Any advice on writing “morning after” or “day after” scenes (i.e., when she’s just lost her virginity to a well-endowed stranger)?

[EmilyMiller]

Listen, go for it. It's all yours.

It's different from what I had in mind, but it'll certainly be interesting to see where you go with this.

Of course, it's nice when people give credit where it's due, in this case I won't be too upset even if you didn't give me a credit. You've done the work here, you write well.

I'd like to thank you for taking the time not just to reply to the query but to even actually put some time and effort into building on my initial idea! As far as I'm aware, it's the first time anyone's ever done that (i.e., work on one of "my" concepts) - in 25 years, I don't think anyone else has tried anything creative based on any of "my" ideas.

Whatever you want to do with it, go right ahead, it's all yours!!!

Just to get back to being an annoying mosquito that you can hear but can’t see… my natural role in life.

I really strongly recommend just giving it a go yourself. I was awful three years ago (and not much better now according to some), it really is just practice. Talent is overrated, hard work and repetition gets you an awful long way.

That and ignoring ad hominems and listening to constructive criticism from people who know what they are doing (the ad hominems tend to be from those who only think they know what they are doing).

 

[SimonDoom]

The first lines from the former virgin's mouth should be, "Oh, my God, it feels like that fucker's still inside me."

It beats the hell out of "When's he going to start?"

 

[Djmac1031]

I really strongly recommend just giving it a go yourself. I was awful three years ago (and not much better now according to some), it really is just practice. Talent is overrated, hard work and repetition gets you an awful long way.

@erotica_n_s

Just to add on to Emily's encouragement: Ive recently been reviewing and editing some old stories and, looking back, I see some pretty rough stuff, some rookie mistakes, some simply, well... BAD WRITING.

But I also see how far I've come. How much I've learned and improved. (although, much like Emily said, some may find IMPROVE debatable (

The point is: just write it. Even if it sucks. Write it, get it out there. You'll make mistakes. We all do. Hell i still make them, all the time.

Write it, read it, edit it, give it your best then set it free.

Ive seen terribly written stories here still find a happy audience.

just go for it.

 

[Baztrachian]

Which century are we talking about here?

Sweetheart, my eyes don't censor themselves to suit modern feminist politics. I know what I see when I see it and I don't pretend it's something else.

 

[PennyThompson]

Sweetheart, my eyes don't censor themselves to suit modern feminist politics. I know what I see when I see it and I don't pretend it's something else.

Mystical woowoo incel-brain thinking

"Papa noticed that Margery's spark had gone from her eyes, he correctly deduced that she had been deflowered by a man of ill repute! It is good that I am waiting until a proper gentleman pays Papa a suitable dowry for my hand... And if such a day never comes, I shall be content in my spinstership!"

 

[Djmac1031]

Sweetheart, my eyes don't censor themselves to suit modern feminist politics. I know what I see when I see it and I don't pretend it's something else.

funny, I was just thinking the same thing in regards to your comments...

 

[AchtungNight]

Every person is different. Sexual preferences are different too. Take my FMC Lisa- her first vaginal sex is with an average dick but attached to a caring guy and she enjoys it. Same for first oral sex. Then her first anal sex is with a selfish jerk and yeah, it was consensual, but she didn’t enjoy it and is reluctant to ever have it again. Bit of an in joke because the idea of anal sex has always bothered me- never had it, not sure if I want to- and Lisa is a manifestation of my ideal fantasy girlfriend. Getting away from the point. Like others have said, she’s very active physically and mentally, that helps her get through the stress of sex without emotional distress. But she still has some issues, of course. Similar for all characters, I’m sure.

 

[EmilyMiller]

Stretching Shilpa’s Sweet Sphincter - based on part of @erotica_n_s’s outline has just been published. Of course I’ve now noticed some ugly typos. They burn, precious .

 

[Baztrachian]

funny, I was just thinking the same thing in regards to your comments...

Oh, did I offend you?

 

[MillieDynamite]

Me thinks you need new spectacles.

Sweetheart, my eyes don't censor themselves to suit modern feminist politics. I know what I see when I see it and I don't pretend it's something else.

 

[erotica_n_s]

Stretching Shilpa’s Sweet Sphincter - based on part of @erotica_n_s’s outline has just been published. Of course I’ve now noticed some ugly typos. They burn, precious .

Well done on your submission.

I’d like to respectfully mention, your work is different in tone from what I had in mind.

I was thinking of something more tender, emotional, and evocative, like a dreamy piano piece. Yours is like a sexy piece of electro-pop.

It’s a fine piece of work - all I’m saying - very respectfully - is that I had a different ‘tone’ in mind.

 

[PennyThompson]

Well done on your submission.

I’d like to respectfully mention, your work is different in tone from what I had in mind.

I was thinking of something more tender, emotional, and evocative, like a dreamy piano piece. Yours is like a sexy piece of electro-pop.

It’s a fine piece of work - all I’m saying - very respectfully - is that I had a different ‘tone’ in mind.

You should write it then, make your dream a reality

 

[EmilyMiller]

Well done on your submission.

I’d like to respectfully mention, your work is different in tone from what I had in mind.

I was thinking of something more tender, emotional, and evocative, like a dreamy piano piece. Yours is like a sexy piece of electro-pop.

It’s a fine piece of work - all I’m saying - very respectfully - is that I had a different ‘tone’ in mind.

What @PennyThompson said. The only way you get ‘your’ story is by writing it. You can do it!

 

[TheWritingGroup]

Well done on your submission.

On this site, "well done submission" implies someone calling you a toad and punishing you for breathing wrong.

--Annie

 

[Djmac1031]

It’s a fine piece of work - all I’m saying - very respectfully - is that I had a different ‘tone’ in mind.

That's the beauty of erotica, and storytelling in general.

We all write the same stories. It's how WE tell them that makes them unique.

Go write your unique version.