Old 12-17-2012, 01:31 PM   #1
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Redundant Expressions

A new series of posts on yet another writers'/editors' aid in effective, concise, crisp writing. These are redundancies a writer should try to avoid--in the U.S. style system. The element that should be dropped is in italics. As with so much, of course, these may purposely be used in dialogue to help reveal character.

Also, there could be a reason why the reduncy is needed in a particular case. It's something that should be scrutinized, though, to determine whether it is needed.

Adjectives, Adverbs/ and Nouns:

absolute necessity
active consideration
advance reservation

baffling enigma
both alike

Capitol building
close proximity
complete monopoly
completely surround
component parts
conclusive proof

doctorate degree

eliminate entirely
enclosed herewith
end result
equal halves
exact same

final outcome
free gift
future plans
future occurrence

general rule
great majority

important essentials
invited guest

might possibly
more superior
mutual cooperation
mutually agreeable

new initiatives
new innovations
new recruit

old adage

past history
personal opinion
personally reviewed
positive identification
proposed plan

really dangerous
root cause

self-confused
serious crisis
single unit
surrounding circumstances

temporary reprieve
temporary loan

unsubstantiated rumor
untimely death (unless you really, really didn't like the person)
usual custom

weather conditions
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Old 12-18-2012, 02:42 PM   #2
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Prepositional Phrases (element that might be dropped is in italics):

6 a.m. in the morning
red in color
rectangular in shape
large in size
heavy in weight
brief in duration
few in number
classified into groups
depreciated in value
estimated at about
filled to capacity
last of all
plan in advance
smile on his face
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Old 12-19-2012, 02:37 AM   #3
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One I've come to despise is a 'newsism'.

"Our reporter is there, on the ground."

I've never heard on the bus, or in a plane, or cowering behind a stone wall.
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Old 12-19-2012, 12:07 PM   #4
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Verb Extras (element that might be dropped is in italics):

assemble together
attached hereto
cancel out
connect up
continue on
enclosed herein
face up to
follow after
hurry up
joined together
lift up
made out of
merge together
penetrate into
study up
termed as
visit with
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One I've come to despise is a 'newsism'.

"Our reporter is there, on the ground."

I've never heard on the bus, or in a plane, or cowering behind a stone wall.
I hate it when the news anchor cuts to a colleague standing outside in the rain, snow or close to heavy traffic to say something that could have been said more clearly in the studio. I can understand it for reporting on disasters such as floods or rail crashes when the pictures add to the story but I have seen too many unnecessary outside broadcasts.

Why does a reporter have to stand outside 10 Downing Street or close to the Houses of Parliament to speak about a political issue when nothing is happening in the background? They could have a stock shot of either place as a still background if they want to have a scene that is not just a talking head.

A worse example is commentary on underwater nature films. What is the point of recording a speech from a diver breathing through a mouthpiece when later dubbing could convey the information much more effectively?
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Old 12-20-2012, 02:04 PM   #6
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Why does a reporter have to stand outside 10 Downing Street or close to the Houses of Parliament to speak about a political issue when nothing is happening in the background? They could have a stock shot of either place as a still background if they want to have a scene that is not just a talking head.
It isn't something they just made up as a good idea. Their consumer studies showed that watchers felt they were more authoritative by being on the scene and also that the viewers preferred shifting visuals backing up the points to unrelieved talking head. I'm pretty sure their studies reached correct conclusions as far as the comparative size of audience they'd get.
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Old 12-20-2012, 03:06 PM   #7
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"Repeat after Me!" Phrases (element that might be dropped is in italics):

any and all
exact same
just exactly
new all-time record high
today's modern manager
unless and until (one or the other; both not needed)
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Old 12-21-2012, 12:00 PM   #8
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Prefixes, Suffixes (element that might be dropped is in italics):


irregardless
to the westward
unrelentless
upcoming
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He shrugged his shoulders.

What else is he going to shrug?
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