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[Racoonteur]

Side note: This took me about 10 minutes of reading. Anyone could have taken this up and put this problem to

Unrelated: I also don't think a VE looked at this. There's quite a few typos that are still being marked by GoogleDoc/Word's built-in spellcheck function. Simple stuff.

It's a fine story, and you should make the edits necessary to publish this. It'll go over bonkers with the crowd you intended it for, but you should also maybe just listen when others point things out instead of insisting you know better.

Send it back to me with your "typo" corrections. There are none. You are 100% wrong about the VE. Stop baiting.

 

[Racoonteur]

Search your document for "Liv had turned 18 in June"

This is at the very top of the page.
"This is Chapter 2 of a longer story. It is fictional and all characters are at least 18 years old."

 

[Racoonteur]

Unrelated: I also don't think a VE looked at this. There's quite a few typos that are still being marked by GoogleDoc/Word's built-in spellcheck function. Simple stuff.

It's a fine story, and you should make the edits necessary to publish this. It'll go over bonkers with the crowd you intended it for, but you should also maybe just listen when others point things out instead of insisting you know better.

Somebody's not listening, that's for sure.

 

[AwkwardMD]

 

[AwkwardMD]

I don't know why you thought I wouldn't just show what I'm talking about.

Your disclaimer at the beginning does not trump the story doing or saying otherwise.

 

[AwkwardMD]

I'm really not trying to pen you in and make you defensive. Stories can have typos and it's fine. Nobody catches everything.

These are all easy fixes, including the under 18 bit. Just move that to immediately after the first sex scene, when they get back from their ride. Then there's no more sneaking around that happens in proximity to an underage character, and *literally nobody will care* that it's convenient if Liz ages up as soon as the fireworks start.

 

[StillStunned]

Shot through the heart and you're to blame,
You give editors a bad name...

Actually, that's me being a dick. If the editor is doing the work for free, it's always the author's responsibility to do the final check: spellcheck and Read Aloud. (I'd say it's also the author's responsibility to do that before sending the story to the editor.)

 

[Racoonteur]

Okay, I was just gonna answer to you in the email but since you edited this asking me to tell everyone I will. The primary pairing (Main Character and Love Interest) are sneaking around to be together in proximity to an underage character. Waiting for her to be gone, hoping she doesn't overhear or come back early.

It's the "Sneaking Around/We can't get caught" angle, which is fine on its own, except that the person who would catch them is underage.

If the only kink you're interested in pursuing is "sneaking around" and not "sneaking around behind an underage characters back" then the third party can be 18 with no problem.

An edit to make the third party 18 is trivial, and that's what's getting in your way.

Question: If I put "All characters are at least 18 years of age."

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You do know that I start telling the story in July, right?
You do know that makes her 18 years old when this story is being told right?
Two small typos aren't reason to turn a story back.

 

[Racoonteur]

I'm really not trying to pen you in and make you defensive. Stories can have typos and it's fine. Nobody catches everything.

These are all easy fixes, including the under 18 bit. Just move that to immediately after the first sex scene, when they get back from their ride. Then there's no more sneaking around that happens in proximity to an underage character, and *literally nobody will care* that it's convenient if Liz ages up as soon as the fireworks start.

How the hell do you see that she's under 18?

 

[AwkwardMD]

Question: If I put "All characters are at least 18 years of age."

You do know that I start telling the story in July, right?
You do know that makes her 18 years old when this story is being told right?
Two small typos aren't reason to turn a story back.

 

[AwkwardMD]

The story presents the timeline for Liv turning 18 in the middle of other sexy time sneaking around. If she's already 18, remove the line. It can be misconstrued.

Chapters need to stand on their own. They can't rely on chapter 1 establishing that it is July when a later chapter talks about Sex > Liv turned 18 in June > More sex.

 

[Racoonteur]

Shot through the heart and you're to blame,
You give editors a bad name...

Actually, that's me being a dick. If the editor is doing the work for free, it's always the author's responsibility to do the final check: spellcheck and Read Aloud. (I'd say it's also the author's responsibility to do that before sending the story to the edi

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Did you read Chapter 1?

 

[AwkwardMD]

You didn't ask anyone to read chapter 1, and nobody should have to. Chapters need to stand on their own.

 

[Racoonteur]

The story presents the timeline for Liv turning 18 in the middle of other sexy time sneaking around. If she's already 18, remove the line. It can be misconstrued.

Chapters need to stand on their own. They can't rely on chapter 1 establishing that it is July when a later chapter talks about Sex > Liv turned 18 in June > More sex.

Bullshit, you're making shit up to defend your idiotic argument.
Following your suggestion would mean that every single story on this site would need to establish the age of every single character in every single chapter.

Stop playing stupid games.

 

[Racoonteur]

You didn't ask anyone to read chapter 1, and nobody should have to. Chapters need to stand on their own.

Bullshit argument and lame.

 

[Racoonteur]

You didn't ask anyone to read chapter 1, and nobody should have to. Chapters need to stand on their own.

How much do you want to bet I couldn't go into one of your stories and find a chapter where you don't identify everyone in it as being over 18?

Childish argument.

 

[AwkwardMD]

How much do you want to bet I couldn't go into one of your stories and find a chapter where you don't identify everyone in it as being over 18?

Childish argument.

I'm telling you that the order of operations there, Sex > Liv turned 18 in June > More sex, is easily misconstrued if you establish in chapter 1 that the story is happening in July. I don't know why this is causing you to go even more nuclear, because I also keep saying "This is an easy fix"

 

[AwkwardMD]

Further, I'm telling you that it's your job to clear that up, not the site's job to "read your work more carefully and thoroughly"

 

[Racoonteur]

I'm telling you that the order of operations there, Sex > Liv turned 18 in June > More sex, is easily misconstrued if you establish in chapter 1 that the story is happening in July. I don't know why this is causing you to go even more nuclear, because I also keep saying "This is an easy fix"

So, this story has been returned 4 times. I clearly identify that all characters are 18 at the top of the story. I clearly identify that Liv has turned 18 in the story, and now you, for some asinine reason, think that more should be done to prove that there are no underage characters in the story. Not to mention that for some reason you think you have a right to be snide and condescending.

I'm not going nuclear, I'm pointing out your stupid assertion.

 

[Racoonteur]

I'm telling you that the order of operations there, Age Disclaimer > Sex > Liv turned 18 in June > More sex, is easily misconstrued if you establish in chapter 1 that the story is happening in July. I don't know why this is causing you to go even more nuclear, because I also keep saying "This is an easy fix"

Stop omitting things to try to strengthen your poor argument.

 

[AwkwardMD]

So, this story has been returned 4 times. I clearly identify that all characters are 18 at the top of the story. I clearly identify that Liv has turned 18 in the story, and now you, for some asinine reason, think that more should be done to prove that there are no underage characters in the story. Not to mention that for some reason you think you have a right to be snide and condescending.

I'm not going nuclear, I'm pointing out your stupid assertion.

What I think doesn't matter. Laurel, the site admin, has rejected your story and told you to do more to prove there are no underage characters.

 

[Racoonteur]

Further, I'm telling you that it's your job to clear that up, not the site's job to "read your work more carefully and thoroughly"

I'm telling you the story clearly states, twice, that there are no underage characters in the story, but you refuse to admit that, that's enough.

 

[Racoonteur]

What I think doesn't matter. Laurel, the site admin, has rejected your story and told you to do more to prove there are no underage characters.

Which takes me back to my argument that it's her whim.
Thank you!

 

[AwkwardMD]

Your disclaimer at the beginning does not trump the story doing or saying otherwise.

 

[AwkwardMD]

I hope that some of the other people paying attention can see why I default to skepticism regarding "I didn't do anything" AI rejections. We can all see how Raccoon got to their assertions, and where the disconnect is happening. It's not difficult to spot.