alohadave
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I like how the time travel isn't questioned, but the sexual mores of 1962 Tennessee is the breaking point.This one put a smile on my face. This story is about a wicked little resort in the Tennessee hills that existed from the 1920s to the 1980s and somehow my protagonist ends up there in 1962. It makes me laugh that someone reading erotic fantasy is looking for plausibility. His notes on my ending are valid, I could have put more effort into it, but I was really looking forward to finishing the story.
by xxxxxxxx on 03/12/2023
You could see the deus ex machina coming a mile away. And I'm sorry to say it wasn't handled all that well. The wrap-up (e.g., medical tests finding nothing after someone goes missing for two weeks) left something to be desired.
But the biggest problem was the time/,place setting. I could see, with a modest strain on credibility, a place like this in southern California during the relatively freewheeling Caryer years--maybe. But remote Tennessee in 1962? Zero chance. That whole atmosphere re: sex in the US at the time was far too repressed in general. Furthermore, Tennessee is the buckle of the Bible Belt, so that no matter how discreet the operation was, it would never have flown. No way you could keep a place like this quiet, either: the locals who do things like trades work will see things and talk. Next thing you know, the sheriff and his boys arrive and close it down.
"A" for effort but not very plausible at all.