word choice???????

[Arianna Lee]

Ok, I have a question for you.....In my most recent submission entitled, "Shall We?" I got a public comment which made me go back and re-read my story to see if what they were saying was true. And, well.........I think that what the person is not understanding is that I use certain terms to try and be a bit different. I use "HER to refer to PUSSY" and "HIM to refer to COCK" and I guess the reader seemed to think I was referring to someone else. I have several people who read the story before I submitted it and enjoyed it and understood what I was saying. I wish I could explain to this person why I am using those terms. I guess I will try to stick to the usual words used. I just get tired of using the same old thing over and over again. I appreciate the feedback that I get. Just wish that there was a way to reply to something like that to explain. And maybe if they read it again they would see what I was actually referring to. If anyone would like to take a look at it and see if they understand I would appreciate any feedback...........thanks

 

[carsonshepherd]

If I were you I'd just stick to the "same old thing". Cutesy terms are usually more annoying and distracting than anything else. HIM and HER sounds more like personalized bath towels than genitalia.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Did you mean that they were actually in all caps in the text, or were you just doing that for emphasis? If not in all caps, I would say go with it. But then, I'm the horse of many euphamisms.

Shanglan

 

[NoJo]

Black, I'd love to get a look at your him one day.

 

[gauchecritic]

Would you like to kiss her?

Do you want to suck him?

If these people are alone and looking at each other's nakedness then you are perfectly in line and confusion is in that particular reader's mind not in the words you use.

 

[M Crim]

I'll be different. I like using him and her at times. It's an alternative to using pussy and cock. It gets hard (no pun intended) in a sex scene to keep using terms like cock. In my personal opinion using him and her is a little more literary but that might just be me.

 

[NoJo]

I really don't know why you call it lterary. I'd need to see it in context.

A while ago, the male and female pronoun were used euphemistically for genitalia.

There's a line in "Krapp's Last Tape", repeated like a refrain throughout the play:

"She opened her door, and let me in."