"The Wolf's Howl" my new story

[andros14]

Hi. I wrote a new story, called The Wolf's Howl, it's a story about people who can chage into animals and meet their soul mates.
Check it out!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=110147

 

[damppanties]

Hi andros14,

Great idea for a story and great imagination too. I think you could have done better to form it into a rivetting story though. The background information at the start of the story was too long and then you tell us 'But enough about that.' That marks such an abrupt change from background to action in the story. You could try something a lot more subtle.

You know what, while I was reading your story, I thought the main character is male.. even when you talk about Brandon - it's more like "okay, this is a gay story". The first time I realised that the black panther's a female is when you say something about her pussy starting to drip. There's something about black panthers which makes one think- Male. Perhaps you should give an indication early on that she's female.

There are some places where there are a few things I'd like to change... like bj for blowjob, etc.

Once again, a very good story idea and I'd love to see the series continued.

Keep writing.