Then they had sex

[Rainbow Skin]

I'm stuck with my story. I've got the setting and characterization written nicely, but I don't know what comes next.

This is not a request for help with what comes next. I'll decide something and write it.

What happens next is one of (a) she drops the towel, (b) he unwraps her towel, (c) she kindly sends him away while she dresses, or (d) he sees the time and has to go away. If I choose (a) or (b) I'm then committed to spending a few paragraphs expanding the basic idea of 'He sucks her tits and sticks his tadger in her and they bounce up and down making unsavoury noises', only more elegantly than that, cos I'm dead posh, me.

Thing is, I'm sick of every single story being obliged to detail all this stuff. Couldn't we have a kind of short code, and just write 'And then they had sex (A25C441A3H102) then made a cup of tea', where A = clitoris, 2 = broad sweeping strokes of tongue, C = vagina, C4 = one finger in, etc.? Save having to find new ways of writing this goddamn boring sex every time.

 

[peachykeen]

LOL no one is forcing you to write erotic stories, luv. If you don't want to do it, you don't have to do it.

If you can't get into enjoying spelling out the hot little details, may I suggest you may be a bit burned out on this genre, and need to take a little break? You seem to be approaching this as some sort of obligation, rather than a pleasure.

 

[sirhugs]

peachy is right , but if you need to write, or want to, the thing to do is create a scenario that requires you to write totally different sex than you did before.

Like force yourself to do a paragraph just of oral sex. then have some plot...
then do a doggy bit...
or change the # of partners
you get the idea


just writing vanilla sex would get pretty boring.

specific to your story, delaying is fine, but then why mention the shower? Its like in mysteries...mention a gun, it needs to go off.
I would try having him offer to dry her back, or her ask him to, then detailed description of him rubbingher..... if you do sex at all at that stage, have it rear entry
but I'd have him finger her to orgasm, then they continue on wwith date

 

[Quasimodem]

I’m with you Rainbow Skin, when you get to that point, you either become very literal, resulting into the “place tab A3 into slot F7, while supporting brace N3c” school of story writing.

Either that. Or else become metaphorically enriched, to the point of self loathing. “Arthur’s carrot grew in the moist earth of Beatrice’s fertile desire, while the shadowy bunny of jealousy nibbled at his greens.”

AAURRGHHH!!!!

 

[Quasimodem]

Self-quoting comment deleted, see post above.

Huh! Not just boring, but self-replicating?

 

[Chicklet]

re: details

I don't think details would be necessary right there. If you're not in a sex scene, forget about it. They're already on their way out, about to get dressed.

He walked over to me, his hands touching the towel wrapped so protectively around me. Smiling down playfully he pulled it off, letting it fall to the floor.

"Let's get you dressed so we can go," he grinned.

Of course I have no idea what context YOUR story has, I think that you can do your thing in less than three paragraphs and still keep it flowing. Maybe he won't do anything and your female character will be frustrated, her heartbeat quickening as his hands come near, and then grow cold when the hands move so quickly away. You can always get around it with dialogue, too.

"Get your ass out of that towel and into some clothes. My mom won't wait for us forever."

"It wasn't my fault that you got stuck in traffic! I didn't know that I had time to shower in the first place!"

He smiled over at me, his eyes twinkling in delight. "Well you can just go like that if you want."

I scowled and threw the towel aside. Before it had landed I received a pair of panties right in the face, and heard him chuckle as I put them quickly on.

"Come on! Hurry up!"

Before the panties were all the way up a bra hit me square in the chest. He was sending my underwear to me slingshot style!

Good luck and I know you can do it.

Erotic stories don't have to be erotic ALL OF THE TIME.

 

[Rainbow Skin]

LOL, Quasimodem. That's exactly it. In my last I found myself writing really weird things. Like:

Her breasts are shallow volcanoes, her perfect skin is of the softest pink, her belly two jutting prominences rising from a dune.

...followed by 'her wells', 'her inner vale', and 'Already they have eaten and drunk of each other countless times, flowed together, swum as one.'

sirhugs: I'm afraid I'm a very big believer in mentioning things and not having the mention be the usual cliched foreshadowing. I don't like 'telegraphing my punches': things unfold as they unfold. Sexual tension means you don't know what's going to happen. Some of my stories end without any massive graphic sex. I don't think that makes them any less erotic.

Thing is, it's not the contrast of vanilla vs unusual sex that's the problem. It's not that 'penis enters vagina' is boring but 'penis goes up botty' is a refreshing variation. Outside Literotica, perhaps. But here, a 'twist' of anal or incest isn't any more striking or unusual than plain ol' bonking. It's still: Oh, yawn, I suppose I should make them have anal sex or something.

Chicklet: Thank you, thank you! Yes, I could do any of those. I do do it. Often I'm in danger of not having any fucking at all in the story, because I find tugging gently on the towel and not knowing whether she'll relent just as erotic as actually exposing her body and doing things with it.

 

[Omni]

That is what started my writing erotica in the first place. All the sex I read was A,B,C,D,E and the big F. Always starts at the lips kissing, always go to the breasts next or chest and onward one, two, three. It took me a while to realize that I was skiming the sexual parts.
So, my major rule is to make sex a story within a story with all the quirks of a plot. It might be longer at times to read through but I enjoy reading it better. My first ten stories I never started with kissing, in one they never kissed, but said the L word by the end.
I spend time thinking of ways to make the sexual plots not the same old ruts. Even through stories have a type of rut line usually starting out kissing, fingering, oral. Then next one oral him or her. Then next probably getting to intercouse, ect. I switch that up also as much as I can.
Quirks within sex can be a lot fun, with that sex sub story in story thing, and whenever I come to a part like you have discribed, Rainbow, where the next part is always four obvious choices. I do something unexpected.
Hopefully makes it more fun to do.

Omni

 

[Guest]

an aside

I would love to see a collection of all those discarded bits as given by Quasi and Rainbow above. I'm going to start saving my worst metaphors and similes now; will give me a laugh (or a heave) some day. Could even make a fun thread, call it the Re-cycled Erotical Triteness Container, or some such.

Perdita

 

[sirhugs]

Re: an aside

I would love to see a collection of all those discarded bits as given by Quasi and Rainbow above. I'm going to start saving my worst metaphors and similes now; will give me a laugh (or a heave) some day. Could even make a fun thread, call it the Re-cycled Erotical Triteness Container, or some such.

Perdita

one woman's junk is a whole forum full of Story Ideas

 

[Rainbow Skin]

You don't like 'Her breasts are shallow volcanoes'?

:embarrassed: Actually those bits I quoted are what I left in.

 

[Chicklet]

<patting rainbow on the head...>

seriously though, tugging the towel IS as erotic as the hot sweaty sex. I like teasing more myself, personally, and i get tons of feedback commenting on how great my stories are, even when they hardly have any sex at all! so, do what you would like, dont' worry about the S.E.X. and let us have a link when you're done.

 

[Quasimodem]

Alternately, I get practically no feedback for doing that very same thing.

Of course, I can't display an Avatar like Chicklet.

Well, actually, I could, but it would gag a maggot! I mean a hard shelled, streetwise, self-involved, forever cool, show-no-reaction, inner-city maggot.

 

[Guest]

Of course, I can't display an Avatar like Chicklet.

Well, actually, I could, but it would gag a maggot! I mean a hard shelled, streetwise, self-involved, forever cool, show-no-reaction, inner-city maggot.

C'mon, Q, let the gurrls be the judges of that. Pleeeeeezzzze.

P

 

[Guest]

Omigod!

I just noticed I have over 1K posts. Someone tell me how to add a tag line. P


edit: figured it out.

 

[TheEarl]

I was right there with you about 4 or 5 months ago. You have the story, you have the characters and yet you can't get the bastards to have sex, or if you can then you realise you've just written exactly the same sex scene as in your previous story.

It's a bastard problem, but relax, it is just a phase. It's an intricate form of writer's block and it will pass. All this stuff about exercises did nothing for me, but you're welcome to try. I actually broke my block by attaching a pair of handcuffs to one of the characters and just letting the other one have her way with her.

The best way to look at it is that sex is monotonous. Not in real life of course, but when writing you're always going to end up with Tab A into Slot B, even if you do add kinks like handcuffs or aphrodisiacs. The trick is to make different characters and different situations. The sex will usually stay the same, but the story itself is what will make it special.

Hope that helps.

The Earl

 

[Quasimodem]

Perdita,

Since that hasn’t been ‘revealed’ to me, I can’t say for certain, but I would hazard a guess that you will find it in your Control Panel, under ‘Edit Profile’, or failing that, under ‘Edit Options.’

 

[KillerMuffin]

Why do they have to have sex? Have her drop the towel, have him tease her for a few minutes until she's all moist, dewey, and romance-novel virginity-popping horny, then have him look at the time, adjust his trousers, and leave with the promise of an encore.

They can fuck later and you just titillated your audience while relieved of the most boring of things to write about: graphic sex.

I've written myself into a crappy problem It's chapter four and Joe doesn't really like Aimee anymore.

 

[sirhugs]

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I've written myself into a crappy problem It's chapter four and Joe doesn't really like Aimee anymore.

sounds like real life....so as long as you have more chapters ahead, they cheat or break up; or cheat and break up; or cheat, break up and reunite happily ever after; or break up, reunite....

 

[Quasimodem]

KM.

You can always pan to the moon shing in the window, and cut.

Or, you can have the Dutch Girl in the Humidity Display circle around to the Dutch Boy's door and enter it.

At least, that's what worked for Lubitsch!

 

[Guest]

stale sex

Rainbow Skin-

I think that writing sex scenes is similar to sex itself. It is too easy to let it become just another thing to do that you always do the same way.

If they are having sex just to have sex, it isn't interesting for them and it isn't interesting for the reader. (Or not as interesting.)

I would skip the sex scene and move on into the story. When you are in the "mood" go back to the sex scene and make it hot for you. If you can't, then I am with Peachy and say it is time for you to write in another genre.

The other side of it is this, sometimes just starting the writing will get you hot. Just like sex in real life. I don't have to be "in the mood" when my hubby is, but getting cosy and affectionate can get me there. If I let my mood dictate whether we "start anything" I would miss a lot of great sex.

b

 

[sirhugs]

Re: stale sex

Rainbow Skin-

I think that writing sex scenes is similar to sex itself. Just like sex in real life.
. . .



I don't have to be "in the mood" when my hubby is, but getting cosy and affectionate can get me there. If I let my mood dictate whether we "start anything" I would miss a lot of great sex.

b

film at 11?

 

[cahab]

LOL no one is forcing you to write erotic stories, luv. If you don't want to do it, you don't have to do it.

If you can't get into enjoying spelling out the hot little details, may I suggest you may be a bit burned out on this genre, and need to take a little break? You seem to be approaching this as some sort of obligation, rather than a pleasure.

Er, yes.

Bit of a limp response I know, but I agree.

I came to this place because I felt like that about the genre I was in, and wanted to give myself a break. Sounds like you need to do the same. Try writing a romance, or an SF, or a horror, or a comedy. In 'real' writing missing out the sex is the standard thing to do.

If you get re-inspired later you can always fill in the sex from your own fiction.

 

[bipolarbitch]

I'm stuck with my story. I've got the setting and characterization written nicely, but I don't know what comes next.

This is not a request for help with what comes next. I'll decide something and write it.

What happens next is one of (a) she drops the towel, (b) he unwraps her towel, (c) she kindly sends him away while she dresses, or (d) he sees the time and has to go away. If I choose (a) or (b) I'm then committed to spending a few paragraphs expanding the basic idea of 'He sucks her tits and sticks his tadger in her and they bounce up and down making unsavoury noises', only more elegantly than that, cos I'm dead posh, me.

Thing is, I'm sick of every single story being obliged to detail all this stuff. Couldn't we have a kind of short code, and just write 'And then they had sex (A25C441A3H102) then made a cup of tea', where A = clitoris, 2 = broad sweeping strokes of tongue, C = vagina, C4 = one finger in, etc.? Save having to find new ways of writing this goddamn boring sex every time.

You should read some romance novels. You'd learn how to build tension. This is a good opportunity to do just that in your story.

A good way to do that might be, for instance, to have her taunting him, knowing that he can't do it (because he's married, religious, whatever.) They could have a banter where he says you're teasing me and she says no, I'm not, and why are you still here if that's what you think, casually going about her business.

Or he could tease her. She disrobes and tries to come on to him. He acts as if he's totally uninterested until she starts throwing stuff at him.

Or she disrobes, and he sees a tattoo, just barely covered by her pubic hair, something ominous, a symbol that he's sure that he's seen before, perhaps something demonic, or perhaps part of a name, but he's not sure if it's a man's name or a woman's name. How mysterious. He must investigate this!

Or she goes into the bathroom and disrobes, but he can watch through a mirror. He knows he shouldn't look, but he can't help himself. Does she really know that he's watching? She catches his eyes in the mirror and looks outraged, but is it real outrage? He rushes in and kisses her and they fight and almost start to fuck on the bathroom floor. Until there's a knock at the door... The porter. They must go out to dinner. She's angry at him. He's sure that he went to far; she'll never forgive him! Or will she?

So, you don't have to have them fuck. Save that for the climax of the story.

ennui