The First Line (writers thread!)

[Guest]

I want to be your drug.

 

[patricia51]

Louise sank deeper into the warm bath water.

 

[Honey123]

Incomplete First Story:

“Does this feel good? Just relax, let yourself go.”

~~~

Incomplete Second Story:


"My heart pounding, I ring your doorbell."

 

[lucky-E-leven]

1. As I sit here, writing this letter by the light of a single candle, you sleep.

2. The October breeze nipped at her face and hands, bringing with it the scent of burning wood as the first fires of the fall were lit throughout the neighborhood.

3. The constant swiping of the windshield wipers was putting Jackie to sleep as the traffic crept forward at a snail’s pace.

4. Escape was the only thing driving Jolene to increase her pace as she raced down the rocky hillside.

5. Neve walked up to the door to deliver her package, rang the doorbell and waited expectantly.



This is so sad. I have so many stories & books started that I really want to finish. Maybe after this semester... *roll on Summer*

~lucky

 

[Penelope Street]

Q: What's the first line of your latest masterpiece o'filth?

A: "Damon?"

Bet you're glad you asked, huh?

 

[BlackShanglan]

The two most active:

1) "I was not made as others."

2) "Broken with burning in the Boar’s last winter,
Aelfric of the Aethelings met that axe-blade, Death."

You know ... that's so damned me. Can't just write porn without researching the migrations of the Geats circa A.D. 800.

Joe, yours sounds wonderful.

Shanglan

(P.S. - It seems that this program can't handle caesuras. How do the rest of you deal with this pressing problem?)

 

[minsue]

(P.S. - It seems that this program can't handle caesuras. How do the rest of you deal with this pressing problem?)

Damn, that's a sexy question. I need serious professional help.

As for your question, if I'm understanding it:

        I usually hunt down one of Liar's posts and quote it coz I can never remember....

 

[carsonshepherd]

(P.S. - It seems that this program can't handle caesuras. How do the rest of you deal with this pressing problem?)

The answer to this question is so lengthy, this program will not accept it. Please refer to my master's thesis for a complete explanation.

 

[English Lady]

This is to tease a certain horsey


"It was a lovely day for a ride, well least Master thought so. "

 

[brightlyiburn]

"The onset of February had done nothing to ease the bitter cold of winter."

How utterly not tantalizing. Why the hell do people even read my stories?

 

[BlackShanglan]

This is to tease a certain horsey


"It was a lovely day for a ride, well least Master thought so. "

Dear lord, where are the naked slaveboys to fan me? I'm feeling somewhere overheated.

Shanglan

 

[BlackShanglan]

"The onset of February had done nothing to ease the bitter cold of winter."

How utterly not tantalizing. Why the hell do people even read my stories?

Because you set mood wonderfully. Nice opening image - bitter cold, unforgiving frost-biting weather. It promises a wonderful contrast to the heat of passion, and a nicely gritty feel to the story.

But I'm sure you know that

Shanglan

 

[BlackShanglan]

The answer to this question is so lengthy, this program will not accept it. Please refer to my master's thesis for a complete explanation.

I did, but for some reason all it says is "Stop. Please, God, stop."

Shanglan

 

[brightlyiburn]

Because you set mood wonderfully. Nice opening image - bitter cold, unforgiving frost-biting weather. It promises a wonderful contrast to the heat of passion, and a nicely gritty feel to the story.

But I'm sure you know that

Shanglan

Well, I hadn't thought of it in quite that much depth, but I suppose I can see that. Although I imagine anyone looking for a quick fix would take one look at that line and hit the back button.

 

[BlackShanglan]

Well, I hadn't thought of it in quite that much depth, but I suppose I can see that. Although I imagine anyone looking for a quick fix would take one look at that line and hit the back button.

All the better. I prefer to scare off the straights from the first. At least, that's my stated reason for beginning a work of erotic fiction with twelve lines of Anglo-Saxon poetry. It's not just incompetence. Honest.

Shanglan

 

[brightlyiburn]

All the better. I prefer to scare off the straights from the first. At least, that's my stated reason for beginning a work of erotic fiction with twelve lines of Anglo-Saxon poetry. It's not just incompetence. Honest.

Shanglan

Twelve lines of Anglo-Saxon poetry would scare me off and I love a good, long story.
Wait, no...I love a good, long story that doesn't require me to work any harder than I would naturally.
I's a lazy bitch

 

[carsonshepherd]

I did, but for some reason all it says is "Stop. Please, God, stop."

Shanglan

Think anyone will publish it?

 

[BlackShanglan]

Twelve lines of Anglo-Saxon poetry would scare me off and I love a good, long story.
Wait, no...I love a good, long story that doesn't require me to work any harder than I would naturally.
I's a lazy bitch

*Grin*

No offense taken. I just think it better that I and my audience know our relationship. I try to tell them what to expect, with the understanding that some can't hit that "back" button fast enough. But at least I didn't sneak the poetry into the middle

Shanglan

 

[BlackShanglan]

Think anyone will publish it?

Been and done. In my fashion.



Shanglan

 

[Halo_n_horns]

"The detail in the painting was simply amazing, yet it proclaimed simplicity as a whole piece."

 

[dr_mabeuse]

"Sometimes your life feels so completely empty you wish someone would just come along and drive a truck through it."

---dr.M.

 

[carsonshepherd]

"Sometimes your life feels so completely empty you wish someone would just come along and drive a truck through it."

---dr.M.

You are so bloody brilliant.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

This may not be kosher, but that's okay. My wife's Jewish. I'm a goyum schmuck.

This is the first line from DavidWatts' Valentine's contest entry.

We were a perfect couple, I didn't have a pot to piss in, and Cathy didn't have a window to throw it out of.

IMHO, the rest of this very short, very moving, non-erotic, story is just as good. Check it out. Thank You For The Days

Rumple Foreskin

 

[BlackShanglan]

"Sometimes your life feels so completely empty you wish someone would just come along and drive a truck through it."

---dr.M.

Beautiful.

 

[EmeraldKitten]

"As I watched, the wind whipped through the trees, scattering slivers of red, yellow, and orange throughout the yard and into the darkness."

I just counted.. I have 6 freakin stories started, halfway finished, or all the way done, only needing the editing.


Masterpiece my ass, lol.