The Scolding

TMV

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I figure to start a thread that has all the principles of the majority of comments on this forum. So submit, you might make a dent in poetic symmetry.

I gave and I received as was the mask, that the bane wore.
Loath and grimace at the slight pause, announced.
It rose ungainly, sore to the fury and viscus roar.
The eye's, foul slit. Acid shotgun upon me flounced.
Could I have been aggressively passionate?
Was I remotely, mindlessly dissonant.
Maybe again, I was vunerable and fair.
And so then it would suffer, that you dare.

The Mystery Valiant
8-18-2007​

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Your Scolding.....

How........, self-important. Still letting other things drive you drunkenly?
 
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The Skalding

I gained and I deceived and wore I mask
To cloak my grimaces from lesser skalds
Whose envy led them bitterly to scold
True masters working bravely at their task,
To whit, to write verse worthy of their craft.
Unbrained, their passion coiled, bereft and old,
And signifying nothing, I am told--
Mere dullard's blade, dulled axe without a haft.
To this dim world is sent a knight, the bane
Of metonymic poets, one whose ear
Can vanquish Truth as like a leveret
Is sliced by blood-stained blade. Truth broods in vain
On his plain rood, strung hanging up like steer
To mete out Justice, muse's martinet.
 
MTVM said:
The Skalding

I gained and I decevied and woare I mask!!
To cloak my grimace's from lesser skald's
Who'se envy lead them biterly to scold
True master's..., working brevely at their task!?!
To whit, to write veprse worthy of their croaft.
Unbrained, their passon coiled, bereft and old,
And sphignifyng nothing, I am told ...--...
Mere dullards blade, dolled ax without a haft.
To this dimm world is sent a knight, the bane
Of metonymic poet's, one who'se ear
Can vanquish Truth as like a leveret!
Is sliced by blood-stained blade., Truth breweds in vain
On his plane rude, strung hangbing up..., like steer
To mete out Justice, muse's martinet!!!

I hope you don't mind too much;
I have corrected your spelling and punctuation. Other than that, it" 's perfect.

bijou
saucy cabin boy,
Rhyme and Meter Crew
 
I just need a spanking, pure and simple.

Neo, if I scold you, will you spank me?

ya know, good ol reciprocity?
 
neonurotic said:
I could go for a good scolding.




C'mere.




Now listen here, young man...

I've had just about enough of you lately. First of all, you're chivalrous in the extreme. You are clearly very attractive and a very talented poet. You're unassuming, mild, sexy, and yet you carry a fierce, quiet core of wildness and anger that makes you irresistible.

Do you have any idea how many women are agonized about the fact that you are mythically unavailable and beyond the reach of even our imaginations? Do you have any idea what a disappointment you are that you're not willing to just take your hot flesh on the road and spread joy to the women of Lit all over America? You ought to be ashamed of yourself. I myself was told in no uncertain terms by a number of people to just get in line.

And your writing. Jesus. There's just no excuse. A solid, honest poetic voice with a delicacy that makes it very clear you're good in bed. Your stories are complex, well-characterized and completely over-the-top hot. I could go on, but I'm a bit distracted at the moment.

Stop it this instant, young man, or I will send you straight to my - er, - your room.

It's for your own good. Now I want you to go and think about what you've done.

bijou
 
damn, bijou. that is excellent. I hope mr neo has learned his lesson. I would hate for you to have to go to that much trouble again. :heart:

;)

oooo, lookie! I have 111 posts, what a pretty prime number!!! I feel so tickled I think I will stop now
 
ghost_girl said:
damn, bijou. that is excellent. I hope mr neo has learned his lesson. I would hate for you to have to go to that much trouble again. :heart:

;)

oooo, lookie! I have 111 posts, what a pretty prime number!!! I feel so tickled I think I will stop now

It was no trouble. My pleasure, in fact. I've been wanting to give that man a piece of my mind for a while now. Or something.

If only there had been spanking involved. sigh.
 
Ahem.
Where's mine?

The big thumpy flogger, please. No, that really thick one there.
And I'd prefer to be tied up first. Standing.

mm. thanks.
 
unpredictablebijou said:
Ahem.
Where's mine?

The big thumpy flogger, please. No, that really thick one there.
And I'd prefer to be tied up first. Standing.

mm. thanks.


disembodied voice come from a dark corner:



I'd make her move her legs apart a little more.
 
unpredictablebijou said:
* giggling madly *
what are you, the BDSM peanut gallery?


<in an echo-y reverbe voice>
I am the great and powerful Voy-Oz and I have spoken. Stop giggling at me!
 
Sara Crewe said:
<in an echo-y reverbe voice>
I am the great and powerful Voy-Oz and I have spoken. Stop giggling at me!


Can't help it.

Besides, my Zard-Oz out-weirds your Voy-Oz.

I'll let you watch if you let me watch next.

Think we've made any dents in poetic symmetry yet? And did we want to?
 
unpredictablebijou said:
Can't help it.

Besides, my Zard-Oz out-weirds your Voy-Oz.

I'll let you watch if you let me watch next.

Think we've made any dents in poetic symmetry yet? And did we want to?
Oh my. We are bringing into this bad John Boorman movies, is we? Sean Connery in a posing pouch? I hope not.

Although I am always up for Charlotte Rampling




Yes, yes, I know. Wrong movie, wrong kink. So fucking sue me.
 
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