Stimtheone
Really Experienced
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- Dec 28, 2020
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Looking to get some feedback on pretty much any part of this developing story I have put out. Feel free to offer opinion on either the plot, the setting, the sex scenes, the kinks I am employing or the implied critique in the story. The lack of comments despite decent ratings is making one feel self conscious.
Part 1 of Deviant Empire
This is a link to the first part, and equally there may be offered feedback on just that part or the entire series if one wants.
A few notices:
This is a LONG story. My existing master document is 211 pages long in google docs, though the first part is intentionally short as an introduction, with increasing length of the parts.
I am keenly aware that I am writing more of a story rather than erotica. I consider it more plot with sex in it rather than one that focuses on the sex most.
There are some gaps in what is being presented. Those are intentional.
Yes, I know I am shining a big light on plenty of issues. And sometimes go a bit too hard.
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So, feedback is welcome.
Part 1 of Deviant Empire
This is a link to the first part, and equally there may be offered feedback on just that part or the entire series if one wants.
A few notices:
This is a LONG story. My existing master document is 211 pages long in google docs, though the first part is intentionally short as an introduction, with increasing length of the parts.
I am keenly aware that I am writing more of a story rather than erotica. I consider it more plot with sex in it rather than one that focuses on the sex most.
There are some gaps in what is being presented. Those are intentional.
Yes, I know I am shining a big light on plenty of issues. And sometimes go a bit too hard.
*
So, feedback is welcome.