joy_of_cooking
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Title is how a beta reader described my story. It's a sweet first time story about an awkward, pimply 19 year old with a poorly paid job and a lot of family responsibilities and a fascination with vampires and chupacabras and stuff, none of which help him in the romance department.
The plot twist is that
his girlfriend isn't kidding about being a vampire. One day she goes off and
murders a couple of other vampires in the aforementioned graphic fashion that has him waking up screaming from his nightmares afterward. He dumps her and in a sketchy epilogue sort of way we learn that he finds professional success and his happily ever after with some other girl he meets at work while she bums along working the same dead-end jobs she had before.
Erotic Horror readers are going to be champing at the bit for about 80% of the story wondering when the scary stuff starts.
First Time readers are not going to be amused (or forgiving) when they figure out I've slipped a few paragraphs of literally medieval torture execution into their first time story.
It really is a Romance story, except
he doesn't get the right girl in the end
. Are Romance readers okay with that?
I guess it has to be Nonhuman? Although I feel like they like their vampires cool and sexy, and not kind of pathetic and sad. And all the vampire stuff is played for laughs until the climax. We're 13k words in before he realizes she isn't just humoring him.
Maybe I should spend more time thinking about how I'm going to publish my stories before I write them, instead of writing whatever nonsense I want and then looking for a place to jam them in.
The plot twist is that
his girlfriend isn't kidding about being a vampire. One day she goes off and
murders a couple of other vampires in the aforementioned graphic fashion that has him waking up screaming from his nightmares afterward. He dumps her and in a sketchy epilogue sort of way we learn that he finds professional success and his happily ever after with some other girl he meets at work while she bums along working the same dead-end jobs she had before.
Erotic Horror readers are going to be champing at the bit for about 80% of the story wondering when the scary stuff starts.
First Time readers are not going to be amused (or forgiving) when they figure out I've slipped a few paragraphs of literally medieval torture execution into their first time story.
It really is a Romance story, except
he doesn't get the right girl in the end
. Are Romance readers okay with that?
I guess it has to be Nonhuman? Although I feel like they like their vampires cool and sexy, and not kind of pathetic and sad. And all the vampire stuff is played for laughs until the climax. We're 13k words in before he realizes she isn't just humoring him.
Maybe I should spend more time thinking about how I'm going to publish my stories before I write them, instead of writing whatever nonsense I want and then looking for a place to jam them in.
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