EmilyMiller
Good men did nothing
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A normal woman is captured by a wealthy European aristocrat. She is held essentially as a sex slave, and used for breeding purposes.
She has the appearance of freedom, but her every public appearance is carefully controlled and stage-managed. She knows that the aristocrat’s henchmen are near and all it would take is one hypodermic needle for her to have an unfortunate and unexplained heart attack. There have been other strange deaths of people who have married into his family in the past.
Her days are agony. Her nights full of sexual torture. Her whole life is a facade, nothing is real.
But then she has an idea. A daring idea to highlight both her plight and maybe get help. She doctors a family photo in ways that even a myopic bat wearing sunglasses would find immediately bizarre. This is how she will get her cry for help out. This is how she will save herself.
I’m still thinking about what happens in chapter two.
Working title: The Princess and the Photo
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Now, while I think the overall plot is pretty realistic, verging on gritty, I feel that the photograph stuff is just too unbelievable. Will it rip readers out of the story?
What do you think?
Any help appreciated.
Emily
She has the appearance of freedom, but her every public appearance is carefully controlled and stage-managed. She knows that the aristocrat’s henchmen are near and all it would take is one hypodermic needle for her to have an unfortunate and unexplained heart attack. There have been other strange deaths of people who have married into his family in the past.
Her days are agony. Her nights full of sexual torture. Her whole life is a facade, nothing is real.
But then she has an idea. A daring idea to highlight both her plight and maybe get help. She doctors a family photo in ways that even a myopic bat wearing sunglasses would find immediately bizarre. This is how she will get her cry for help out. This is how she will save herself.
I’m still thinking about what happens in chapter two.
Working title: The Princess and the Photo
—
Now, while I think the overall plot is pretty realistic, verging on gritty, I feel that the photograph stuff is just too unbelievable. Will it rip readers out of the story?
What do you think?
Any help appreciated.
Emily