What form would you call this piece of poetry

[switchbitch]

Never me nevermore
always outside the door
the way is lost
a life is cost
lost all the way to my core.

A shadow busy painting others’ lives
replacing others’ drives
a rat on a wheel
so I don’t have to feel
clawing at bleeding hives

Me, I, heart shattered empty fool
tears streaming forming a caustic pool
working hard so others can’t see
that I no longer wish to be
responsibility my sole remaining rule

the tunnel has no light it just goes on
there is no end in sight I just go on
untouched , untouchable
undesired, undesirable
and yet I continue to go on

by Switchbitch

 

[darkmaas]

I might call it a Truncated Hexaquintalet, but that would probably be wrong. Best ask Angeline or Tzara.

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[Neonurotic]

I might call it a Truncated Hexaquintalet, but that would probably be wrong. Best ask Angeline or Tzara.

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Heeey, I was just going to say the same thing so it can't be wrong. Truncated Hexaquintalet it is, switchbitch!









p.s I agree about asking Angeline or Tzara's opinion.

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[switchbitch]

I might call it a Truncated Hexaquintalet, but that would probably be wrong. Best ask Angeline or Tzara.

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Heeey, I was just going to say the same thing so it can't be wrong. Truncated Hexaquintalet it is, switchbitch!









p.s I agree about asking Angeline or Tzara's opinion.

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thankyou guys

 

[UnderYourSpell]

goodness I hope she didn't believe you !

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

goodness I hope she didn't believe you !

Would you please stay here for more than one post! You're sorely missed.

 

[switchbitch]

goodness I hope she didn't believe you !

LOL I kinda think its a limmerick sans humour

 

[Tzara]

LOL I kinda think its a limmerick sans humour

The stanza form resembles the limerick, though a limerick has thematic requirements your poem does not (in my opinion) meet. The meter is irregular as well.

I wouldn't agonize over it.

You wrote a poem that basically conforms to a form, though not an established one. At least not one I'm aware of.

Doesn't matter, ultimately, unless you were trying to write a particular form, which you obviously weren't.

Welcome, anyway. Talk to us.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Would you please stay here for more than one post! You're sorely missed.

awwwwww bless you sweetie I've been back before but for the most part got ignored so left again