TheBlackMoth
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I'm looking for feedback on my first two stories. I welcome editorial feedback about the writing and story structure, but more importantly whether you become invested in the characters and want a third installment. I don't yet have a clear vision how to bring the story back together after where I leave it, though I do have a few vignettes written.
In story number two I have a problem of perspective, because I switched it and didn't edit carefully before submitting. I know that is messy and I appologize.
http://www.literotica.com/s/hector-road-pt-01
http://www.literotica.com/s/hector-road-pt-02
Thank you in advance
In story number two I have a problem of perspective, because I switched it and didn't edit carefully before submitting. I know that is messy and I appologize.
http://www.literotica.com/s/hector-road-pt-01
http://www.literotica.com/s/hector-road-pt-02
Thank you in advance