Would it technically be a sequel if...

[sirhugs]

In my current WIP, I sent the FMC's eighteen year old son and the secondary FC off to his bedroom while the FMC has an orgy with his frends out by the pool. Plan A is to include a side scene where we visit the two young lovers in the bedroom having sex. but so far haven't figured out the transition.

Somebody suggested that I do write the side sene, but consider using it as a parallel story, a followup to the Mom's story. Also tricky to tie together, but a possibility.

Just got me wondering though whether technically it would be appropriate to describe the parallel story as a sequel?

Now I need to settle that trivia in my brain before I can focus on mapping out the orgy.

Hoping for help from the wise ones here.

 

[TheWritingGroup]

I believe that "technically" a sequel "follows" (that's what the original word meant) the first. Normally we see that as having its events happen after the events of the first story, but a lot of people use it more loosely to mean written or published after the first.

There's a word that leaked into English from Japanese, gaiden ("sidestory") that seems to apply here.

 

[Statius]

Could just call it part 2, don't use the word sequel. First P POV from sons perspective, offer a brief recap in italics explaining to the reader and start the side story at the exact moment he and the FC walk away to his room.

 

[StillStunned]

"Son's Tale: A Mother's Tale Story". That worked for Star Wars.

 

[CalBishForNow]

I don't know if literary criticism has a term for it, but TV Tropes calls it an Interquel.

 

[sirhugs]

Could just call it part 2, don't use the word sequel. First P POV from sons perspective, offer a brief recap in italics explaining to the reader and start the side story at the exact moment he and the FC walk away to his room.

Why the son's POV? i was thinking third person, to be consistent.

 

[Statius]

Why the son's POV? i was thinking third person, to be consistent.

I said 1st because I prefere writing that way myself, and I think it might be interesting to have two stories that are connected, but separate at the same time. And since the 2nd one with the guy and girl will technically be starting at some mid point of the first it gives a clear narrative break. And it will allow you to give the guys first hand account of what's going on with the first story's FMC. It allows you to make the sex the main focal point of the 2nd story but give the reader small, short breaks by referring to the first story with short thoughts, observations- what he hears and how that affects him, maybe.

I like 1st because it's more intimate and allows for a little subtle humor, as we all make jokes in our heads as we see and experience things, and it limits the scope of the narrative forcing you to move the story at a faster pace with fewer long distractions. I also feel it requires less dialogue as the reader already feels like they are reading dialogue. They are not reading, they are listening.

 

[TheLobster]

Just got me wondering though whether technically it would be appropriate to describe the parallel story as a sequel?

I’d call it a spin-off.

 

[sirhugs]

I’d call it a spin-off.

 

[Duil2]

In my current WIP, I sent the FMC's eighteen year old son and the secondary FC off to his bedroom while the FMC has an orgy with his frends out by the pool. Plan A is to include a side scene where we visit the two young lovers in the bedroom having sex. but so far haven't figured out the transition.

Somebody suggested that I do write the side sene, but consider using it as a parallel story, a followup to the Mom's story. Also tricky to tie together, but a possibility.

Just got me wondering though whether technically it would be appropriate to describe the parallel story as a sequel?

Now I need to settle that trivia in my brain before I can focus on mapping out the orgy.

Hoping for help from the wise ones here.

It feels like a "meanwhile, in the bedroom" type of situation. I'd be in favour of not calling it anything other than part2. Then open with lovers able to hear orgy in full swing.

 

[sirhugs]

I’d call it a spin-off.

guess I ought to have mentioned that at the end, Theo and Marisol rejoin the exhausted partyers out on the deck. Uncertain at this point whether that leads to "round two".

 

[Statius]

guess I ought to have mentioned that at the end, Theo and Marisol rejoin the exhausted partyers out on the deck. Uncertain at this point whether that leads to "round two".

Then you have part 3, or the 'official' part 2 after the bedroom spin off, ending the spin off with the two coming down stairs. Cliff hanger opportunity, don't show what they see until part 3

 

[AStrangeDesire]

What about naming something else but put it in the Lit Series so it's easy to find. I like "Interlude", and I guess "spin-off" would make sense if you're going to do multiple stories with those characters.

In which case, maybe it becomes it's own series to help the reader stay 'on story' though. I've seen other writers to do this (WriterAnnabelle did this for he HFHM and Dead & Horny series for instance).

What gets tricky in that case is helping the readers who want to read both chronologically. So some sort of index would be helpful.

Gets complicated fast

 

[Statius]

What about naming something else but put it in the Lit Series so it's easy to find. I like "Interlude", and I guess "spin-off" would make sense if you're going to do multiple stories with those characters.

In which case, maybe it becomes it's own series to help the reader stay 'on story' though. I've seen other writers to do this (WriterAnnabelle did this for he HFHM and Dead & Horny series for instance).

What gets tricky in that case is helping the readers who want to read both chronologically. So some sort of index would be helpful.

Gets complicated fast

Nah, just a little blurb of an authors note at the beginning giving the chronological order. No biggie

 

[AStrangeDesire]

Nah, just a little blurb of an authors note at the beginning giving the chronological order. No biggie

To clarify: My statement was intended if, like the series I mentioned, they interweave at various intervals and timelines. In that case, it's helpful

 

[Carnevil9]

I wouldn't call it a sequel. I'd just call it another chapter. Lots of novels have parallel chapters, following the adventures of different characters that occur at the same time. As in, "meanwhile, back at the ranch....."

 

[BobbyBrandt]

A sequel is chronological. The opposite of a prequel.

What you describe would be an associated story, or as some call it, "a spin-off".

It would not be a "Part 2" because it is a different story with characters from the original appearing in it. However, you could link the two (and possibly more) into a series of associated stories through the titling and/or the series manager feature.

 

[TheExperimentalist]

In my current WIP, I sent the FMC's eighteen year old son and the secondary FC off to his bedroom while the FMC has an orgy with his frends out by the pool. Plan A is to include a side scene where we visit the two young lovers in the bedroom having sex. but so far haven't figured out the transition.

Somebody suggested that I do write the side sene, but consider using it as a parallel story, a followup to the Mom's story. Also tricky to tie together, but a possibility.

Just got me wondering though whether technically it would be appropriate to describe the parallel story as a sequel?

Now I need to settle that trivia in my brain before I can focus on mapping out the orgy.

Hoping for help from the wise ones here.

I have a similar thing with a pair of WIPs I have. In the first, one character writes an erotic story and another character discovers it (been done, I know, but I've never seen it quite the way it happens in my story, and as I've mentioned before, I like reinventing and subverting tropes). The second is the story the character wrote within the story. Are they sequels of each other? Which one comes first? Which one makes sense for people to READ first? I don't the heck know!

 

[MillieDynamite]

Just my two-cents, I would make the story and have it switching between the two locations. The would be lovers watching from the window, first find it funny, then become aroused. With each change of scene, the details below become more explicit, as do those from above. Finally, your switching between full on hedonistic fun fest with many partners, to a more singular couples romantic discovers. Having them both virgins would turn up the heat and give a few nice missteps for them to struggle with.

 

[sirhugs]

Just my two-cents, I would make the story and have it switching between the two locations. The would be lovers watching from the window, first find it funny, then become aroused. With each change of scene, the details below become more explicit, as do those from above. Finally, your switching between full on hedonistic fun fest with many partners, to a more singular couples romantic discovers. Having them both virgins would turn up the heat and give a few nice missteps for them to struggle with.

 

[MillieDynamite]

Like having them know what goes where and why, but how that big ole cock fits into the tiny unfucked whole and not hurting her so bad she doesn't enjoy it, is a mystery to be figured out without too much trial and OPPS, that fucking hurts!

 

[anthrodisiac]

Kinda depends. It's not a sequel, but like has been mentioned, it could be a chapter, so it would make sense to have it in a series. The question is, how important is this scene to the original story. If it plays a decent role, then I like @MillieDynamite's idea of merging them. But if this is really more of an aside, then it could be interruptive of the flow, depending on how it's written, and you'd want to potential avoid that depending on how it's done and what you want the focus of the story to be. In that case, I think having it as chapter 2 would make the most sense.

It's not a spin-off, either, because it's still tied closely to the original story, so I'd classify it more as a side story. Spin-offs tend to separate away (spin-OFF) of the original concept, and may occasional dip back in, but their nature tends to be a completely separate story that becomes distinct from the original.

 

[Voboy]

I've done this exact sort of thing before.

The funnest way to deal with it? The son bags off with Mom's friend. You describe Mom's adventures with son's friends, in whatever detail you were planning (since that's presumably the main point of the story). Then mom, buzzing and leaking, goes into the house for a drink of water.

On her way past Son's bedroom, the door is ajar; Mom glances in. You spend a BRIEF paragraph describing one of the raunchiest, filthiest, most depraved things any two people can do with each other. And Mom gets just the quickest glimpse. Then Mom closes the door, shakes her head in disbelief, and passes on to finish up the "real" story you're telling.

That way you've "told" the reader exactly what happened in that bedroom, while letting them use their imagination to fill in the blanks, and best of all you haven't distracted from the main idea of the story. Best of both worlds. No need for a sequel; you've answered the question and you've told the story without telling the story. I'm generally against setting the readers up for one Huge Sex Scene, only to piggyback another one. It feels contrived to me, and it distracts me as a reader.

A head-hop such as Millie describes would leave me clicking out of the story in disappointment. But obviously I'm not every reader!

 

[RoyalAuthor]

I have a series told from a single male character's point of view. One chapter features a pool party, and when it ends, the story continues to follow that main character.

I wanted to tell the stories of a couple of other characters after that party, so I wrote three separate stories to cover different characters. Two were short, essentially just fun sex scenes and the buildup to them, so I branded them After the Pool Party, with names as subtitles. The third was a full story on its own, and so I dropped that title and just published it as a standalone story, the only indication that it was a spinoff being in an authors note about where I first introduced the characters.

My point is, do what you want, how you want, and don't feel a need to conform to a certain box. Publish it however it works - as a sequel, a spinoff, a short vignette. Doesn't matter. If your readers care to read it, it'll be there for them.