Ways to say things for a story (specific to a current story)

[ctarrantella]

I'm looking for some help.

I'm trying to write a story. I'm having writers block.

I want to describe how my wife goes down on me. She always pays attention to my balls and sack. She will lick them. God it feels amazing when she does that. However, for the story purposes, I keep writing it like that and I just don't like it.

How can I say that or describe that so it sounds hot and sexy and not like a frat boy saying she is licking my balls and sack all over? Any advice?

 

[StillStunned]

Describe her hot breath on your skin. The softness of her lips, the moist warmth of her tongue. How she looks up at you and gives a low laugh of pure happiness - happiness at being where she is, happiness at your reaction. How she kisses every inch of your shaft, how she explores every bit of you as if it were the first time. How her hand feels cool and tiny on your shaft. How she responds to every twitch of your body, every gasp for breath. How she seems to be focusing her love for you entirely on that specific part of your body, and your response is an affirmation of your body's love for her.

Or words to that effect.

 

[StillStunned]

I'll be in my bunk.

 

[AlinaX]

"Do you like when I lick your balls?" she said, her lips a hair's breadth from that sweetly sensitive skin. Her breath tickled my pubes as she spoke making me tingle all over.

"I love it," I said, resisting the urge to press myself against her mouth.

"It's just," she murmured, "I always do it like this, and I'm worried it's getting a bit repetitive. I mean, if you had to describe what I do to other people, they'd probably die of boredom. 'Balls? Again?' they'd whine. 'Doesn't she have a nice, tight throat - or whatever?' So I thought I'd check with you, you know, in case there was some other way I could do it."

"Just lick my damn balls!"

 

[Wriggle]

I like to use all five senses, not just the feelings. Describe the smell of her hair, the taste of the beads of sweat on your lips, the excitement her moans and slurps arouse within, etc.

It is also good to describe an action you perform that would make the reader mimic it whilst reading. Eg. "Iit felt great. I gently bit the knuckle of my index finger "

 

[alohadave]

"...she gobbled my knob like it was the first time she'd ever played the skin flute."

That makes me hot.

 

[StillStunned]

"Do you like when I lick your balls?" she said, her lips a hair's breadth from that sweetly sensitive skin. Her breath tickled my pubes as she spoke making me tingle all over.

"I love it," I said, resisting the urge to press myself against her mouth.

"It's just," she murmured, "I always do it like this, and I'm worried it's getting a bit repetitive. I mean, if you had to describe what I do to other people, they'd probably die of boredom. 'Balls? Again?' they'd whine. 'Doesn't she have a nice, tight throat - or whatever?' So I thought I'd check with you, you know, in case there was some other way I could do it."

"Just lick my damn balls!"

Reminds me of a bit by Chris Rock. "Woman always say, "What do you want?" Men only want four things: "Play with my dick, suck my balls, make me a sandwich and shut the fuck up."

 

[AchtungNight]

Reminds me of a bit by Chris Rock. "Woman always say, "What do you want?" Men only want four things: "Play with my dick, suck my balls, make me a sandwich and shut the fuck up."

You forgot “set me up with your friend”, Chris.

To answer the OP with improvisation-

She checked his length. Good size and heft, but potential for more. So she looked him in the eye suggestively while holding his shaft. He nodded and lay down on the bed, organ at attention. She unfastened and pushed down his pants, disengaged briefly to remove her torso garments, then walked back to the bed rubbing her nipples and licking her lips. She bent down over him, took hold of his orbs, and rubbed them with vigor. Her mouth meanwhile enveloped his saber, sucking it down as deep as she could. She moved up and down on him with focus and determination. He grew firmer under her guidance. The taste was familiar but very welcome. She felt herself enticed to greater drive by the gasps of his cries and the smell of his sweat. She accepted the caressing of his hands on her hair, shoulders and tits as he raised his body and moved to rub her in accompaniment. He was kneeling and she leaned into him. One hand continued manipulating his balls, the other held him in place and stroked his rear. All the time her mouth kept sucking. Before he knew it, he was exploding and she was swallowing down his fluid with a frustrated smile. “Sorry,” he said. “Too fast.” She smacked her lips and said, “It’s ok, lover. I don’t mind repeating myself.”

 

[Euphony]

she is licking my balls and sack all over?

Our shared reality (author and readers) is that's exactly what she is doing tho.

"What" question answered, "why" does it matter? "It feels so good" is understood by even non-ball havers and is overly tread ground here.

Why is this special? Are there dynamics at play we can't assume (if it's a special occasion thing/rare or does she bring an enthusiasm to the coupling that makes you *feel* something beyond tongue to sensitive flesh? (again, move away from understood/known stuff)

We've been creating/writing naughties since cavemen on walls, likely no new way of telling physical events exists.

Where coupling scenes succeed or fail (if writing beyond those looking to see naughty written in print) is the C O U P L E.

Something interesting has to be occurring between the two (dynamics, intimacies, negotiations, etc.) for a coupling between the two to be interesting.

Some, even at mature ages, have an incomplete understanding of physicality's role and its proportion to the overall enjoyment of sex.

Think beyond nerve endings (and especially genitals) to the whole of the experience.

When you put that many more combinations of the human experience into play, it is infinitely more unlikely your scenes read like somebody else's.

 

[ctarrantella]

Thank you everyone. This should definitely help.