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[Comshaw]

Coffee should never ever be contaminated with crap like "Pumpkin Spice" or any other crappy additive. Coffee, strong, black and hot is the way!


Comshaw

 

[AwkwardMD]

Morning people are categorically the worst.

 

[SimonDoom]

I'm a morning person, and I rock.

 

[EmilyMiller]

We don't get enough space aliens,

clones,

dinosaurs,

Not as yet - I did have a big dragon

androids,

and gynoids

or genetically engineered sex specimens

in our erotica!

You should read some of my stuff - albeit the gynoids are a WIP

 

[NuclearFairy]

Pineapple on pizza is amazing, as is barbecue sauce and Alfredo sauce. However a pineapple ham or glazed ham is gross. Don't ask me why, just accept that taste buds are just as weird as brains.

 

[iwatchus]

ou should read some of my stuff - albeit the gynoids are a WIP

I will attest it’s all good even the one I haven’t read she is nagging me about. Ok I am taking that one on faith but I have it in good advice that I will like it

 

[AwkwardMD]

I'm a morning person, and I rock.

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[EmilyMiller]

I will attest it’s all good even the one I haven’t read she is nagging me about. Ok I am taking that one on faith but I have it in good advice that I will like it

I always give good advice

 

[BryanRichardson]

barbecue sauce and Alfredo sauce.

On the same pizza? Or two different, side by side pizza’s?

I ask because the thought of both on one pizza still has me making a very displeased face. Definitely not for me.

 

[NuclearFairy]

On the same pizza? Or two different, side by side pizza’s?

I ask because the thought of both on one pizza still has me making a very displeased face. Definitely not for me.

I've never had them both on the same pizza. It would be interesting to try it though.

 

[Comshaw]

I'm a morning person, and I rock.

Yeah, me too, sitting there in my rocking chair.

Comshaw

 

[Comshaw]

Pineapple on pizza is amazing, as is barbecue sauce and Alfredo sauce. However a pineapple ham or glazed ham is gross. Don't ask me why, just accept that taste buds are just as weird as brains.

I agree. To attest to that, I believe anyone who likes black licorice should be whipped with the stuff. Vile, nasty stuff it is!

Comshaw

 

[NuclearFairy]

I agree. To attest to that, I believe anyone who likes black licorice should be whipped with the stuff. Vile, nasty stuff it is!

Comshaw

I was always grateful that my grandpa loved it, because it gave me someone to give my black jelly beans to at Easter.

 

[Kelliezgirl]

I was always grateful that my grandpa loved it, because it gave me someone to give my black jelly beans to at Easter.

Every family needs one, for that very reason.

 

[SimonDoom]

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You know she agrees with me.

 

[Statius]

Pineapple on pizza is amazing, as is barbecue sauce and Alfredo sauce. However a pineapple ham or glazed ham is gross. Don't ask me why, just accept that taste buds are just as weird as brains.

Ok ok. Ummm... At first you said pineapple on pizza and BBQ sauce, so I figured, yeah we can be pals. Buuuuuttttt then you went and said pineapple on ham or glazed ham is gross. So now I have a conundrum.

 

[Britva415]

In my house it can be either. When asking for cereal, one needs to specify if they want cereal or cereal soup...

What do they get if they don't ask for cereal soup?

Just... dry cereal?

 

[Statius]

Tacos ARE a glorified sandwich, and just to get myself banned, those who keep promoting them as something extra special should have to pay an extra tax.

 

[Britva415]

OK so I don't know what you call it, what the name for it is when this happens. Commercial novel excerpt follows:

The bad weather kept them inside for six days.

Corene didn't mind too much, since she was still exploring the enormous palace. She thought she might stay within its walls for a quintile and never visit all its music rooms, libraries, studies, and dining areas—there was even a greenhouse so humid and warm that she thought it would be her favorite spot on cold Quinnelay afternoons. Now, of course, the weather was hot and naturally humid, but she liked the conservatory anyway.

But everybody else seemed edgy and morose at being cooped up indoors. By everybody Corene meant the small group of people who quickly came to constitute her particular circle: Steff, Melissande, Jiramondi, and Liramelli. Corene was not the kind of person to make friends easily, but she liked this group; she found it enjoyable to pass the time in their company.

What am I pointing out? The bold part: The narrator is not Corene. So, projecting something Corene "means" onto what Corene didn't say ("everybody") is some kind of malwriting. Corene isn't talking to someone, she isn't thinking to herself, she isn't narrating, so, adding in what she means is nonsensical and weirdly choppy.

This happens a lot. Sure, this example of third person narration is the kind we call "close", but, when the conceit of the narration is not that it's the actual character's own thoughts, but then the character seems to be aware of what the narrator is narrating, that's too fucking close.

This kind of thing needs to be fixed. There are a few ways to do it:
* Put it in Corene's head before pulling it back out again: "Corene thought to herself that everybody else seemed edgy and morose." NOW you can say who Corene means by "everybody."
* Restructure those sentences so that it's already clear who "everybody" is before referring to them as "everybody." Do this in narrator voice, not Corene's. This avoids having to say what anyone means by "everybody," which is an awkward way to write this. It's overly conversational for this particular piece—it's inconsistent with the rest of the narrative style.
* Or do it in Corene's voice, so that she can have an intention regarding who "everybody" is. As written, she can't, because she isn't the one who said or thought about "everybody."
* Restructure in a way which just avoids Corene's point of view on the matter entirely. It isn't her who "means" everybody, it's the narrator - or, more precisely, the author, who just didn't figure out how to write it without introducing this clumsy flaw.

 

[ericalauren]

We don't get enough space aliens, clones, dinosaurs, androids, or genetically engineered sex specimens in our erotica!

I’m reading an erotic novel that involves a human and a gargoyle.

 

[dirk2024]

Tacos ARE a glorified sandwich, and just to get myself banned, those who keep promoting them as something extra special should have to pay an extra tax.

*clutches pearls*

 

[Kelliezgirl]

Tacos ARE a glorified sandwich, and just to get myself banned, those who keep promoting them as something extra special should have to pay an extra tax.

My brother refers to tortillas as "edible plates". Don't underestimate how good a tortilla can be though.

 

[Statius]

My brother refers to tortillas as "edible plates". Don't underestimate how good a tortilla can be though.

I love a burrito! Also a sandwich, just waaaaaay better.

 

[Statius]

*clutches pearls*

Bwahahahaha!

 

[Britva415]

Burritos are calzones