First time author looking for an editor

I wrote my first story for literotica and would like it if an editor could look over it before I submit it to the general public.

It is the first chapter of a longer bdsm story. The main theme of the story is submission but there is very little of it in this chapter. The story is very light on descriptions and has a purposefully sterile and cold tone. It is purely heterosexual at the moment but may involve lesbianism in the future.

I'm not a native english speaker but I think my english is fairly good, so that shouldn't be a problem. My main interest in looking for an editor is someone who can correct my grammer and identify weird phrasing and offer better alternatives. I also have a big problem with commas.

I'm open to feedback in regard to content. If a characters motivation isn't very clear or some part could be tightened up I would love to hear about it. I'd also be happy for help in finding an appropriate title.

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Thank you for the tip