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My First Erotica
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The_Ghost_Man
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I like the passion, and the rawness of it. There are a couple of points where I'd like to see it fleshed out a little. The feel of his cock entering you, your face when he slaps you, the feeling of your orgasm, and how it makes you feel bout him. And there are a couple of typos that a quick reread will get rid of
All in all, I'm a fan. I really want to see where you go with your next one.
All in all, I'm a fan. I really want to see where you go with your next one.
J_R_Ashunwhy
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There is a feedback forum:
http://forum.literotica.com/forumdisplay.php?f=1
If/when your stories post, I suggest that you post the story link--not a wall of text--and a brief description of your story there to solicit feedback.
http://forum.literotica.com/forumdisplay.php?f=1
If/when your stories post, I suggest that you post the story link--not a wall of text--and a brief description of your story there to solicit feedback.
