Any advice on writing “morning after” or “day after” scenes (i.e., when she’s just lost her virginity to a well-endowed stranger)?

[EmilyMiller]

@erotica_n_s that took me 1:15 to write a first cut, and I then probably spent ten minutes doing a rough proof read. I also had two Teams calls with colleagues in between. One for twenty minutes, one for fifteen. So let’s say fifty minutes of actual writing. Under one hour.

How much time have you spent on bulleted lists? Maybe there is a better way for you to realize this fantasy.

 

[Voboy]

Um…

THE END​

I guess. When’s my next Teams meeting?

Yes. You've described Shilpa's End.

But what about her soreness the next morning???? What about that????

 

[EmilyMiller]

Yes. You've described Shilpa's End.

But what about her soreness the next morning???? What about that????

Shilpa woke the next morning rested and energized. However she had worn her partner out and he was complaining that his frenulum had been stretched too much…

 

[Voboy]

Shilpa woke the next morning rested and energized. However she had worn her partner out and he was complaining that his frenulum had been stretched too much…

Touche.

 

[Actingup]

Shilpa woke the next morning rested and energized. However she had worn her partner out and he was complaining that his frenulum had been stretched too much…

“Emily writes anal” should be a ticketed experience in the remonetized Literotica.

 

[EmilyMiller]

“Emily writes anal” should be a ticketed experience in the remonetized Literotica.

Aw! Thanks

 

[Djmac1031]

@erotica_n_s that took me 1:15 to write a first cut, and I then probably spent ten minutes doing a rough proof read. I also had two Teams calls with colleagues in between. One for twenty minutes, one for fifteen. So let’s say fifty minutes of actual writing. Under one hour.

How much time have you spent on bulleted lists? Maybe there is a better way for you to realize this fantasy.

Sigh. I haven't been able to write a word in weeks and you pump that out in between Teams meetings...

 

[EmilyMiller]

Sigh. I haven't been able to write a word in weeks and you pump that out in between Teams meetings...

Women just multitask better, hun

 

[NoObjection]

Can you get off of the bad porn theme and take her cherry with an average cock to make it more credible and less artificial.

 

[EmilyMiller]

Can you get off of the bad porn theme and take her cherry with an average cock to make it more credible and less artificial.

Probably helpful to include who you are addressing. @erotica_n_s, me, some other party? Makes things clearer.

 

[NoObjection]

Probably helpful to include who you are addressing. @erotica_n_s, me, some other party? Makes things clearer.

Obviously, to whom ever is looking for help with writing this poorly conceived story.

 

[NoObjection]

Obviously, to whom ever is looking for help with writing this poorly conceived story.

So presumably @erotica_n_s

 

[EmilyMiller]

Am working on a ‘first-time story’, There are other aspects to it, e.g., an ‘inter-racial’ aspect – a Caucasian dude and a woman from India, but that's a different discussion.

He’s well-endowed and they have sex in multiple positions, etc.

I want to write the “day after” scene, where we see the young woman the following day, with some aches and pains, and a little post-coital dysphoria.

How do I make the “aches and pains” accurate and believable? What “aches and pains” is a woman likely to experience after vigorous penile-vaginal and penile-anal sex? I mean how much detail to put into this?

I think this is as important as the sex scenes themselves, if not more important – it’s about how it has affected/impacted her. I think it's this 'day after' scene that's really going to give weight to the sex scenes themselves, to depict how 'impactful' the sex was, physically and emotionally.

As for the emotional impact it’s likely to have had, well, I can work on that, and of course, input is welcome. It's the details regarding the physical sensations that I could most use some help with.

Dear @erotica_n_s

I’m going to submit a collated, expanded, edited version of my gonzo writing, crediting you and your outline (and linking to both).

If you say you hate this idea pre-publication, I’ll pull it. If you say you hate it post-publication, I’ll get it deleted.

No wish to do something you are uncomfortable with. And I want to respect your IP.

 

[Britva415]

Teams meetings...

Women just multitask better, hun

Just goes to show, multitasking is really just singletasking in front of other people

 

[EmilyMiller]

Just goes to show, multitasking is really just singletasking in front of other people

Multitasking is a way to make being disorganized sound positive.

 

[stickygirl]

Multitasking is a way to make being disorganized sound positive.

Multitasking is when you get cramp in your first hand

 

[PennyThompson]

Multitasking is when you get cramp in your first hand

That's when you switch from First-Person to Third-Person, right?

 

[stickygirl]

That's when you switch from First-Person to Third-Person, right?

Didn't realise there was a queue

 

[PennyThompson]

Didn't realise there was a queue

the second person in the queue always seems to get left out around here...

 

[Djmac1031]

the second person in the queue always seems to get left out around here...

So does that make them stuck in the cuck-queue?

 

[MillieDynamite]

The first lines from the former virgin's mouth should be, "Oh, my God, it feels like that fucker's still inside me."

 

[stickygirl]

The first lines from the former virgin's mouth should be, "Oh, my God, it feels like that fucker's still inside me."

Or "Is that it?"

 

[Djmac1031]

Or "Is that it?"

"I waxed for THIS???"

 

[erotica_n_s]

Dear @erotica_n_s

I’m going to submit a collated, expanded, edited version of my gonzo writing, crediting you and your outline (and linking to both).

If you say you hate this idea pre-publication, I’ll pull it. If you say you hate it post-publication, I’ll get it deleted.

No wish to do something you are uncomfortable with. And I want to respect your IP.

Listen, go for it. It's all yours.

It's different from what I had in mind, but it'll certainly be interesting to see where you go with this.

Of course, it's nice when people give credit where it's due, in this case I won't be too upset even if you didn't give me a credit. You've done the work here, you write well.

I'd like to thank you for taking the time not just to reply to the query but to even actually put some time and effort into building on my initial idea! As far as I'm aware, it's the first time anyone's ever done that (i.e., work on one of "my" concepts) - in 25 years, I don't think anyone else has tried anything creative based on any of "my" ideas.

Whatever you want to do with it, go right ahead, it's all yours!!!

 

[EmilyMiller]

Listen, go for it. It's all yours.

It's different from what I had in mind, but it'll certainly be interesting to see where you go with this.

Of course, it's nice when people give credit where it's due, in this case I won't be too upset even if you didn't give me a credit. You've done the work here, you write well.

I'd like to thank you for taking the time not just to reply to the query but to even actually put some time and effort into building on my initial idea! As far as I'm aware, it's the first time anyone's ever done that (i.e., work on one of "my" concepts) - in 25 years, I don't think anyone else has tried anything creative based on any of "my" ideas.

Whatever you want to do with it, go right ahead, it's all yours!!!

Thank you - I appreciate you saying that