First time writing a poem. Feedback appreciated

lindsaybb91

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Tell me I'm a good girl, but fuck me like a bad girl

Tell me I'm a good girl, but fuck me like a bad girl

I used to kind of cringe at being called a "good girl".

I thought it was the term itself.
But it wasn't. It was the people using it.
I haven't been with many men that felt truly dominant to me.
Some that said they were...and just weren't.

Once I was with someone that felt dominant, though...I started to love that phrase.
I mean...I really fucking loved it.

Growing up, being a good girl meant something completely different.
It meant doing my homework every night, and getting on the honor roll, and never getting in trouble and being home by my curfew. Which was when the street lights came on.

Now...it means sucking a cock like I'm dying and his cum is the antidote.
Taking a belt to the ass.
Taking a pounding meant to split me in two.

I want you to tell me I'm a good girl, but please fuck me like I'm a bad girl.

Because I'm a bad, bad girl.
I'm mouthy. Bratty. I don't always immediately do what I'm told.

I need punished.
Taught a lesson.
Put in my place.
Make me sorry.

Give me your worst.
Show me what happens to mouthy girls.

Because I might be a bad girl, but I'm so good at it, you'll be telling me what a good girl I am before you know it.
 
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The first question I would ask is this: what, in your opinion, makes this poetry and not prose? The way I think of it, writing a poem means setting out to say something that you can't say in ordinary speech.
 
Tell me I'm a good girl,
but fuck me like a bad girl.


Keep in mind that poems can be read and listened to.

Tell me I'm a good girl.
Butt fuck me like a bad girl.


Make it less confusing.

Tell me I'm a good girl.
Please fuck me like a bad girl.
 
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