WANTED - Comments and (Gentle) Critisim for First Story

[kinkycapitalcpl]

EDITOR WANTED - Comments and (Gentle) Critisim for First Story

Hello,

I've read quite a few stories on here, so thank you to all contributors, however this is my first real attempt at an erotic short story.

I'm looking for an editor to provide some feedback before I decide to share with the world and perhaps my wife.

Content is foursome full swap if that encourages or dissuades anyone.

Thanks in advance to all that consider this virgin opportunity.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

Hello,

I've read quite a few stories on here, so thank you to all contributors, however this is my first real attempt at an erotic short story.

Looking for some feedback before I decide to share with the world and perhaps my wife.

Content is foursome full swap if that encourages or dissuades anyone.

Thanks in advance to all that consider this virgin opportunity.

A link would be helpful. Go to the story and copy the URL, posting it here. Just a suggestion, would likely garner more input.

 

[kinkycapitalcpl]

Sorry ... I guess I forgot to mention that I was looking for an editor for the unpublished story.