Kantarii
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Okay, up front, I’ve started work on a chapter of “Best Friends Forever” that is probably going to be both interesting and a headache to write. A majority of the chapter is a post sex scene conversation via texting. Honestly, I think it will be a lot of fun to write, giving me a lot of freedom to explore character thoughts as well as a different approach to writing dialogue. I do have a clear idea - that I would like to use this specific chapter to expand character development among other things.
I thought about this format
Excerpt:
“Wake up, sexy lady,” Jason’s missed text reads.
My thoughts begin to stir. I shouldn’t send a reply to Jason. I already know what’s on in his perverted mind. Despite my better judgement, I decide to send him a bullshit reply, hoping he’s not awake now to read it.
“Sorry, I was busy,” I text, taking a puff off my cigarette.
“What are you doing,” his text beams back.
“Fuck,” I blurt, mumbling to myself, “I knew I shouldn’t have sent that text.”
“Smoking,” I text, flicking the ashes from my cigarette out the back door.
“That’s a nasty habit for a pretty lady.”
I lean back up against the drier and roll my eyes.
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This probably isn’t the best example from what I have written so far, but it showcases a few things I’d like to refine my talents on to improve my writing, etc, blah-blah-blah
1. I started off with “I text” used in place of “I said” and shortened my dialogue/action considerably since I’m holding onto that crutch.
2. I noted the speedy response from Jason
3. It stirs my thoughts to speak audibly/ beyond the text conversation.
However, I went back to the formula “I said/I text. Which was great, but it got monotonous.
4.Since there is no way to convey audial sounds like on a phone call, Jason’s response looks better to me written as a pure dialogue quote with no tags, etc.
5.instead of a verbal outburst, I touched on a brief physical action before returning to more dialogue.
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So that’s the formula/ approach I settled in on to use in my next chapter I’m working on. Hopefully, I clarified my approach. But, I’d love to use this thread to share ideas on different ways to approach a chapter dealing with texting in stories. Hell, let’s not be restrictive, and include phone conversations as well.
Kant
I thought about this format
Excerpt:
“Wake up, sexy lady,” Jason’s missed text reads.
My thoughts begin to stir. I shouldn’t send a reply to Jason. I already know what’s on in his perverted mind. Despite my better judgement, I decide to send him a bullshit reply, hoping he’s not awake now to read it.
“Sorry, I was busy,” I text, taking a puff off my cigarette.
“What are you doing,” his text beams back.
“Fuck,” I blurt, mumbling to myself, “I knew I shouldn’t have sent that text.”
“Smoking,” I text, flicking the ashes from my cigarette out the back door.
“That’s a nasty habit for a pretty lady.”
I lean back up against the drier and roll my eyes.
**************
This probably isn’t the best example from what I have written so far, but it showcases a few things I’d like to refine my talents on to improve my writing, etc, blah-blah-blah
1. I started off with “I text” used in place of “I said” and shortened my dialogue/action considerably since I’m holding onto that crutch.
2. I noted the speedy response from Jason
3. It stirs my thoughts to speak audibly/ beyond the text conversation.
However, I went back to the formula “I said/I text. Which was great, but it got monotonous.
4.Since there is no way to convey audial sounds like on a phone call, Jason’s response looks better to me written as a pure dialogue quote with no tags, etc.
5.instead of a verbal outburst, I touched on a brief physical action before returning to more dialogue.
**************
So that’s the formula/ approach I settled in on to use in my next chapter I’m working on. Hopefully, I clarified my approach. But, I’d love to use this thread to share ideas on different ways to approach a chapter dealing with texting in stories. Hell, let’s not be restrictive, and include phone conversations as well.
Kant
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