Talisman - Dr Forman's Discoverie

[jon.hayworth]

I would appreciate some constructive feedback on my chapter of the current Chain Story

TALISMAN - Dr FORMAN'S DISCOVERIE

Especially on the dialogue and the use of language. Did the use of 16th C English work for you or was it annoying?

Bearing in mind around 70% of the characters and 50% of the events are documented as having occured did I strike the right balance between telling a yarn and recounting history?

Thank you in advance sorry for no link blame the pc I am using.

jon

 

[NoJo]

Link is here.


Jon, I have downloaded this, and will read and comment offline.
Someone (was it you?) mentioned that there should be a "historical category". I agree.

Elizabethan period Europe is a big obsession with me. Besides Elizabeth herself (what a woman!) , there were so many amazing characters appearing in that turbulent period.

Have you read "The Queen's Conjuror", Benjamin Woolley's biography of John Dee? It's probably the best historical bio I've ever read! It's also a goldmine of ideas for stories.

Actually I have been working for a year or so researching a historical novel based on Emperor Rudolf II's insane court in Bohemia (where I believe the meaning of "Bohemian" may have originated). I'm planning a trip to Prague to get a little more of the atmosphere for the story.

Joe.

 

[jon.hayworth]

Thank you Joe for taking the time to read this opus.

No I have not read the Queens Conjuror, although I have read a number of shorter pieces on John Dee.

(This may be a Cornish Nationalist bias) I am a great fan of the late A. L. Rowse - Most of the true material comes from his work on Doctor Simon Forman's Diaries.

I agree with you incidents from Dee's life could keep a historical novelist going for a long time.

Am I correct in thinking that Dee was in Prague at some time in his life?

Hope you enjoy the read.

jon

 

[DannyBoyUK]

Liked it a lot

 

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