Where does one draw the line for Extreme?

[Svenskaflicka]

I have an idea for a whole series of erotic murder stories, but I don't know if they would be accepted. No, not snuff, I can't stand that crap. More like a scene from a detective novel, but with an erotic twist. No gory details, just hints. Like this:

A couple fuck like rabbits, then one of them reaches for the wine bottle, and the scene ends there, and in the next paragraph, the detectives are standing around the bed, saying that the victim was probably killed by the broken bottle they found in the trash...

Would that be too cruel?

 

[NASCARaddicted]

It doesn't sound cruel to me ....

But the idea is interesting. If it's written good, it could become a good detective novel with some erotic.



They are standing around the bed and identify the victim. It's a rich guy named Harry Miller. The detective has to inform Millers wife about the death of her husband.

When he visits her house, she opens the door - wearing only thin lingerie and it seems as if she is a little bit drunk.

"Mrs. Miller, I need to talk to you, about your husband"

"My husband is a cheating bastard. I know that he has sex with his secretary - but now, I want to get even. I told him, I will have sex with every guy who knocks on my door ... and you are one of them ...."

The detective enters the house, Mrs. Miller drops her lingerie and they have hot sex. Later, when he wants to leave Mrs. Miller asks him, why he knocked on her door ....
"Oh, sorry - the sex with you was so great, so I almost forgot to tell you: your husband was murdered - well, I got to go .... bye"

The detective gets back to the scene of the crime and takes a closer look. Next to the bed, there is a red stocking and a small card saying "X-Tinas dirrty little Whorehouse - here we have whores for every guy ...."
The detective thinks: It seems as if this guy had sex with a whore before he was killed with the bottle."

So now, he has to do some researching in the whorehouse. He wants to talk to some of the whores. They are willing to tell him everything - but he has to pay them per hour, just like every "normal" customer. Well, so he pays the whore for 1 hour. He asks her a few things. However, after she answered all questions there are still 30 minutes left - and since she is a whore, and he already paid her, he fucks her, too .....


How does that sound so far ?

The only 2 problems that might be: It could become very big (o.k. that's no real problem) and I think the crime story also should be good. I mean, don't concentrate on the sex - concentrate on the crime.

I mean: I guess it should be a detective novel with some sex - not a porn story with a detective .....

 

[Svenskaflicka]

I was thinking of concentrating very hard on the crime, from the killer's POV. What leads up to the crime, how the serial killer changes the pattern for each new murder, like Jack Of All Trades in that TV-series.

The detectives would play a rather small part in the series, they would mostly just analyse the murders so that the reader finds out what has happend, and get a small chance to see the pattern of the serial killer - perhaps even to guess who it is..?

 

[Un-registered]

I mean: I guess it should be a detective novel with some sex - not a porn story with a detective .....

Sort of 21st Century Micky Spillane? I hope you don't want high votes. I would like it but the voters won't (as the politicians say).

All the voters want is "Wham Bam, Wham Bam, Wham Bam". Even putting in the "Thank You Ma'am" is a waste of their time. Unless, of course, it's "Thank You Mom".

 

[Chicklet]

Hmm...

I doubt it'd get tossed in Extreme. And if it did, you wouldn't have to write the rest of the series.

As for what Un-reg says about votes, fuck the votes. You'll get the people that love the stuff reading and voting for it, too.

Chicklet

 

[peterpan]

This does not sound like extreme, but I think it needs some sort of warning. I hate to get into an erotic scene and then have the woman killed on me as part of the process. It doesn't matter if it is off-camera.

This is a valid storyline, and would certainly be called an erotic thriller, but it isn't fun sex.

 

[Chicklet]

This does not sound like extreme, but I think it needs some sort of warning.

I like it. A little warning paragraph at the beginning suggesting that those who get too attached to their characters should look away and skip straight to giving the story a "5" = ) giggle

 

[cybin]

Go For It!

the only question i have is whether there would be too much (whatever that means) emphasis on the 'lit' and too little on the erotica. still, it reminds me of the "fatal attraction' genre which can be incredibly hot and edgy.

 

[Svenskaflicka]

Without giving away too much of the content, I'm thinking of making it a little bit scary, rather psychological, and the sex will be very close connected to the murder. Like, a guy who likes S/M will get spanked to death, a woman who likes to have sex in the bathtub will get drowned after she has come, etc. Though, as I said, I will not go into any gory details, that will be left for the reader to suspect.

But they will definitely get fucked to death!

 

[Svenskaflicka]

Today, on the bus, I was making little notes about the characters of these murder stories, when a drunk man sits down in front of me and starts asking me what I'm writing, poems? Articles? Love stories? He was a bit taken back when I coldly answered: "Murder".

But, as he was drunk and didn't realize what he was doing, he kept on asking stupid questions about my writing, jokingly wondering if I was thinking about a murder on any of the people on the bus. I smiled dryly and said: "That depends..." but I managed to keep the last part of the sentence, "...on whether or not you're gonna keep on bugging me", to myself.

NEVER interrupt an author who's working! Grrrrowl...