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I'll post 2 poems of mine, both love poems, but one is about wanting and not having, and the other is about finding something you didn't expect

 

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poem 1, My Captain's Ring

Oh Captain
my Capt- No, let's start again

My lord, my god, my Captain, My friend
Only one feels a lie, the one at the end

So many titles, marking distance between
Who you are now, and what we had been

You are still my Captain, as you were then
And all that we are is scrawled on my skin

My Captain, my leader, my ruler, in the days ahead
Are you still mine, if he shares your bed?

You said that it's different, I'm under your rule
That he is your equal, and I am your tool.


All the deeds that you've done, with your Own Bloody Hands
I've followed your orders, your asks, your demands

Honored your wishes, as you command
Followed your footsteps wherever they land

We are one soul, one body, one heart
Someday he'll wear your ring, but I wear your art

You touch my face, where it bears your mark.
last night, you whispered, alone in the dark

he may be your love, sealed by some fate
But if my heart will allow, could I be your mate?

Can I serve two Captains? It doesn't feel right
Not just on deck... But in our bed at night?

Could I share my heart, my body, my head
spare him a place, in my soul, and my bed?

I pull you close and into a kiss
I whisper "No", and shatter your bliss.

"I can share my bed, my body, even my heart, I'll allow.
But you alone are my Captain, and that is my vow."

No, I won't call him Captain. But, for you I'll pretend.
He'll never be my Captain, but I'll call him my Friend."

 

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Poem 2 Wanting (a poem in two parts)

Wanting(Students part)
Fantasies, miles long.
Aching gaps, needing filled
Impossible, true
But then why do I want to cry,
Desire, clenching, hating myself
I want, I need, I may not have
I will try, I will succeed
No need to fear, discretion,
Is the greatest part of valor
need I go on, pointless words
Someday, all I need to say
No more tears, just skin
yours and mine, just give me time.

Wanting. (Teachers part)
You I cannot have
You I should not want
I will not, I shall not,
I just wish. Never desire
Never want, my soul burns
my skin creeps, yet I can't
not want, never not desire
But I will not react, I will
not be swayed, I see, I want.
I wont. Not you, not now
Despite desire it isn't lack of
but amount of, so go and don't
look again, your eyes hurt me
So be gone and don't look again.