Please disregard the funky tan lines)

http://i251.photobucket.com/albums/gg290/naughtycakes/mirrorH22.jpg

http://i251.photobucket.com/albums/gg290/naughtycakes/042.jpg http://i251.photobucket.com/albums/gg290/naughtycakes/butt2.jpg

 

[mjl2010]

Nice.

 

[MaduraMi]

Very hot story, can't wait to read the continuation.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Being the crumudgen that I am, I hate to say it, but the story was good. Keep it up, girl.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Boy... not even one fucking post... what does a girl have to do around here, jeesh! Do I have to post nekkid pics here... cause I will... READ MY STORY DAMMIT!!!!!

That should get the leery ones out of their chairs.

Been on the road this week but, seduced by your sweet words, will take a look tomorrow. Just lurve a guirl who knows how to be dominant.

 

[naughtycakes]

Being the crumudgen that I am, I hate to say it, but the story was good. Keep it up, girl.

Thanks! Means a lot coming from you... love your AV & your stuff, lvoe, N.C.

 

[naughtycakes]

That should get the leery ones out of their chairs.

Been on the road this week but, seduced by your sweet words, will take a look tomorrow. Just lurve a guirl who knows how to be dominant.

Thanks for your awsome feedback, I can't wait to read your stuff! Getting right on it!

 

[LittleInnocentAngel]

wow that was really hot! i cant wait to read the next part.

 

[JustinStrange]

Jinkies. That was pretty nice. My girlie digs your work too. Well done cakes.

 

[BradBigBrain]

Pretty hot story and very hot pix!

 

[CyranodeMelbourne]

Not my usual category of erotica, but as I know what it's like waiting for feedback I thought I would check it out. I've left a comment there so I won't repeat myself, but well done

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Sorry to be so slow, but the demands or real life are such a bummer.

If you get JJ's imprimatur, you don't really need the opinions of the groundlings, but here goes.

Anyone who can get Emin, Batailles and Bakowski into a sexy, spanking story deserves some kind of medal. I challenge you, for part2, with Damien Hirst, Voltaire and Jaques Brel.

You write great stories, I just wondered why I liked Nora more than Lydia. It had nothing to do with non-consent. The comments about brutality are just rubbish.

On reflection, Prisoner X remains an anonymous recidivist thug and Lydia's conversion from frightened victim to lustful participant is not fully explained as an emotional journey.

Now where's the NEKKID PICS.

 

[naughtycakes]

Sorry to be so slow, but the demands or real life are such a bummer.

If you get JJ's imprimatur, you don't really need the opinions of the groundlings, but here goes.

Anyone who can get Emin, Batailles and Bakowski into a sexy, spanking story deserves some kind of medal. I challenge you, for part2, with Damien Hirst, Voltaire and Jaques Brel.

You write great stories, I just wondered why I liked Nora more than Lydia. It had nothing to do with non-consent. The comments about brutality are just rubbish.

On reflection, Prisoner X remains an anonymous recidivist thug and Lydia's conversion from frightened victim to lustful participant is not fully explained as an emotional journey.

Now where's the NEKKID PICS.

Thanks! You're super nice. I'm sorry I have to admit I haven't yet read your stuff (tho I said I'd get right on it) because I've had visitors this weekend. But as soon as they leave, I'm on it!

I like Nora better, too. I have to admit I'm going to have to google Hirst and Brel to meet your challenge. Here's a pic just for you:

http://i251.photobucket.com/albums/gg290/naughtycakes/phonebareboobies.jpg

 

[JustinStrange]

Anyone who can get Emin, Batailles and Bakowski into a sexy, spanking story deserves some kind of medal. I challenge you, for part2, with Damien Hirst, Voltaire and Jaques Brel.

The complete art nerd in me demands to know what you're talking about. I must see this.. Haha. I actually have a Damien Hirst piece as my wallpaper though. I forget the name of the piece though. It's the sculpture of a dagger piercing a sheep's heart.

Fantastic photographs by the way cakes.

 

[naughtycakes]

The complete art nerd in me demands to know what you're talking about. I must see this.. Haha. I actually have a Damien Hirst piece as my wallpaper though. I forget the name of the piece though. It's the sculpture of a dagger piercing a sheep's heart.

Fantastic photographs by the way cakes.

She's referring to some references I dropped to be cute in my first story, "Nora Gets it (Finally!)." It's about a crazy party girl who has to go home to hide out in a sleepy town after getting into some shit while hanging out with her art school/trust fund friends in Europe.

Thanks for the Hirst picture - way cool. I'm going to have to google image him. Glad you liked my pics as well....

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Hey cakes, I'm in awe at winning the nekkid pic, even mjl didn't get that prize.

I've always wanted bigger aureoles and I'm soo jealous. Guys don't understand that you don't really want to look like a thirteen-year-old.

Forget the dare, it was just a bit of fun. Damien Hirst came before Tracey and caused even more ripples than she did. I would recommend reading Voltaire's 'Candide'. It is such a satire on life and, with his assistant, Pangloss, quite a hoot . Jacques Brel was a Belgian singer (in French) who typified problems of identity and nationality - and sang pretty well too.

Thanks for the pic, now give us Nora 2.

More please.

 

[Purifier]

Your story's really hot.

Have to admit I read it most of all because of the really sexy pictures you posted in this thread.

But it was well worth reading.

What I liked about it most:

- The beginning. It starts out right in an interesting situation and gives the details later. Pretty good first few lines, even though I have to admit I skipped through the part that explained the background a bit, because I was eager to get to the action.

- The action: it's definitely hot, a very enjoyable read. There might be some stories that are psychologically deeper when describing what goes on in a woman that turns from reluctant to slut, but you make up for that with your sexy style of writing. And I really like the ruthlessness of the prisoner. I hope he stays at least like that, and doesn't turn soft any time.

- the open end. Very hot last part, makes me wait eagerly for the next part of this story. I want more!!!!!

 

[mjl2010]

Hey cakes, I'm in awe at winning the nekkid pic, even mjl didn't get that prize.

Yeah but I got the pics of her butt and cleavage.

I like her nips too, btw.



MJL

 

[JustinStrange]

She's referring to some references I dropped to be cute in my first story, "Nora Gets it (Finally!)." It's about a crazy party girl who has to go home to hide out in a sleepy town after getting into some shit while hanging out with her art school/trust fund friends in Europe.

Thanks for the Hirst picture - way cool. I'm going to have to google image him. Glad you liked my pics as well....

Far out. I'm really going to have to read your 'Nora' story when I get some free time. It sounds completely deviant, which is right up my alley.

No problem at all about the Hirst photo. I did some research at work. The name of that piece was 'Sacred XVII'. I attached a few more pieces by Hirst that I really dig and think you'll dig as well.

And your photos were utterly fantastic cakes...

 

[JustinStrange]

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