Where to go next with my story

[Luv4hotwives]

I’m new to writing erotica and honestly writing altogether. I got into writing just for the fun of it and to write more of the type of stories I’ve enjoyed reading. Being new many of my stories are very similar, but as I wrote more I found my interests expanding a bit. I began to write a story different from my previous attempts. The thing is even as I wrote it I was starting to feel like while there was more story to tell it wasn’t necessarily erotic. It was going to be a one off, but now I really want to write more.

It ended up as an erotic story anyway, but now I’m unsure which direction to go. I’ve considered making a direct sequel to it and I’ve considered revisiting my original story and just developing it further while backing off some of the sexual content a bit.

Basically the story revolves around a married woman who develops an attraction to her sister in law.

If I revisit the story it would end up a good deal longer, as I’d like to develop each part a little more. And I’d play around more with the complex emotions that would result from the events in the story. Also while I’d likely still have a sexual encounter I might convey it in a less descriptive way that leaves more to the imagination.

I’m not entirely sure what I’m asking for here. I guess I want to develop a little more as a writer and am trying to decide if revisiting something I’ve already done is a worthwhile way to grow or if I should just move into something new.

Here is a link to my story, thanks!
https://www.literotica.com/s/my-husband-s-sister-my-girl-crush

 

[KeithD]

If you don't know where you want to take a story, why are you worrying about taking it anywhere further? I question assuming stories have to just keep going and going. It there's more to be written, that should occur to you at some point on your own.

 

[mletrout]

I’ll review your story, kinda, but whatever you do, don’t take it too seriously.

I can see the appeal of a rewrite. Trevor is the cardboard stand-in for the outcast Paul, hopefully I remember the names, and the ambiguous reason for Kaitlyn dumping her husband? Boyfriend? (I can’t remember if their relationship was specified) will presumably become Brooke’s reason for dumping her husband, ie. The relationship was perfect, but something was still missing...hmmmm what could it be? And so we have a sort of story with the conflict being, “I am attracted to my sister-in-law, what should I do about it?” resolved with an impulsive act - and Brooke is very passive here, or reactionary if you went to a public school, and throughout the story, really - “I should have sex with her!” Which is basically a Penthouse Letter of the Month. Do they still have those?

It was nice to give her the get out of jail free card, btw.

Anyway, the real question isn’t whether or not to refurbish, recycle, or reinvent ...it’s what is your story really about? Once you know that, it’s a lot easier to know what to do.

All in all it’s a very rosy tale, full of gay mischief and fun for the whole family. I’d leave it as is personally, and start a new story from scratch. But that’s just me and not necessarily the best or even a good idea. I tend to write a lot of treatments in any event. Either way, I like what you posted, 5 stars. Keep writing and just have fun with it. And give Kaitlyn a sliver of doubt, it’ll make her more interesting to the reader and seem more vulnerable to Brooke. Perfection is the enemy of intrigue as nobody said ever, but I suspect that’s the answer to Kait’s question. Am I right? Just dying to know.

 

[Luv4hotwives]

I’ll review your story, kinda, but whatever you do, don’t take it too seriously.

I can see the appeal of a rewrite. Trevor is the cardboard stand-in for the outcast Paul, hopefully I remember the names, and the ambiguous reason for Kaitlyn dumping her husband? Boyfriend? (I can’t remember if their relationship was specified) will presumably become Brooke’s reason for dumping her husband, ie. The relationship was perfect, but something was still missing...hmmmm what could it be? And so we have a sort of story with the conflict being, “I am attracted to my sister-in-law, what should I do about it?” resolved with an impulsive act - and Brooke is very passive here, or reactionary if you went to a public school, and throughout the story, really - “I should have sex with her!” Which is basically a Penthouse Letter of the Month. Do they still have those?

It was nice to give her the get out of jail free card, btw.

Anyway, the real question isn’t whether or not to refurbish, recycle, or reinvent ...it’s what is your story really about? Once you know that, it’s a lot easier to know what to do.

All in all it’s a very rosy tale, full of gay mischief and fun for the whole family. I’d leave it as is personally, and start a new story from scratch. But that’s just me and not necessarily the best or even a good idea. I tend to write a lot of treatments in any event. Either way, I like what you posted, 5 stars. Keep writing and just have fun with it. And give Kaitlyn a sliver of doubt, it’ll make her more interesting to the reader and seem more vulnerable to Brooke. Perfection is the enemy of intrigue as nobody said ever, but I suspect that’s the answer to Kait’s question. Am I right? Just dying to know.

Thank you for the feedback, you legitimately gave me a few points to consider when writing. You raised some very good questions that I never considered asking myself. And I love that. I didn't realize until I started writing on literotica how great of a resource and community it is for developing writers.

I think I will focus on new efforts. It is fun tackling something new and I can always apply what I learned to that. Honestly thank you for the advice, I appreciate it!