What Did I Do Wrong On This One?

[SexyChele]

Okay, new story posted, and I'm a little confused on this one. I'd appreciate anyone who wants to take a look and see where I've possibly goofed.

The story is A Night Out With The Guys and is based on the real life experience of a reader who wanted me to write this. It's in the Loving Wives category. So far, what feedback I've been getting has all been extremely positive, with the exception of one person. However the votes are extremely low. Normally, I don't look at votes, but comparing the two, it just doesn't make sense to me.

The one highly (and I do mean HIGHLY) negative feedback was from a man who told me that "almost all men" prefer to read stories in this category from a male point of view, rather than a female. Also, there is an expectation that the wife is insatiable and need lots and lots of strange cock to satisfy her, and her husband shouldn't be around. Okay, that's a paraphrase, but it's accurate.

Knowing me, I know I've made possibly many grammatical and spelling errors - always happens no matter how hard I try! If you wish to point those out, feel free. I'm really interested in if I've misrepresented this story in some way. Perhaps it is in the wrong category? Just not certain.

Any opinions are appreciated!

 

[openthighs_sarah]

I read the story and sent you feedback... I hope it helps, but I don't really know why people haven't voted it higher, either.

The disclaimer at the beginning (which I mentioned in my feedback) is the only thing that came to mind...



~sarah

 

[sirhugs]

I disagree with your critic. I enjoy LW stories with hubby involved, more than the " slut takes on the whole pub" variety. I also thought you had lots of sex content.

It easily could nave gone ionto group sex or exhibitionist , but it seems fine as am LW to me.

I found the story a bit remote, and therefore, less arousing than I , as a " Loving Wives" fan, often might. I don't attribute that to the POV so much as you trying to distill someone else's true life experiences. Maybe the dreamlike tone also set me back. I got no sense of how the wife felt about it, would be essential to really getting involved.

I also thought the set up and other areas were a bit wordy.

If Lit gave a choice of a " 4.5", that would be my vote.

 

[SexyChele]

I read the story and sent you feedback... I hope it helps, but I don't really know why people haven't voted it higher, either.

The disclaimer at the beginning (which I mentioned in my feedback) is the only thing that came to mind...



~sarah

Thank you Sarah. I did indeed get your feedback notification and will be responding shortly. Thank you for your hard work with that!

I disagree with your critic. I enjoy LW stories with hubby involved, more than the " slut takes on the whole pub" variety. I also thought you had lots of sex content.

It easily could nave gone ionto group sex or exhibitionist , but it seems fine as am LW to me.

I found the story a bit remote, and therefore, less arousing than I , as a " Loving Wives" fan, often might. I don't attribute that to the POV so much as you trying to distill someone else's true life experiences. Maybe the dreamlike tone also set me back. I got no sense of how the wife felt about it, would be essential to really getting involved.

I also thought the set up and other areas were a bit wordy.

If Lit gave a choice of a " 4.5", that would be my vote.

Thank you! All of the men I've talked to have stated they preferred the female point of view, but I wasn't certain if there was some sort of expectation in this particular category. And, as for the group comment, my "negative guy" did mention that it is implied that a group will actually fuck. (I'm still a bit confused as to where he got the group connection, as it is not mentioned in the tagline and I didn't think I presented it as a "groupie thing". Perhaps in the title with the word "Guys"?)

You are correct in that I didn't feel truly connected to the story. I was given the briefest of information to work with and tried to forumulate the story from that. And, I was talking to the woman's husband and now realize I should have asked to have her contact me. But, it was supposed to be a surprise, so.....

Thank you for your honest assessment! I really do appreciate it!