Virgin writer looking for editor - reluctance short story

[BritishBoudica]

Hi - so I wrote my first ever short story which was rejected due the punctuation around dialogue. I think I have fixed that but would be really grateful if anyone could cast an eye over it. It's a non reluctance theme, but may be a bit vanilla for some fans of the genre. I considered ramping it up, but to be honest stuck with the scenario that I would have enjoyed reading. Also, am conscious there may be some British expressions that may not translate...

Thanks!

 

[sr71plt]

Number of words?

 

[CharlieB4]

Hi - so I wrote my first ever short story which was rejected due the punctuation around dialogue. I think I have fixed that but would be really grateful if anyone could cast an eye over it. It's a non reluctance theme, but may be a bit vanilla for some fans of the genre. I considered ramping it up, but to be honest stuck with the scenario that I would have enjoyed reading. Also, am conscious there may be some British expressions that may not translate...

Thanks!

I might be able to help.
If you turn your Private messages on in your profile I'll send you a message with my email.

Cheers

CharlieB4

 

[BritishBoudica]

Thanks both, 4305 words, I've turned the PM on