Has anyone else drawn the ire of story critic Stacnash? 🤣

[NuclearFairy]

Well the comment is in https://www.literotica.com/s/the-party-225/comments

I got 2 stars from them so could've been worse. But the only take away I got was that they felt that tentacle porn should never have romance, and that shy girls can't push themselves past their comfort zone.

Based on my personal experience, the conversations were realistic, and I find guys asking about birth control sexy. >_> Doesn't anyone else?

 

[Kelliezgirl]

Well the comment is in https://www.literotica.com/s/the-party-225/comments

I got 2 stars from them so could've been worse. But the only take away I got was that they felt that tentacle porn should never have romance, and that shy girls can't push themselves past their comfort zone.

Based on my personal experience, the conversations were realistic, and I find guys asking about birth control sexy. >_> Doesn't anyone else?

Well, I don't find it super sexy but to each their own I suppose.
The problem with the dialogue criticism is that, in the words of Jerry Pournelle (who knew a thing or two about writing) "All dialogue is first draft."
People repeat words, stutter, stammer, it's normal. The rules of grammar don't apply to do dialogue because that's not how people talk.

Also... guys bolting when she wants to get kinky? That's what I'd really call you out for.

 

[NuclearFairy]

Well, I don't find it super sexy but to each their own I suppose.

Well, to be fair I didn't find it kinky until after I'd endured a hellacious pregnancy. Then after that, guy asking about birth control in fiction became sexy. Funny thing is I still have an impregnation fetish. I think my libido might be a bit confused at times.

Also... guys bolting when she wants to get kinky? That's what I'd really call you out for.

I only had one ex who did it true, but I have gone through it. When I brought up even the mildest of my kinks he was right out.

 

[lovecraft68]

in retrospect, I kinda wish I'd reached out to him and given him full permission to write 8k words or more on Barbie's traumatic backstory on how she became a sex worker at a small town Adult Book Store.

What, someone needs to fuck up a wet dream?

 

[Erozetta]

Also... guys bolting when she wants to get kinky? That's what I'd really call you out for.

That's believable to me. I've scared off my share of guys by being honest about my kinks.

 

[lovecraft68]

Also... guys bolting when she wants to get kinky? That's what I'd really call you out for.

Guys are famous for locker room talk about how they want the porn star

Then the woman wants to get wild and its um....where did they learn that, how many guys she been with, does she watch porn? I don't know how to do that.

My wife was a phone sex operator back in college and she said the average guy can't talk dirty to save their life. She'd go on and on and then stop and say "what are you doing with me?" Uh...suck your tit?

I imagine a forum filled with guys who write erotica would do better, but that's not the average guy.

 

[lovecraft68]

That's believable to me. I've scared off my share of guys by being honest about my kinks.

I collect knives and after my wife and I had been together for a couple of years she asks me

"So, are those just for show?"
Me "Well, I think its frowned upon to stab people."
Her, "No, I mean how good are you with them?"
Me "How good are you at staying still? also me "Please sign this waiver"

 

[TheLobster]

I've been through the triple Total Perspective Vortex of reviews by Stacnash, Commentarista (5x) and AwkwardMD/Omenainen, and walked away eating the fairy cake.

Either I'm the best writer here, or the blandest.

You're the proof that a Venn diagram of three circles can sometimes, in defiance of basic geometry, intersect at only a single point.

 

[iwatchus]

I collect knives and after my wife and I had been together for a couple of years she asks me

"So, are those just for show?"
Me "Well, I think its frowned upon to stab people."
Her, "No, I mean how good are you with them?"
Me "How good are you at staying still? also me "Please sign this waiver"

Having just read the discussion about men bolting when women describe their kinks. I may have had a different interpretation of this than intended.

 

[Erozetta]

My wife was a phone sex operator back in college and she said the average guy can't talk dirty to save their life. She'd go on and on and then stop and say "what are you doing with me?" Uh...suck your tit?

I've also done that (I lasted a few months, it turns out you need to speak and be comfortable on the phone and I'm very much not.) It was so incredibly bad.

There were a couple of guys who had really nice voices and did know how to talk, but one of them got me laughing so hard I snorted and could never take his call again due to being absolutely mortified. I quit shortly after.

 

[NuclearFairy]

I collect knives and after my wife and I had been together for a couple of years she asks me

"So, are those just for show?"
Me "Well, I think its frowned upon to stab people."
Her, "No, I mean how good are you with them?"
Me "How good are you at staying still? also me "Please sign this waiver"

Throwing knives is a good couples sport though.

 

[StillStunned]

You're the proof that a Venn diagram of three circles can sometimes, in defiance of basic geometry, intersect at only a single point.

I'm a scientific anomaly. Turns out my wife has been right all this time when she calls me weird.

 

[lovecraft68]

Throwing knives is a good couples sport though.

My wife is on the short list of people I wouldn't throw one at.

Slicing off her clothes is another story.

Proud to say I've yet to slip and leave a mark. But I am getting older...

 

[lovecraft68]

Having just read the discussion about men bolting when women describe their kinks. I may have had a different interpretation of this than intended.

It would have a very different context in an LW story

 

[pink_silk_glove]

AH
"If you 1 bomb my story at least have the decency to leave a comment."

Also AH
"Lol, Stacnash and her comments about why she 1 bombed my story"

Yes, hypocrisy is the ultimate irony. ; )

 

[pink_silk_glove]

I wonder if anyone hates their own work?

I have one that I don't like.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

You're the proof that a Venn diagram of three circles can sometimes, in defiance of basic geometry, intersect at only a single point.

In non Euclidian geometry, there are some degenerate cases, usually involving tangents, in which this can be a possibility. Kind of thinking the involvement of 'degenerate cases' and 'tangents' pulls @StillStunned in quite nicely.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

I have one that I don't like.

Same, I almost didn't publish Consequence to Recompense, but it was a specific request by someone I respect, and by them, it was well received, so. It's my lowest rated story, and generally mostly positively commented on. Interesting combination.

 

[StillStunned]

In non Euclidian geometry, there are some degenerate cases, usually involving tangents, in which this can be a possibility. Kind of thinking the involvement of 'degenerate cases' and 'tangents' pulls @StillStunned in quite nicely.

I'll own tangents, but degenerate? I'm probably one of the most vanilla writers here!

 

[Erozetta]

I have one that I don't like.

I've written quite a few that I don't like.

None that I hate, but I'm only fond of a couple of my stories.

 

[lovecraft68]

In non Euclidian geometry, there are some degenerate cases, usually involving tangents, in which this can be a possibility. Kind of thinking the involvement of 'degenerate cases' and 'tangents' pulls @StillStunned in quite nicely.

Read a lot of H.P. Lovecraft? According to him that type of geometry opens dimensions other worlds.

Dreams in the Witch House wouldn't lie to us.

 

[NuclearFairy]

My wife is on the short list of people I wouldn't throw one at.

Slicing off her clothes is another story.

Proud to say I've yet to slip and leave a mark. But I am getting older...

We usually set up targets and throw knives and axes at them.

The clothes though... Hmm, That might be an intriguing way to convince him to get rid of some of the rags he likes to call shirts. I'd have to be the one wearing them, but he's never had a problem with that.

 

[lovecraft68]

We usually set up targets and throw knives and axes at them.

The clothes though... Hmm, That might be an intriguing way to convince him to get rid of some of the rags he likes to call shirts. I'd have to be the one wearing them, but he's never had a problem with that.

I have a lot of metal or horror t-shirts that have seen better days. My wife once in a while will say "Why do you still dress like you're 14? Getting to old for that."

Me-"Then ditch the Disney and Snoopy shirts and I will."

Her-Never mind.

 

[Erozetta]

I have a lot of metal or horror t-shirts that have seen better days. My wife once in a while will say "Why do you still dress like you're 14? Getting to old for that."

Me-"Then ditch the Disney and Snoopy shirts and I will."

Her-Never mind.

Never too old to engage in a style you enjoy.


*Has a large collection of horror T-shirts and goth stuff, might be biased.*

 

[NuclearFairy]

I have a lot of metal or horror t-shirts that have seen better days. My wife once in a while will say "Why do you still dress like you're 14? Getting to old for that."

Me-"Then ditch the Disney and Snoopy shirts and I will."

Her-Never mind.

Nah, I don't bug him about his horror shirts. I get it all the holes just make it look better. It's the plain ones that're so full of holes that I can't even wear them around the house that I bug him about. his response is always, "But they're comfy, and clothes are expensive."