Star Trek Next Gen Story Idea

[deliciously_naughty]

Ok...I'm prepared for the laughter, the pointed fingers and the snickers when I admit this. ::deep breath:: my first crush was Wil Wheaton (Wesley Crusher) from star trek tng. When I was only a little older I began to masturbate...the fantasy that I had was that I was Picards daughter (yes, I KNOW he didn't have kids) and that I seduced him (wesley...not picard). I'm considering turning this into a story. My problem is how to throw in the occasional techno-babble that is so very star trek without losing story momentum or sounding like a moron.

 

[Akito01]

I can't say that it's that embarrassing at all, given that my first pre-pubescent masturbatory fantasies invloved Sarah Jane Smith (Elizabeth Sladen) from Doctor Who.

As far as tech-babble goes, you're probably already familiar with enough of the general lingo to get by, and if your fantasy doesn't involve any heavy plotting, then I wouldn't even worry about it. Play it out in your head, and see how it translates on paper.
Or to put in another way, I think even in a general sci fi setting, the depth of the characterizations is more important than the props and the setting.
For myself, it would be interesting to hear the back story on this female charcter, and how she presents herself in the situation.

 

[Chicklet]

FanFic

argh...I wish I knew Star Trek or any physics.

have you considered just using quotes from the television show? there's got to be at least one webpage with a bunch on there...

Chicklet

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Thanks for the feedback guys...

I'm thinking of several backstories for the girl "Katherine" (no my name isn't Katherine or any variation in real life...but I always wish it had been...therefore...).

We have lame option #1...the daughter he never knew he had (lame and one I wouldn't use)

Option #2 The daughter he can't face b/c his wife died serving under him (not sexually...it's sad I feel the need to say that)

Option #3 I don't explain why it's strange for him to have a daughter...it's my take on the show...why should I explain it (or the best defense is a good offense take)

Option #4 I make her a diplomat (obviously very intelligent since I can't/won't make her more than 20/21 to his 18/19)

Option #5 I make her an esign (but why is she on her fathers ship?)

Option #6 I make her of an age just ready to leave for college...dad is transporting her from home planet to earth since the enterprise has to go in for maintence.

I like options 4 or 6 best. If she's a diplomat, then it would have to be that her mother is of a different race entirely (which has interesting possibilities all on its own) or royal within that race/planets social structure. If she's just on her way to college, then that has its own complications. Either way I still need to figure out a relationship for her and picard...are they friendly or distant. Distant works best b/c then theres a reason for wes and her to get together.

Quick...to the notebook!

 

[ZIP CODE]

My problem is how to throw in the occasional techno-babble that is so very star trek without losing story momentum or sounding like a moron.

Okay, I got ya covered. I'm a huge Star Trek TNG fan. I used to call myself a "Trekkie" until I saw the movie Trekkies. Holy shit. I'm no where in the same par-sec as these people. There is a lawyer who wears her Star Trek uniform to court, because she feels that she should display her rank and allegiance to the federation the same way a military officer displays theirs. Whoa.

Anyway, in Star Trek TNG, everything that happens in the show always gets chalked up to :

A Spacial Anomaly

A Spacial Anomaly is the scapegoat for everything on that show. It can be interpreted as anything, as long as it happens in space.

 

[SEX_VAMPYRE]

Ok...I'm prepared for the laughter, the pointed fingers and the snickers when I admit this. ::deep breath:: my first crush was Wil Wheaton (Wesley Crusher) from star trek tng. When I was only a little older I began to masturbate...the fantasy that I had was that I was Picards daughter (yes, I KNOW he didn't have kids) and that I seduced him (wesley...not picard). I'm considering turning this into a story. My problem is how to throw in the occasional techno-babble that is so very star trek without losing story momentum or sounding like a moron.

I hope these pages help .

http://www.bomis.com/rings/scifi8463/

http://groups.msn.com/MostlyStarTrekStuff

http://forums.delphiforums.com/startrek/start

 

[HemlockNredwine]

Wesley Crusher, huh? I had the serious youthful hots for “Lost In Space” babe Penny Robinson myself. Of course, I was a little unclear on what to do in my fantasies after she managed to get—gasp—naked…other than save her from some terrible alien, that is. Usually this occurred following a drawn-out scene where I was also captured and locked nude in a small holding cell with Penny, where we comforted each other as best we could despite our breathless embarrassment…lots of nude hugging, in other words. (Yeah, it gets rough out there in space. Bring a towel.)

Of course, we were both always eighteen in my dreams. Naturally.

Since you aren’t strong on the science and techno-babble of Star Trek, I think you should definitely approach the character of Katherine Picard as being in the same vein. Make her a non-Starfleet, non-scientist. (Hey, it’s a big universe, right?) Maybe she even has that young rebelliousness to all things Enterprise, just to spite her Father. She just doesn’t want to hear about it, so she tunes it out, or even interrupts. Or maybe she just gets it wrong. (“Geordi said something about a paramecium coil—or something like that. I was too busy watching Wesley’s fine ass working against the seat of his uniform to pay much attention to the Engineer’s techno-babble.")

Keep her off the Bridge, or if you want the plot to include some Star Trek action, then take the focus off of the other characters when they would ordinarily start explaining something. (“Data started explaining something about the anomaly, and I knew it was important, and that I should listen, but all I could think about was the way it felt when Wesley’s hand accidentally brushed my breast in the Turbo lift. The look on his face…the swelling bulge in his pants.”)

I keep writing from a first-person perspective because I think it would be easier to pull it off that way, not to mention make it more fun, but third-person could work too, if you focus on the characters’ emotions and personal thoughts rather than their technical savvy. I think good writing is mostly about misdirection anyway. (“Beverley adjusted the medical tri-corder, but her thoughts kept going back to Katherine. She has Jean-Luc's eyes, Dr. Crusher thought.”) This way, the reader cares less about what Crusher is doing medically, and more about how she reacts to a girl fathered by the man that she secretly desires...not to mention the fact that this possibly-half-bred hussy wants to get into her angelic son’s tight-fitting pants. So, instead of going into an elaborate biological explanation about the results of the exam she just gave, Crusher could simply snap the tri-corder closed and offer a terse, “Everything checks out fine.” Katherine is left to wonder what the heck the Doctor’s ‘problem’ was all about.

I didn’t mean to turn this post into an e-book, so I’ll skip the part about the beauty of alternate realities in explaining abnormal Star Trek storylines! Good luck on your story.

 

[deliciously_naughty]

You guys rock...thanks!!!

I'll make sure to keep posting as the story progresses....

 

[Dj_Maximus]

My vote is...

...make her a diplomat.

For the sake of those who do watch STNG, it would explain why she hasn't been around for one.

Then, Picard would explain that due to his "position" he couldn't divulged who she was, therefore explaining why he never mentionned her.

Thirdly, a twist on a scenario that he would be picking up an ambassador and this would be the daughter he never really knew, therefore, the characters could be neutral to each other, trying to get to know eahc other.

My 0.02$

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Thanks for the validation DJ...that's the option I'm going with. Opening scene before I bring her in...

Wesley straighted his shirt nervously. Captian Picard had asked him to come to his quaters for a "discussion." Had he been late or done anything wrong lately? He couldn't think of a good reason for being summoned. He pressed the bell reluctantly. The door hissed open and he was waved in. The captian offered him a cup of tea and looked at him for a moment.

"Wesley, I need to ask a favor of you. It isn't commonly known, but I have a daughter. She grew up with her mother and has joined the diplomatic corps. It has been decided that Enterprise will transport her to Linsvia to mediate the current dispute between the three factions there. We will rendez-vous with the Indiana in 3 hours time and she will transport over here. I want you to be her official guide and liaison while she is here. I am sure she would prefer someone her own age." Picard looked uncomfortable sharing his life with the young man, but he would be more uncomfortable meeting the cool blue eyes of his daughter. She had a way of looking through him that was most disconcerting.

"Of course, Captian." Wesley nodded as he replied, relieved that this wasn't a dressing down. He was fascinated by the information, but would it would never do to show that to the captian.

"Well, then. It's settled. I'll send you the information. You may take the afternoon off to familiarize yourself with whatever information is pertinent. I'll notify engineering. Dismissed." Picard got up and to put away his cup and Wesley, taking the hint, left quietly.

Wesley called up the personnel file for all members of the diplomatic corps with the last name Picard. There she was: Picard, Katherine. The information came up first, and an image appeared next to the data. Piercing blue eyes, soft looking creamy skin, and a stubborn chin were framed by soft blonde hair. She was the most gorgeous woman he'd even seen! He glanced over at the data...she was 21 years old, had been a member of the diplomatic corps for 2 years, top of her class at Yale in diplomacy with a slew of academic awards. Birthplace was Helena, a planet towards the edge of known space and not a member of the Federation. Ruled by a royal family, currently queen was a woman named Meleca. Parents were Jean-Luc Picard and Meleca of Helena. Royal? She was royal? The sweaty fantasy he'd been brewing stopped suddenly...she was the captians daughter AND royal to boot. She was untouchable. The alarm he'd set beeped. She would be arriving in 10 minutes. He went up to transporter room 4 and waited for the signal that she was ready to be transported.

Then I'm taking Hemlocks advice and switching to a first person story from her p.o.v.

 

[deliciously_naughty]

The first chapter is pending approval

Ok...first chapter has been edited, spell checked and so forth and is now pending approval. It moves slower than the future chapters will b/c I'm trying to do as much set up as possible without killing the mood.

 

[hogjack]

And don't forget

the Holodeck. If I'm on that ship quite frankly I'd OD on it. These young people can definitely find some "private time" there.

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Re: And don't forget

the Holodeck. If I'm on that ship quite frankly I'd OD on it. These young people can definitely find some "private time" there.

grin...thanks for the suggestion....I'll definitely work in a holodeck scene. The second chapter will be on board ship on the way to her mediation. I'm sure I can fit it in there somewhere.

 

[SEX_VAMPYRE]

I have one question?

Will Picard's daughter be bald too?

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Re: I have one question?

Will Picard's daughter be bald too?

lol...nope...long blonde hair...

 

[SEX_VAMPYRE]

Re: Re: I have one question?

lol...nope...long blonde hair...

Hmmm I was hoping for some alien cross breeding bald head action.

 

[hogjack]

Yes

Action in the Captain's Chair is imperative. Not sure how this could happen since the bridge is usually full of people on different shifts.

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Re: Yes

Action in the Captain's Chair is imperative. Not sure how this could happen since the bridge is usually full of people on different shifts.

That could always be the holodeck action...combine your two ideas into one

 

[Guest]

Sorry - late on this thread.

Young Ambassadresses do happen in TNG. They transported a child-mediator once, accompanied by a duenna who looked like an old lady but was capable of fighting Warf.

If you ever need to explain where she appeared from, say she hasn't been conceived yet. Picard will father her later, but a space anomaly has moved her back through time.

If you really want to get the action going, have Picard marry la Crusher and her be Wes's half-sister!!

Watch the time warp thing; it screws up the grammar terribly. (Should that read Picard will father her later, but a space anomaly will have moved her back through time?)

 

[Dr. B Evil]

In my opinion...

...make Picard's daughter actually be Q, again playing mind games with Picard. Also, it has been rumored that Q had the hots for Wesley.

Or how about Wesley dreaming/fantasizing on the Holodeck?

Come on DN, ...make it so!

Now then, where'd I put that Carrot Top movie?

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Chapter 1 is up!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ok everyone...chapter one is up and ready for your viewing pleasure Chapter 1 is my set up...the following chapter have much more sex Chapter 2 should be submitted today or tommorrow..I'll post when it's ready. Feel free to email me feedback or pm me.

Wesley's Woman Chapter 1

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Ok...I just want to say that someone linked my story to fark.com...which has a direct link to wil wheatons home page...I'm seriously blushing right now.

 

[deliciously_naughty]

Chapter 2 is up!

 

[deliciously_naughty]

I officially want to die

Ok...so I went back on fark.com today and read the comments on the story. And wil wheaton has read it and commented on it...quote "oh. my. god." I think I want to die. HOW did this happen? I just wanted to write it and share it on lit...someone shoot me...please.

 

[SEX_VAMPYRE]

Re: I officially want to die

Ok...so I went back on fark.com today and read the comments on the story. And wil wheaton has read it and commented on it...quote "oh. my. god." I think I want to die. HOW did this happen? I just wanted to write it and share it on lit...someone shoot me...please.

Will Wheaton is appearing on Tech TV promoting his web page and a charity benifit boxing fight with Barney the Purple Dinosaur.
It reminded me of the story that you were writing about Wesley.

http://www.wilwheaton.net/

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